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By : MadameManga

From Babsie on August 26, 2007
This is awesome. Please keep writing. It�s so hard find good stories for Blade and I love the characters. Finally some one put some sense in this mess. Magatsu, I loved his litlle speeach "You deserve each other" Terrific. I hope you donm�t make us wait much for next update. Congratulations.
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From ANON - crazykidnikki on July 31, 2007
Oh MY GOD

I read the whole thing in one setting... my eyes are about to rot out of my head from tiredness... But I still long for more! This is by far, one of the best heterosexual fics I've read in a long long time. The only thing I love more is the fact it's a fic about an underapperciated manga.

Keep on writing! I want to see this to the finish!
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From Nymphidalia on May 17, 2007
Very well done! ^_^ can't wait for the next post, especially with the different way that Anotsu is acting
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From Nymphidalia on April 26, 2007
Man o Man i can not wait till your next update ^_^
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From ANON - Avier on April 06, 2007
I reallllllliiiii loved this fanfic!!!
Its even more surprising when I found it and it had 37 chapters to boot!I had recently just started reading the manga itself by coincidence and out of curiosity for more mature and deep-content manga.After reading too much fluffy shoujo manga that's 20 volumes long and more, it gets too boring and old.When I started reading Blade of the Immortal manga, i was hooked.
What hooked me even more was this fanfic!! Its amazing! Although reading the part where O-Hama and her revenge on Manji and the drama, it got a bit draggy.Took almost 4-5 chapters for her little vendetta. My only complain was that it was a bit too draggy..but besides that, i understood it was needed to set the stage. It was dramatic! lol And interesting to boot.

I also loved the way u portrayed Manji and Rin perfectly in character! Although I'm not sure if she did call him Manji-SAN..with the politeness soo often in the manga itself.So that was the only OCC part abt Rin that I felt a bit alien to. As for the brother and sister thing..I think it really sounds funny in english!lol Of course in the native japanese or asian languages,it is used widely and sometimes for endearment, or closeness even when not related by blood.

The sexual education between both of them..and the idea of was quite funny.I enjoyed reading the begining part where manji was startled by her idea of sexual curiosity and tried to evade her using a book.While I couldn't think how awkward it would be for a male to discuss something like this with a flowering woman..especially in daily life in this age, no matter how platonic a friendship might be to the degree of being able to discuss such things so openly, attraction cannot be avoided between the two parties.It might have been really embaressing in that era. But I love all of it.

The progressive sexual experiences between the two are just too overwhealming!I like the pairing of girlish innocence with manly experience. The vexing torture of restrain on Manji and an ever present temptation in front of him daily..lol. You did a great job on it..I realli really loved the way u played the two of them out. Although around the part when Manji finally took her was quite confusing at first (for lack of indication where he took)..I managed to get it as i read furthur. I imagine it was difficult to have come up to that and the evens that built up to that..lol.But great job!!!

I hope more people would have noticed this manga and poured some fanfics already.But u did a great job..with 37 chapters and quality story too boot. I give my hats off to you. Love it passionately! Now, after reading this..the idea of torturing an experienced male with innocence on sexual encounters is quite a turn on and wicked idea..hahahahahahaa.

Hope u are encouraged by this and will write more. I'll be ur supporter!!!
Avier
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From RinjiGrey on March 24, 2007
no no, i havent forgotten you! dont stop bc i am totally into this fic, its the only boti fic i have found that is any good. i cant wait for the next chapter, i'm on the edge of my seat with anticipation! dont forget to update on MM.org bc they send out emails when one of your fav authors has updated (and of course, you are one of my faves :))

Rinji
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From ANON - Tori on March 10, 2007
As for your authors note, I'm still here. I just have been going through too much stuff to review your fanfiction as they got updated. This review covers chapters 33-36.

Characters:
Rin:
Yet again you continue to amaze me with your depiction of her. The use of her body as a tool for getting what she wants in chapter 36 was beautiful. I could easily see it as something she would finally figure out. The a woman's body, at times, can be very misleading. That using it on the battlefield gives you a good advantage. I can't wait to hear Manji's response to that verbally. Or how Hyakurin would have taken that. I can imagine she would have laughed throughly.

