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Reviews for Portrait Without Sin

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From ANON - Raining_like_tears on May 22, 2004
I have to say that I am not disappointed with the chapter. I am glad that you actually stopped to think that this scene was needed. Most would just jump right into a lemony scene for the sake of the sex, but you've allowed our characters to -- I don't know what the right word is I'm wanting to use here, but it like you've given them more character. Ryo is a thinker, and even though he's wanting to be with Dee, you've got him needing time to make a choice. Gee it took him two years in the series, and there was kissing, and a bit of wanting, and a lot of thinking. Poor Dee, I could see him wandering around doing all that stuff, worried. I really liked that Dee, instead of thinking 'ok you take thame,ame, as long as I get to be back to jump you bones, it'ne wne with me' you gave him a pretty decent image to -- like you said -- accept responsibility of his own actions.

Anyway, instead of deducting every scene, I want to say again that I was wringing my hands reading this, nearly crying with Dee. However this chapter turned out it's still leading to that 'special' time that I'm looking forward too. Guess you had to give one last bit of angst in there, didn't you? With a story like this one, how could you not?
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From ANON - Anon on May 21, 2004
HOORAY!!! Ryo forgave him!! I'm so happy*sniff*!! I cried as I read this chapter. Can't wait to read nex next one!!!
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From ANON - aspiker on May 21, 2004
Don't worry about not having the story wrapped up. Be it 1 more chapter or 20 more chapters, it's a good tale and your tale. 8-)

I've enjoyed this so far. 8-)

aspiker
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From ANON - Kit_Yang on May 21, 2004
WOWZER...I'm left speechless on paper.*shocked and totally zoned out* I absolutely have no clue what to write...gosh, I can't use death threats, I can't call you names...what am I going to do? OH GOSH! I have no clue what to do!!!! *holds head* This is the first time, the first time where I don't have a smart remark to say! You got me good....you got me REAL good! Oh man, I'm like, babbling randomly cuz I'm totally, utterly, left with no words at all...Dammit! Now I'm getting annoyed because this is the crappiest review I've written to you so far. Well, at least you don't have to worry about I don't know, me using a tractor trailer and running you over with it...hahhahahhahaha! Once again, congrats, congrats! I applaud you for a job well done and rest assure, you did PULL this one off...I shall await for your next chapter and I'll be more than happy to keep it all hush hush...hmmm, although you better update soon, or I'm gonna lift this burden from my shoulders! *^-^*
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From ANON - Julia on May 21, 2004
The tension, the tension! I love how the description of the emotions both of them were going through, espiecally Dee. Ryo trying to figure out whether he wants to take Dee back or not. I don't know what to say. I was actually nervous about what Ryo was going to say and Dee's reaction. I mean I got so caught up in it. This was such a great chapter. I can't wait to see what happens.
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From ANON - muyoluv20 on May 21, 2004
aw man i was almost crying at the end. eyes are still prickling great job can't wait for the next chappie. ^-^ Ja
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From ANON - isukichan (2lazy2login) on May 21, 2004
yes it does, thank you. ^o^ update soon please
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From ANON - Someone Out There on May 21, 2004
Great Chapter. I think you're right too that there should have been a bit of time to think. When people are apart they usually only think of missing the other person or getting back together, but after they meet or do all the lovey stuff, then the brain starts working again and it's like 'Well, did he/she say this' or 'Didn't he/she do that'. I really like the part you wrote about forgiveness. And how you shifted back and forth to each of them. Thanks so much for not parting the two, and all that...

