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Reviews for Sins of the Heart

By : KIKI441
  • From wyntermist70 on May 07, 2010
    I don't get it......
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  • From ANON - meru-chan on January 09, 2006
    This is a very nice story. I loved it very much but I have to wonder if this site has an alert section so I can put it in alert when you update.
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  • From ANON - Warumono_Toto on January 07, 2006
    This ff is soooooo cute
    I did like it
    really ^^
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  • From ANON - Lady_Black_Cat on November 28, 2005
    Ooooh, I hope you WILL write a sequel. I am very anxious because I'm not really satisfied, to be completely honest. But I did enjoy the fic AND the sex part nonetheless. So please, please, PLEASE write a sequel. I hate being put on a cliffhanger and then finding out that the author didn't/won't finish their wonderful work. I have at least three of that, including the manga series itself.

    Once again, please continue whenever you can. Just don't forget, okay?
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  • From ANON - Neori on November 22, 2005
    NOOOO!!!! That's so depressing! If I were Tsuzuki, I'd do something horrid and either free him or get myself put in with him... They were just so cute toghether!
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  • From ANON - Sc00byD00315 on November 15, 2005
    ^_^ Very good so far. Can't wait to read more. Update soon.
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  • From ANON - TsuzukiMuraki on October 23, 2005
    it was good, i really liked it. I only have one problem with it....
    Tsuzuki did have a sister, but it was an older sister, and her name was Ruka.
    The is my only critizium. update soon! (there better be more!) Ja ne!
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  • From ANON - Angelike Riddle on September 26, 2005
    Well, this story certain promises to be interesting, and I did enjoy it, but I feel the need to point out a few errors you made that had me cringing. If they were to be fixed, I think your story would be greatly improved. I don't mean to be insulting, just helpful, so I hope you won't take a little constructive criticism the wrong way. First, you should capitalize the first letter of a sentence only, not the first letter of every line -- that's just really confusing. Seeing things capitalized that shouldn't be really threw off my concentration, which prevented me from fully enjoying what I was reading. Second, you should decide whether you want the narration to use the second person "you" (which I don't recommend, unless you really know what you're doing) or the third person "he" when you refer to Muraki. Jumping from one to the other disrupts the flow of the story. Other than that, I can't say that I noticed any other major errors. I honestly hope these pointers were of use to you and didn't just annoy you. I really did enjoy what I've read thus far and I look forward to reading more. If you would like a beta, I would be happy to offer any assistance -- not that I'm the best writer myself, but an outsider's view is always nice, I find (that's what I use my room-mate for! ^_^). Good luck!
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  • From ANON - Sc00byD00315 on September 24, 2005
    Very interesting. Your doing a good job with the first person view. Can't wait to read more of your story.
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