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By : iamzuul
  • From Iapetus on September 05, 2004
    I guess good things come to those who wait for them. ^^ I REALLY couldn't wait for you to finish this - out of all of the 393 writers out there you are definitely my favorite - and wasn't sure when you'd be done with it. Yay for LJ telling me you had posted it! ^^

    Anyways, I don't think I have ever seen a smutfic oneshot this long before. It took me awhile to get through it, but I must say that I really enjoyed the ride. I agree with many of the different ways you portrayed their relationship, and the various aspects made it seem more plausable and realistic. For one, the journey taking such a toll on them that they noticed they needed to go to sleep in the middle of foreplay showed how draining their lives are - and it was amusing at the same time. It was also a good point to note how Goku really DID hold the supreme control over the situation in their bedroom. He is MUCH stronger than Sanzo, and it is only by HIS will that there can be any domination on Sanzo's part to ever happen. So many writers seem to forget the fact that Goku is THE strongest character in Saiyuki - and that (physicially) Sanzo is one of the weakest.

    One thing I found amusing was the condem. I wasn't aware that they existed in Saiyuki, but then again, in a world of divine credit cards and transforming jeeps, I shouldn't be too surprised. XD

    I think, though, that my favorite part of the WHOLE piece would be when Sanzo molested Goku while Goku slept. I actually had an idea to do something along those lines a short while ago, but when I wrote it out it came out much different. Still, I'm glad that I got to see it, and that it was written by such a great writer (you did it much better than I ever hoped to be able to).

    All in all, wonderful piece. I'm putting this one on my favorites list. *grins*

    -Iapetus
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  • From Ouri on September 05, 2004
    Now _that_ is some Hot Chocolate! X D Very nicely done (er, so to speak). **applauds**
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