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Reviews for Skyla; The High Flying Slut: Chapter 1 - VS Elesa

By : Crimson
  • From SkySan27 on November 07, 2012
    Oh! This is much better than the first chapter, reading wise. Still the same hot awesomeness from the first chapter. Very great job on improving. Keep up the good work and looking forward to the next chapter, if you got more on the way.
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  • From ANON - Fapper on November 06, 2012
    I'm satisfied greatly.
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  • From SkySan27 on October 27, 2012
    Well this story is pretty hot and I like it so far. But I have some complaints. *Of course, reviews are rarely just 'OH MY GOD GREAT WORK!!!1!!!'. lol*

    Anyways the way you write is very hard to read. You could do with spacing after different characters speak and also try not to make everything in a solid block of writing.

    Though truthfully I have just gotten over a similar problem, walls of text in paragraph sized walls and not properly spacing after different characters speak. So maybe try fixing that if you can, or if you want to. But either way keep on writing, because this is good stuff. Good luck, and looking forward to the next chapter.
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