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Reviews for finding Shuichi

By : Haruna
  • From ANON - Crmy on January 11, 2007
    I just finished the first chapter, and I refuse to read anymore. For one, your grammical errors are so bad, I almost cried. I'm completely lost, all I know is Shuichi was kidnapped and taken to another reality or something.

    Two you need to space things better. When you have a paragragh, you need to sapce it so the readers can pinpoint where there eyes should be.

    Also, you need to proof read before you post and fix your mistakes, or get a beta reader, who will fix your mistakes and rewrite sentences for you, actually making the story a good read.

    The plot is interesting, and I wish to continue reading it, but I refuse. Tut Tut, its a shame, you could really make something out of this, if you only tried and put forth some sort of effort in making this ledgable.

    Cheers
    Crmy
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  • From ANON - TAMMY_LOVE on April 15, 2005

    WOW WOW WOW !!!!
    I LIKE THE STORY AND I GOT AN IDEA !
    AS THE HOLE GANG BAD LUCK AND GRASPER GO'S THOUGH THE BOOKS! HIRO. K, OF BAD LUCK AND YUKI GETS SEPRITRADED FROM THE OTHERS AND END -UP IN A BOOK CALLED ERIE QUERIE WHERE THEY FIGHT TOO KEEP THEIR BODY'S FROM BEING USED BE GOSTS WHO WILL KILL TO HAVE ONE!! THE ONLY WAY TOO LEAVE THIS BOOK IS TOO HELP ONE OF THE SPIRTS WHO NEEDS HELP FIND WHO KILLED HER!!
    AND THE ONLY TOOLS TO KEEP THEM SAFE IS A TELASMEND GUY WHO IS MISSING!!
    CAN THEY FIND HIM IN TIME ? OR WILL THEY LOSE YUKI'S BODY TO A GOST AND YUKI?

    HOPE THIS HELPS SOME!!
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  • From ANON - akuma_river on December 20, 2004
    Awesome story. So Shuichi is in Fruit Basket's world? Why? Some cosmic need for them to get laid? But who kidnapped him. What about Akito? Which version are you going to use, male anime or female manga? Why are the Gravi boys meeting up with the Weiss Boys? So many questions, keep up the great work. coolsa.
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  • From ANON - TricksterGoddess on December 11, 2004
    I'm guessing that English may not be your native language? If so I applaude you for being able to finish a story this long for I know it's very hard to write in French myself for school. The plot was different and I got confused by one part where all of a sudden Hiro and tohma turned up randomly and got sucked up with Eiri into the thing into the other world, and there were some other confusing parts as well but they eventually made sense. Well I hope the next 2 chapters are a weee bit less comfusing but otherwise good job and keep up the good work ^__^
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