I don't think that one more chapter is going to do it though. What about Bikky? What about them being job partners again? There's still Derek in the way, isn't there? I don't remember anything being mention about anything happening to split Dee and him. Heck, I wouldn't mind it if you threw in a couple of chapters more just to tie it all up...unless you were able to do that in this next one. Okay, I'm just going on again. So I'll be waiting for your next one....
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From ANON - Forever_Fake on May 20, 2004
This has been on hellofva story. You really hit people in the head with that first chapter. Nothing like building up to a boiling point, you just dump us in the boiling water like lobsters! If my head didn't stop spinning I'm sure it would have popped off soon. I couldn't stop reading this fic once I got started. Usually I'll jump around after I read the first chapter, but you stopped each one where it left me having to check out that very next chapter. God, you have a knack knowing how to make it hurt! I really can't wait until you update you fic again! Soon please......
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From ANON - Anthro-Guitarist on May 20, 2004
Heh...I'm tooy toy to sign in so meh! I lUV this story and I'm not one for uber-angsty stuff...You've totally changed my view on these types of ficcys...SANKYOU!! =^.^= I can't wait to read more on this...poor Ryo...stupid Dee...Ah, they'll be all better before you know it! :33 Of course they will, why wouldn't they, they're made for each other...it's Destiny!! @.@ Well, I'd better stop rambling...it's not good for other people's health...o.O;;;;
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From on May 18, 2004
OoOoO wowie that waz great ryoan-chan another great chapter... i dont think ryo would let his currently hurt feelings get in da way of his overall feeling for dee n i hope im right, their just to cute together... anywahs i hope this turns out like angst/fluff in da end (im a sap for sap ^-^;) but anyway iz fine with me! as long as u give us a great wowzer ending which i have no doubt u will ^_~ update reel soon got it >
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From ANON - Anon on May 18, 2004
What will Ryo's answer be? Hurry with the next chapter!!!
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From ANON - Someone Out There on May 18, 2004
Yes! I loved it! I've had that same I don't want to do what you say, but can't help but to do it anyway feeling. I loved Bikky's thoughts and how you had him be mature enough to know Dee was what Ryo really needed. I'm mean, the kid was there during the two year of relationship building (while he tried to sabotage it) and I believe that once Ryo choose Dee as his love partner, since Bikky cared for Ryo, he accepted Dee a lot more. I don't doubt there were still 'battles' but I like to think it was more of their way to be close. After all the fights and name calling, how could they let anyone else see anything other? So.. as in your story despite those exceptances, Bikky saw Ryo hurting, and he was hurt as well (like you said in the chapter) and I'd expect him to turn on Dee, yet be the reason why he 'sided' with him. Sorry, just writting as thoughts are coming. This probable makes no sense.
I loved the frozen expressions of Ryo's. And Dee's 'I can turn you over my knee...' That was pretty bold (comical) for the moment. I do see Dee being the more aggressive so I don't doubt that he wouldn't resort to taking that kind of control. But I love his soft side that's getting exposed. I felt that I could 'feel' Dee really nervous as he talked with Ryo there toward the end, even though he kept himself from groveling too overly much...
You're not really going to do the lasts chapter as you hinted at the end of 12 are you? Ryo seems to be having some reservations there.
You've done excellent work. Very emotional ride you've taken everyone on. You've really done a great angst story, capturing people's attention like you did. You really hit the right buttons.

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From ANON - Kit_Yang on May 18, 2004
HOW.COULD?!!!?!!!!*huffing and puffing* I.WAS.THIS.CLOSE... THIS.CLOSE.TO.FINDING.HAPPINESS AND.WHAT.DID.YOU.DO?YOU.RUINED.IT!!!!! HOW COULD YOU DO THIS TO ME!!!! IT'S INJUSTICE!!!!!! *clenching fists and blowing steam outta my nose* You play so dirty! What kind of author tortures readers and practically make them grovel?!!! Man I'm mad...gawd! Couldn't you just like, add in some more stuff? Sheesh! That was such a teaser! I oughta report you to Criminal Investigations for the crime of doing injustice to people! I'm practically fuming with anger! I can feel it through my body...oh crap...oh no...I can't stop it!!!! I'm...so...sorry...*holds stomach, face contorts with pain and confusion, heavy breathing* It's...awakening...*muscles build up, veins pop out, turns green, voice deepens* It's...all...your...fault!!!! *clenches head and lets out an inhuman roar* YOU WILY!!!Y!!!!! *runs after ya* Hahhahahhahhaha oh man...awesome chapter as always! Well, looks like my boys are back to normal which makes me happy. I would've been disappointed if Ryo died from malnutrition...now THAT would've sucked totally! And I'm glad I do crack you up! I'm known for my bizarre sense of humor and imagination, hahhahhahaha...but anytime you feel crappy and are up to a good laugh, feel free to email me! I would love to keep in touch with you here or normally! *^-^* A WORD OF CAUTION TO THIS TALE, SHOULD KIT_YANG TURN, YOU WILL FAIL....
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From ANON - Kit_Yang on May 18, 2004
HOW.COULD.YOU?!!!! I.WAS.THIS.CLOSE...THIS.CLOSE.TO.FINDING.HAPPINESS...AND.WHAT.DID.YOU.DO?...YOU.RUINED.IT!!!!!
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