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Reviews for Make up Sex

By : CAL
  • From ANON - Karai on October 28, 2006
    Heej Cal! I read your story and it's awesome! only there were a lot of mistakes... but I can't blame you, english can be pretty hard. I'm editing this story right now and if you want the edited version, just e-mail me, I have an account here, Karai.

    That's all I wanted to say, keep up writing such good lemons!
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  • From ANON - Brittany/Natasha on January 22, 2006
    They did it so many times in the story.Hope little Shu-Chan doesn't get prostate problems...................
    .......
    HOW CAN HE FUCK A FREAKIN' DOOR?!?!?!?!?!!!
    that wsa freakin' funny.They turned each other on by the dirty talk and the fights i liked it.

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  • From ANON - sarusaru on September 20, 2005
    there are both pros and cons that come with the kind of fic where yuki is nice. its kind of sweet, yet also OOC, depending whether you think of it as post-series or not, and some people think hed still be a jerk anyway. well, at least you were willing to try it, and i think you mostly pulled it off. just, maybe tone it down a little bit. also i havent read the smuttier version yet XD
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  • From ANON - bebe on June 04, 2005
    for english not being your native language, you did awsome with the words. awsome story.

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  • From ANON - Ash on January 25, 2005
    Ya have to do more! I really enjoyed! =3
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  • From ANON - Campurr on December 21, 2004
    Your use of english and what to do with tounge is perfectly fine.
    chris
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  • From ANON - crimson violet eyes on November 18, 2004
    Oooh very nice. I love it when characters talk raw and nasty to each other. Delightfully smutty. Yuki being Shuichi's whore for once was an delicious change. Lovely work for English not being your native language.


    regards---


    cve
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  • From ANON - Loki on November 02, 2004
    I think that you are doing a very good job writing in english, probably better than what i can in french. (just think you're better than Pres. Bush). I enjoyed the story very much and would love for you to write more please.
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  • From ANON - Loki on November 02, 2004
    I think that you're doing a really good job with writing in english, keep it up! ( just think, you're most likely better than Bush)lol, i loved the stort and PLEASE KEEP WRITING!!!
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  • From ANON - Jezibela on October 25, 2004
    UWondWonderful writing. It's refreshing to see Shuichi and Yuki on each others cases, and turning it into something sexy. :P

    There are some minor grammar, and word usage mistakes, but other than that, you write well.

    You don't include annoying author notes in the middle of the story, or use random japanese words for no reason, and you use excellent formatting. *applause*

    In fact, you write better than most people who have English as their first language!

    Thank you so much for writing this, I really, very much so hope that you continue this fighting series, it's great!
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  • From ANON - jp on October 23, 2004
    ...That was good ...real good... you should write more I have no idea what but you should
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  • From ANON - G.K on October 17, 2004
    That was alright, I was having a bad day really depressed & you brightened it up for me *thnxwas was laughing my ass off at shuichi talking like that & being so dominitive ^_^. I agree that you need to have more of a plot, & I don't think theres a need for someone saying something like [ your asking to get fucked hard by a big fat cock ] mabye just [your just asking to get fucked] or something like that. I hope you do the threesome next time or shui/ryu or yuki/ryu.
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  • From ANON - mzblue on October 17, 2004
    Yeah thats right bitch, take all!!!!!!!!!!!! I love this story it inspires me to do naughty things. But seriously, excellant job with the smut. I enjoy the interaction between the characters. Yes its OOC, but who the hell cares when you have 2 delicious hot men doing slutty things to each other. I swear I about died with the pimp dialogue coming out of Shuichi's mouth. Oh my god, awesome job!
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  • From ANON - KD on October 16, 2004
    Really.. this is the smut-iest gravitation fic I've ever read! I like it though! haha.. Never in my life I could imagine Yuki being the slave for once. Mmmm he must be kinda sexy! hehe..
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 14, 2004
    damn damn damn.. i don't know what to say...that was HOTTT... i'll be looking for...maybe... another one...**
    puppy dog eyes**
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