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Reviews for Strangers in the Snow

By : CassandraTerra
  • From MadoushiClef on March 24, 2008
    Chapters 1-2
    Hokay, so, you've hooked me and I will finish reading, but I have a few comments:

    Seiji is the warrior of Courtesy. Honor is deadly important to him and if he were to behave as he does in your story there had better be a logical conclusion at the end, like, mind-control. Malkavian blood or something. Something that can be cured, because I have a hard time seeing Seiji be such an ass.

    Rowen better whip Sage into shape. And save Ryou. I dunno if I like this Casey guy... especially since he's telepathic.

    Chapter 3
    There is something up with aff.net that there are so many weird typos all over the place, and it's not just your story. I wonder if the constant server switching is screwing up the text.

    Ack. NOOOOOOOOoooooooooooo!!! Ryou!!!! Don't!

    ...

    Damn it.

    You know, I'm not sure if I'd go with Sage either.

    Chapter 4

    Oh my. Now that's interesting...

    Chapter 5

    Oh, COME ON! The Armor of Wildfire! Fire. Kills. Vampires. He's used to killing supernatural demons. Aw, hell. That's a terribly bad thing of you to do, CassandraTerra. You'd better not put a rape scene in this without a warning. I don't read non-con.

    Chapter 6-Ep

    Wake-up calls are good. Still no explanation as to Sage's behavior.
    Just kill bad guy. Now.
    ... Ok, at what point does Sage miss the concept that fighting a vampire without supernatural assistance is stupid? Or Ryou for that matter. Or maybe to call the rest of the guys, since generally speaking, they are a TEAM.
    And that was a strange ending to a battle.

    Okay, deus ex machina. Who is 'they'? What happened to Rowan and his issues? And some Sage-apology and groveling would be nice to see, too. And a reason. For a character strength-building exercise, I understand Ryou going back tohim, but personally, I think Ryou should have ditched him and gone for Rowen. The guys are a team. I love my OC's too, but the guys are a team, and I wish that could have come out more.

    Aside from that, I have to say, you have a wonderful writing style. You hooked me so I decided you deserved the blow-by-blow reaction. I hope my reactions were (for the most part) what you wanted your audience to say. You have beautiful descriptions; there was always a clear picture in my mind of the action. I don't have to agree with your characterization to believe it, and I believed it. Plot's a little iffy, murders could have been investigated by the Ronin, but your focus was Ryou, and that's fine.

    Keep progressing. Remember to keep clear on your themes and strateg-ize your plot-lines.
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  • From ANON - Lita on July 24, 2003
    This was really cool! I usually don't like Vampire fics, but this was really well done! I hope that there is a sequl 2 this!
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  • From ANON - Shonee on May 05, 2003
    This chapter was great. I hope to see more of your story in the furture!
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  • From ANON - Shonee on May 05, 2003
    Chapter five is getting very iteresting, indeed! There's more of a plot that I can follow, and the emotions are clearer than before.
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  • From ANON - Shonee on May 05, 2003
    I like the story, but it's kinda hard to tell who's whom because there's not a clear break in the scenes. Mo info l8r
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  • From ANON - Jen on April 23, 2003
    I like, despite not knowing anything about Ronin Warriors except what you've told me. Vampires are always fun.

    It's very well written, except for a small word usage mistake here and there. "Stratifying crunch" is still my favorite.
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