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Reviews for Twice Shy

By : kagaya
  • From ANON - Ingonyama on January 02, 2006
    The setting is good, and I have a thought or two...If this isn't already too old for viewpoints to apply.

    Muraki knows how to turn on the charm if he wants to. What if he tries to seduce Hijiri, while offering him little scraps of information about the Kurasaki family over dinner...over dancing...over anything at all. But the more Hijiri learns on his own, the more worried he becomes that his suave suitor might be more than he appears...and things go from there.
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  • From ANON - Angelos Inoshi on February 02, 2005
    [bows in respect] You are totally awsome. [smiles and laughs] forgive my forwardness, but believe me...I have spent the better part of couple of days hunting down Hijiri Minase fics. This is very refreshing to me, I applaude you [claps hands]. It is so good to see that there is someone out there who believes Hijiri deserves something more then the common role of "Hisoka's rival." Don't get me started on that...it was one of the most annoying peeves I found when I got into Yami no Matsuei. I'll make a deal with you, if you promise to keep Hijiri the focus of this fic and you avoid turning him into any sort of love rival, I'll give you as much feedback as you want...just e-mail me [smiles].
    Now onto the help you wanted...
    Well, you deffinately have an original and creative idea. I have to admit, I've only seen two other fanfics where Muraki interacts with Hijiri...one being where Hijiri is once again Hisoka's love rival for Tsuzuki [sighs] and the other which was a Muraki Hijiri Hisoka love triangle. However, I can sence you want something diffrent and creative...or at least I hope that is the case. You set up the story for many possibilities, so here are a few scenarios that I think could work for you.
    If your goal is to end up with a Muraki/Hijiri fic, here is an idea. Muraki could be very intrigued with Hijiri because of the curse in his eye (not knowing it was removed). Perhaps Muraki wishes to "study" Hijiri and thus he becomes close to him in a way where Hijiri believes he is falling in love with Muraki. Muraki could feign interest, such where he becomes a mentor and attends Hijiri's concerts.
    Now at this point, it depends on what you wish to happen...maybe Muraki is uncovering feelings of his on, or is he manipulating Hijiri for his own purpose? I would reccommend, if you are planning to have Tsuzuki and Hisoka to enter the picture later on...give proper time for Hijiri and Muraki to interact and develope.
    When or if the Shinigami enter the scene...perhaps they are trying to stop Muraki from his latest plot, or investigate some strange murders within the area. A good conflict may be that Hisoka and Tsuzuki confront Hijiri about Muraki...would he believe them? Well does he love Muraki at this point? Did Muraki "do" something to him?
    Perhaps, if you wish for other pairing to arise...such as Hisoka/Hijiri. Maybe Muraki did do something to Hijiri, and now the violinist is ashamed? Hisoka would understand...another opportunity for them to bond or develope a relationship. Maybe Tsuzuki/Hijiri is your aim? Tsuzuki could wish to protect Hijiri again, or maybe this may be opportunity to develope a Hisoka/Hijiri/Tsuzuki. The three are relitively close...for added drama, you may wish for Muraki to try and steal Hijiri away from the two? Or perhaps Muraki wishes Hijiri to join him in some sort of way? Maybe Muraki does love Hijiri, but when he finds out Hijiri knows the Shinigami, a sence of betrayl arises?
    So you see, many opportunities, depending on which way you wish to pull the story. As I said, my only request...is please, PLEASE have Hijiri loved by someone at the end. I hope my advise helps and i wish you luck!
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  • From ANON - Ro-chan on December 30, 2004
    Hm...Well, Muraki should try to use Hijiri as a puppet to get to Tsuzuki, and meanwhile try to break him, yet form feelings for the boy...sounds done though @_@;
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