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Reviews for Reincarnation

By : GirlieThingie
  • From ANON - ?????? on August 20, 2006
    Next chap please
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  • From ANON - FullMetalBlunt on July 09, 2006
    OMG I love this...I practically die looking for anything yaoi envolving Fujiwara no Sai. He is flawless, absolutely amazing *has to take breath, get back off floor* Thank you THANK YOU! You have just made my day, heh ^_^ Maybe even week...
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  • From ANON - Shira on December 20, 2005
    You have done very well for your first story. I enjoy the story. Awesome job. ^_^ I can't wait to see the ending to this. How did you get the idea for this. And where did you get your...umm...info on all the stuff. He he.. I knew you were a bad girl since the beginning. ^_~ See ya around kid.
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  • From DeviousLilDevil on December 12, 2005
    i just wanna let you know that that review above is me. the fricking system logged me out before i finished posting the review. anyway i'm going to bed. later.
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 12, 2005
    hiya! you know who this is! ok. here's my verdict: this story shows a lot of potential. the idea is a good one but there are a few things that need to be addressed. first thing: now, i'm just guessing, but these events would occur after the end of the series. this is the impression i got from the first paragragh of the first chapter. now seeing how i haven't seen the end of that series, i'm guessing that sai moved on to the afterlife, hence the idea of a reincarnation fic. it might've been good to have that stated somewhere in your disclaimer or summary. some people don't appreciate spoilers andwe wouldn't want you to get flamed for something like that. believe me i've seen it done before.

    Ummmmm.. oh yeah. you're pretty good with descriptions of the characters and of things going on around them, but i definitely felt that the stroy was bit rushed. what you've written in those 2 chappies could have easily been stretched out to make about 5 or six. it could have been like this:

    1 chap: life without sai and near the end of the chapter have hikaru see saime but dont introduce him yet. so that you would get people to become curious and review and ask you for more (this would also be the chapter where some of hikaru's background like friends, habits of his and stuff like that might be found . it was really wierd that touya and ogata came out of nowhere while i was reading. i was like" when the fuck did they get there? O_o" in other words details. details help the reader have an easier read.)

    2:they meet (meaning hikaru and saime) and play a game of go then have hikaru claim saime as his sai and have saime deny his accusations, like you had him do.

    3: hikaru realizes that even if saime isn't sai that he should try to get and know the boy better just for the fact that they are simliar or something like that. sai accepts hikaru friendship and the getting to know you process would begin. now instead of just putting up a message saying months later write a couple of chapters on their bonding process, then bring up the subject of moving in together.

    6 chap: blah blah.......you get the idea ^_^ *too laxy to type more*

    oh and *pokes you* NON- CON!! you should state when a non-con scene is coming up in the begininng of a chapter. some people get squicked out by that stuff. i dont (of course) but i'm just saying. and why would ogata rape saime it just seemed really random. i mean, yeah, i get it the boy is pretty, but your description of ogata (plus i dont know that character really well) and the fact that he didn't really seem to be lusting over saime that bad, doesn't lead me to the conclusion that rape was even a possibility, let alone it happening twice. which leads back to something i said ealier: details. is ogata a pervy chracter in the series or was he just obsessed with saime's skill and how he plays like sai used to through hikaru? i need some more info. and sleep. man am i beat.

    anyway, i think you get what i'm saying. i like your idea and your descriptions of the go games and but it felt rushed and because of it being rushed, it was confusing as well. there was a couple of typos but the grammar was fine. just send me a message on myspace and i'll get back to you more there. i gottta get some sleep, otherwise i'll be of no good use @ tomorrow....umm make that today. night!
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  • From ANON - Lady J on December 11, 2005
    you might want to put a warning about the non-con...
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