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Reviews for Unforseen love

By : negi246
  • From ANON - ChaosLacky on November 06, 2005
    The story is going along okay although it could use some plot other then the two getting together. Also there are some spelling and punctualtion errors, such as "now" instead of "know".

    But it is a good story hope you continue.
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  • From ANON - DevilDude on August 24, 2005
    Very cool but it feels unfinished (duh) please get the next chapter up i'm anxious to see it!
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  • From ANON - Michael Schwandt on August 10, 2005
    hey man i loved your story keep it up oh and in the next ch have Misty walk in the Pokemon center and see Ash and Joy when Joy is about to bring herself on Ashes cock but instead of gettin mad she want's to join then u can do the rest
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  • From ANON - ruben flores on August 05, 2005
    make it so that may or misty see him having sex later and the only way for her not to tell on him is for him to have sex with her
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  • From ANON - DarkMastero on May 30, 2005
    For a fist fic it's good. Though when you stat dialog you should start on a new line to make it easier to read. The story also feels kind of rushed and the plot is dry and straightforward. And you rated it NC-17 so maybe their should be a sex scene or something worthy of that rating?

    But anyway, good luck with future stories!

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  • From ANON - TripleDelight on May 19, 2005
    sorry, not logged in. anyway, not bad for a first time. some advice though, make it longer and details. like elaborate on the hotel room or the environment in the park.
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  • From ANON - a on December 19, 2004
    Please update i have been waiting.
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  • From ANON - DJ Rodriguez on October 23, 2004
    This fanfic is actually pretty good! You just can't find good Ash/Nurse Joy fanfics out there, nowadays. Think you can make a sequel, or another fanfic that pairs these two up? If so, go for it!

    Nice work! Keep it up!
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  • From ANON - mark anthony on September 29, 2004
    great story please contine
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