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Reviews for If I were not to love you

By : Ayden
  • From ANON - Anon on December 17, 2007
    Yes there are grammar mistakes. Quite a few unfortunately. It is a pleasant idea though, I hope you'll take the time to tidy it up a bit.
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  • From ANON - chibirin8 on October 02, 2007
    I like it but one thing I thik your should change is that you dont have to use there names that much. it started to bug me, but other then that like I said I realy liked it.
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  • From ANON - jewel on June 25, 2007
    a great beginning. good characterization, keeping with the show. you have created tension, and a heaviness to the mood, a sadness to the tone. i love the way it ended. the piece could stand alone, although i would like to see the scene come to fruition and completion.

    the grammar is not bad, although it seems like english is not your first or native language. some of the phrasing is awkward, but not horrible or confusing. i actually liked some of it; it has a stiffness to it that worked well with the tension of the piece.

    thank you for writing and posting.
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  • From ANON - LadyYuina on December 25, 2006
    Hmmm, well, I found that some of the sentences didn't make sense because of the way you worded them. And the word 'grapped', don't you mean 'grabbed'? XD
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  • From ANON - Hiei449 on November 18, 2006
    i feel so bad for Okita!! damn his sickness!! this story is so good i loved it!!!
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