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Reviews for Dancing under the moonlight

By : syaoranlover713
  • From ANON - Anon on May 29, 2005
    I liked it, but you should og over it and check your spelling.
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  • From ANON - NUNICHAN on May 06, 2005
    I liked this story. I was real good. Still a bit short but good. I thouhgt it was really sweet. You are getting better at writing. Looking foward to read other of your works.
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  • From ANON - Megumi on August 29, 2004
    I have two comments:

    1) Go back and proofread what you've written. There are several typos that take away from the story.

    2) DO NOT use Japanese unless you know what you're doing. "Kirai" does NOT mean beatiful, it means HATE. Utsukushii is beautiful. "Watashi wa baka desu" doesn't mean "I am so stupid" It mean "I am an idiot." (I know that sounds picky, but people who know Japanese will recognize translation mistakes like that and it's distracting.) La, I , I laughed during your sex scene because "Onegaishiru" can be translated as either "please know" or "please soup." I think the phrase you were searching for was "onegaishimasu."
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  • From ANON - lemon lover on August 26, 2003
    interesting...u write very professionally...good job...^^
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  • From ANON - ShinKazeKinyoubi on August 15, 2003
    Very good, although it was short, it was very good. Keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - kmf on July 17, 2003
    Very sweet ^_^ Although one typo had me in fits of laughter: "...breath came out in pissed and pants..." Now I hope you meant that his breath came out is pants and hisses, LOL.
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  • From ANON - EcuaGirl on June 10, 2003
    Hey, PetuniaY! Remember me? The Ultimate S+S Candidate? ;) I love your lemons, including this one! Keep up the good work!! :D
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  • From Kalika on May 05, 2003
    Neat. ^^. Good story, nicely described, nice mood. Mmm, thing to work on would be the verbs, the tenses are awkward sometimes, try sticking to the same tense in one sentence. Rest all nice.
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  • From kageitachi on April 27, 2003
    sweet fluffyness. a few parts didn't scan that well tho, and in a few spots I think wrong words were used. clean it ubit bit and it'll be wonderful.
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  • From ANON - AB-chan on March 31, 2003
    You have a lot of hits for this story, but the reviewing method on this site is ever-so complicated. What a sweet story. Keep on writing!
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