Manji:
Your love of the comic sings here. You beat the crap out of Manji, congratulations! The manga is always full of Manji loosing body parts and extremities. I'm glad to see that you kept it up, no matter how gruesome it got. Also I love that you played up Manji's 'honor' when it came to Rin. For one reason or another he has an incredible drive to protect her. And I love that he's willing to face any pain to keep her safe. My only thing with Manji is I'm surprised the poor guy hasn't passed out yet. He gets beaten, chop up, fights bandits, then attempts to fight Magatsu. Poor guy should have passed out on the first attack in Magatsu's arms. lol. I would love to see Magatsu's expression at that! XD

Story/Plot:
One going at wonderful. Though I'm eagerly waiting to see just what you're going to do with Anotsu. Will Rin decide to try and go with him, or stay with Manji? Japanese society back then would have told her that she had to marry someone of the same status. Also whoever she married would take on, and absorb into their own holdings, her dojo. Now there's an interesting fact, although she getting revenge for her parents, her dojo is already dead. The only way it could continue is if she bore a child from a no name, or 'adopted' someone into the family. But I'm deviating. I'm going crazy on my end because I want to see the happy ending for this story that I know is so far off.

Overall/Grammar:
Yet again your use of the Gaijin is wonderful. I love that you stuck the guy in there. Makes it seem more like the time period. Also keep in mind that many people were superstitious around this time. So especially in the rural villages, to see someone with red hair would have been a thing that everyone in the village talked about. Also I think it's interesting that all the men there want Rin for one dirty reason or another. -_-il Just goes to show you that sex and money are the two biggest factors in that time.

And, that's it. Personally though, I'd love to Rin just scream and get pist and just tell everyone she was done and walk away from everyone. Poor girl always has people after her, kidnapping her, taking her clothes off ... So I'm surprised she's been able to keep her head about her. ::sighs:: oh well. I guess that's just me.
Feel free to email me if you have any questions or rebuttals in regard to this review! =^_^=
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From ANON - RinjiGrey on December 25, 2006
hey, i think i read the first 32 chps on MediaMiner, and was pleasantly surprised to see this updated chap here :) its like a christmas gift from you to use, your loyal readers. anyhoo, love it, of course. must have more, of course. happy holidays!
Rinji.
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From ANON - mab on November 18, 2006

one of the best fanfiction I ever read!!!!please write again for blade of the immortal!please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - Tori on November 02, 2006
omg. First off I have to say the usual fanfic lovers fluff, omg absolutely wonderful and update soon!!! XD

That said I can move onto more pressing matters, such as no one giving you a long ass review. A few people gave you nice decent sized ones, but no long ass ones. So here I am to give you a long ass one. With any luck it's decent and well thought. I hope you enjoy it and it makes you want to write more. I only hand out like five of them or so in a year so be happy to be one of the five. =^_^=

Up of Chapter 32:
Characters:
Rin:
Personally Rin is my favorite characters in the manga. She makes for one of the great female leads in the story. Although nowhere near as strong physically as Manji she has a strength of character that he will never know. I also believe that he realizes this and is why he puts up with some of the crap she puts out. Your portrayal of her was very nice. Very accurate as well. The only drawback I could think of was that she seemed rather dense in the beginning. Now, whether that was due to your disliking of the character, I'm not sure. I remember you making a note on japanese sexual experience with regards to Rin. I understand completely but still. She was a preteen when her family was killed so i doubt her mother would have let her get married without knowing the birds and the bees. It was very common for samurai families to marry their daughters off early. So I don't think she would have been half as dense about sex as she was displayed at being. Everything else about her character was displayed wonderfully though. Her weakness and emotionality were dead on. Also the way you had her mulling over things and being indecisive about what she truly wanted. Very Rin indeed.

Manji:
Ah, Manji, how we love you. Nothing like a man in scars. You get special points for him as well. You convey his confusion of the enigma that is Rin well. Also his internal battle with his baser side is always well written. I found a few things kinda interesting though. The main one being that he didn't seem to have too much of a conflict with Rin making advances on him. No, I typed that wrong. He did but not for the reason I thought he would. You wrote him as having issues with the fact that she was so young. That as a samurai woman she needed to give it to her husband. While I honor that, the main reason I think he should have had problems would be his sister. In the beginning of the series he actually tries to say no to being her bodyguard. But, because she looks so much like his dead sister he can't seem to say no. So I guess what I'm trying to say is I'm a little surprised that issue didn't really come to light. If it did, and I didn't notice, then never mind what I said and I must have skipped over it somehow. Manji's need to always protect Rin was well written though. Especially in the most recent chapter. You captured the manga well but having him proceed to do a few flashy moves while talking. It made me think I was actually reading the comic in story form. I could definitely see each panel as I went from sentence to sentence.

