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Reviews for Nightshift

By : ChibiFenrir
  • From ANON - Anon on January 22, 2005
    Cool stuff, how about a Ritsuko chapter? :)
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  • From ANON - koo on January 20, 2005
    kool man make the next one a shinji ritsko
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  • From ANON - dark angel on January 17, 2005
    great story, cant wait for the next chapter
    *wants a asuka chappy* ;D
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  • From ANON - Tony B0logna on January 06, 2005
    you're gettin better every run, fenman. other than a few grammar/word choice errors, pretty good. nice plot idea, even though it's too short to develop fully. ehh what else..... hrrrr...
    10 for effort, 10 for style, 9 for execution. almost but not quite perfect. although, that's only a 3.3 percent reduction, so it doesn't matter much. keep at it.
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  • From BrianChattillon on January 05, 2005
    Well this sercond chapter is impressive on a siubtle level, If Misato was NOT drunk when they both made love,(Or SEX) then it speaks volums in a wayu of her commitment and feelings towards Shinji, likewise in Shinji's case his hesitance to engage in the act and his uncertainty to bridge the gap a bit, means he is not treating Misato as some sort of sex object indeed he is still shinji and a little better at imnteraction indeed.

    I look forwad to see what develops between the girls and Shinji after all it is one thing to fool around for sex's sake, but an entirelly different thing to mess around wiyth someones heart

    Safe to say I would hazzard that Misato is one up on Hikari at least where shinji's heart is concerned, as in a base level Misato seems concerned about Shinji and vice versa on an emotional level, whilst Hikari wants to hide the times she spent with Shinji like some kind of dirty little secret.


    Waiting for more to read
    BrianDarksoul~
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  • From ANON - code_wyze on January 02, 2005
    Wow. That Shinji/Hikari bit was pretty angsty, but I liked the Misato/Shinji bit. I generally like to hope that there's a little bit more than just lust in Misato/Shinji pairings, and since she wasn't drunk... What can I say, it had an angsty air to it, but it was still kinda WAFFy, which I like. Good job,
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  • From ANON - Name on January 01, 2005
    Shinji seems more or less in character. I can even see serious, responsible Hikari trying to keep the secret, though it's hard to imagine her being attracted to Shinji--she likes big dumb jocks.

    I like the Shinji x Misato pairing, but not the way you've written it up. It's difficult to imagine what might motivate Misato--she likes ponytailed prettyboys who try to act like James Bond, not sad teenage boys. I think it's possible to write a plausible relationship between them--maybe based on her own insecurities, or maybe starting out with her trying to comfort him with sex during the war--but this ain't it.

    Your dialogue and prose need some work. I think this has potential but it's going to need a lot more effort than this.
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  • From ANON - Mr. Pointy on December 31, 2004
    Chapter 2 was really good. I hope you keep going with this.
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  • From ANON - Ian on December 31, 2004
    You just HAD to make him week didn't you?!?!?! AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!! Gods I ahte a weak shinji.
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  • From ANON - Ian on December 28, 2004
    Hahahaha.... Now let me think, at this point if Shinji catches Hikari with Tougi things are gonna get messy really quickly. A thing like that hapening can really change a man... unfortunetly, I'd know. How, depeneds on the person really. In shingi's case I'd think he'd change into a vicious fighter who takes no shit... a fucks alot of girls... ya that's about right. He's level out only if he got a girl to ground him, thus one that actualy shows that she loves him. Unfortunetly I can say this ALL from experiance. Ah well it'd get more interesting.

    Ian
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 27, 2004
    Maybe a bit out of character for Hikari, but not bad at all, especially for a one-shot.
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  • From oldwolf on December 23, 2004
    Pretty good chapter and leaves many possibilities for a continuation, which I hope there will be.
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  • From ANON - P. C. on December 20, 2004
    Hmmm, well I'm not a fan at all of Shinji x Hikari, so I'll just wait till Shinji gets paired up with Auska (Auska x Shinji is my favorite couple^^).

    Update soon! Bye-Bye!
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  • From ANON - Mr. Pointy on December 16, 2004
    I liked it. Sure, Hikair is OOC, but it's an interesting idea and you should run with it.
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  • From ANON - NicoChan on December 13, 2004
    Hiya. ^^ The story overall wasn't bad. Only Hikari was a little OOC. The other characters were rather IC, actually. ^^ That twas good. The plot was intersting, and good, the only reason I didn't care to much was because I don't like many M/F couples. (I like some, but not too many...) But it was still good! Don't be discouraged. ^^ Write more and stuffs.
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