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Reviews for Space Tears

By : BlindHeart34
  • From ANON - Erica on December 16, 2004
    That was one big ass sentence....
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  • From ANON - Allison on October 22, 2004
    Hi, just wanted to review the story. just to let you know its terrible. Please, format it. Either its adultfanfiction or you, but it doesn't have periods and/or commas. you miss spelled quite a few words, and the "plot" if you want to call it that is just excruciatingly painful to read. First of all your moving too fast and you keep refering to everyone that speaks as "white hair boy" or "brown hair boy." If you want to you can just seperate the talking for the actually paragraphs. I'm soory to sound so harsh its just this needs work.

    ~alli
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  • From ANON - Seeker on September 09, 2004
    Sorry, but I forgot to mention in my last review Azuma is a man not a woman, I don't know if you knew that but if you did and again you wrote it that way because it wouldn't fit into the story otherwise, I apalogize for telling you something you already know. Anyway I just thought you should know if you didn't.


    ~Seeker
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  • From ANON - Seeker on September 09, 2004
    Okay, I liked it but, no offense intended, you need to work on your paragraphs, punctuations, grammer, and spelling. You could get a muse to help you if you want. I t would probably be a good idea. I mean it will make reading your story easier, and maybe it will help it flow more. Well, those are just some suggestions, you can take them or leave them, it's up to you though. Again I'm not trying to upset you or anything! I mean your storie good, but if you did get a muse it could be better, you know? Well, I liked it, and I hope you continue with your story.


    ~Seeker
    PS You spell Kizma's name Kizuna. Also, I guess I should mention Hiead and Zero seemed OC (Out of Character), so maybe you should re-watch the show or you should ask your muse for help, thats to say if you get one. Oh, yeah one more thing if I remember correctly Zero, Hiead, and Clay share a room not just Hiead and Zero. Oh but if you knew that and you were just writing it that way because it wouldn't have worked for your story otherwise, sorry!
    Okay, well, buh-bye for now, I really hope you continue I liked it!
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  • From ANON - robyn on July 20, 2004
    hey wats up? your story was pretty okay, but i noticed there were some typing problems...and also the conversation set up.. no offense or anything...sory if I offended you or anything. though, the plot was really intresting... cant wait to read wats next... see ya..
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