Story/Plot:
Well done. Because you've captured the manga so well it helps make your story flow very well. The sexual conflict over the 30+ chapters that you've written have been incredible. I remember finding this story awhile ago and always waiting, hoping, that they would finally give in. But they wouldn't and I would be forced to wait another chapter to see if they gave in. Normally when stories are written like this it leaves a kind of frustrated feeling for the reader. Many writers take either too long, or too short of time to actually getting to the event of sex. I found that yours was a bit on the longer side but it made sense. Your story is by far one of the most accurate I have ever seen. There was no way Rin and Manji would have ever just given up and jumped in the sack together. So although it took forever to get to it, I'm glad you forced everyone to wait. It was much more wonderful that way. Also your adherence to details of the time frame is wonderful. It's one of the driving factors that makes me love this story even more.

Overall/Grammar:
Wonderfully written. Your grammar is well done and easy to read. I'm also happy to report that you don't bash your readers with japanese words or too many time specific terms. Each chapter has a very new ones, true, but they're easy to understand and take in. It seems like this story may be a great way to learn new japanese vocabulary. :D Occasionally, as in the discussion between the bad guys in 32, the wording is a little odd. It's not really forced, just odd. Now it's not hard for me, in fact I kinda like it. I'm currently working on my fourth year of taking japanese and know that there are a lot of things that just don't come through in translation. I also understand that things are also lost. My favorite is probably, "Pleased to meet ya, samurai-san." Even in old times it was rare for people to formally greet each other in such the way that old time japanese people did. Though I kinda wonder how he might have gotten across the looseness of 'ya' instead of 'you'. But that's just me running my mental wheels. Other than the occasional oddness of language you have nothing wrong. Your choice of wording is beautiful. Go you! :)

I believe that's it. I'm going to blurb once more just to tie up anything loose and say things that don't actually have a heading. If I were to rate this, 10/10. Where 10 is the best. Your accuracy to both the history of japan and adherence to the manga makes it hard to give you anything else. I have already recommended this fanfiction to many of my friends. All I ask is that you update soon. I do love reading this one very much and check often to see if you've uploaded the next chapter. Well I guess that's it. I hope you enjoyed this long ass review. :)
Feel free to email me if you have any questions or rebuttals in regard to this review. =^_^=
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From ANON - N.A. Zeno on September 02, 2006
so good so good!!!
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From ANON - Kira on September 02, 2006
lol, as soon as i wrote that i was like "wait, sake wouldnt ignite that easily," (although its not a fire fighting method i would put into farwide practice) anway i did like your metiphore.
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From ANON - Kira on August 28, 2006
This is a great story, one of the best fanfics i've read, and the first BotI fic ive ever seen. its very well writen and sometimes you forget that it's acctually a fic, only one small thing caught my attention, in ch 26 Rin puts out the burning coals with sand then douses it with sake, alcoholic and therfor flamable. did you mean for her to do that?
all in all though, its a great story!

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From ANON - mistressmisa on August 20, 2006
I love it! Thirty deliciously long chapters and counting. I'm a fan of the manga and its characters so I'm just tickled to have found your sexy, well written story. Please dish up more angst and a love/lust triangle between Manji, Rin & Anotsu would be fun to read.
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From ANON - Vylest on August 16, 2006
OH MAN! Friggin' sweet! x) I love how you pulled off chappie thirty and I totally love the bittersweet/angsty feel of Manji "dismissing" Rin. To tell you the truth, while I do completely sympathize with both characters, I got a bit angry at Rin in this chapter because of how she made Manji feel unwanted, if that's the word. But...on the other hand, he was sending her mixed ass signals the whole way out and being so young and all, I can clearly understand her confusion. BUT...I do think either way the fact he left her is necessary in some way because Rin may be able to really evaluate her morals and her feelings. If marrying Anotsu will make her happy or if not. Personally, I think this happening can make a lot of juicy tension between the two (if you will it, ;))
I really can't wait for the next chapter! Plz come out SOON!! Love ya
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