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Reviews for What Comes After Destiny

By : HentaiDye
  • From ANON - kaze on January 04, 2009
    wow... it's been a long time since i've read a fanfic that was particularly moving. your writing is heartbreaking. thank you for sharing!!
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 14, 2006
    This is really terrific! I hope you intend to write more!
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  • From ANON - Naolin on August 13, 2006
    Interesting story. I think it turned out very, very well. I'll probably be converted to that pairing now...
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  • From ANON - me on April 29, 2005
    wow that was great
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  • From ANON - Seravy on March 31, 2005
    You, good man, do write amazing lemon. I can't believe I even thought about calling it pwp for a second. Anyways, very insightful and I've always fancied Utena/Juri. Very rare to see such a well developed and realistic relationship in a lemon. Writing is just beautiful, especially from that 1st person POV. All in all, a breathless masterpiece. I loved the analogy of Utena being a broken doll and Juri the scavenger and how that changes. The ending was also most fulfilling and just a great conclusion. The way Utena returns Juri's love is so bitter sweet. Haven't read something so beautiful in a long time.
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  • From ANON - Raven Illusion on March 14, 2005
    Hm, this one caught my eye first, as I am a massive Utena fan as well as a large fan of Utena/Juri. Utena/Anthy, while cannon and sweet I find far too saccharine for my taste and often annoying. Utena/Juri is a little less elegant but more realistic in my mind. Your writing style here comes off to me as a sort of dream, symbolic and a little disconnected but very emotional, not unlike the anime itself, which is at some points absurdly symbolic (And good god, the movie! Utena-mobile, vroom vroom. X_X)

    Anyway, one thing that really struck me. “It started innocently.” I love this, it’s like the bait on the hook. It’s there, plain and simple. It gets the double take, the quizzical look and that first interest. Then, you delve deeper. The emotional depth in this is surprising for a short story. In my mind there are three basic story paces: poem, recital and screen-play. My Excel is a recital, a listing of events that occurred with color commentary. This is poetry. It is not the events that hold center stage here but the emotions that drive them.

    If I have one complaint, it’s that your word choice gets a little too fancy for its own britches in a few places. I’m sorry but no matter where the use or what the context, the word “bosom” in something written after the Victorian age will always make me snicker. Though, on the other hand I can understand your choice of words in those selfsame places, since other terms in this sort of prose-ish story come off as crude and misplaced. So, I would just suggest a little trick I use. If you’re unsure about a passage: read it out loud. If you can hear yourself saying with without sounding silly, it’s probably alright. If you sound like some down on your luck Shakespearian actor, tweak it a bit more.

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  • From ANON - Gwen on February 17, 2005
    This story is simply amazing. Revolutionary, in fact, which is fitting, considering the subject. The attention paid to characterization and feeling is outstanding. Hentai-Dye, you delve into facets of Juri and Utena's nature that even the show didn't reach. You stayed true to both characters' natures, and created a romantic event that ACTUALLY could happen, even with such a unique pairing. And romance is the key word. There is more than just physical gratification for the reader in this story, although there is plenty of that too. There are lessons, comments, and observations about life. Your commentary on one's ability to fulfill many destinies, the unpredictability of life, and how to continue after you think you have nothing left are poignant and often heartbreaking, just like many of your descriptions of Utena. The emotions and motivations of the characters are the focus of the story, not just their bodily reactions. Every single description is calculated and brilliant, but keeps a quality of reality to it. And your lyricism! I am floored. Another incredibly unique quality of this story, as if it needed any more, is the point of view. I have rarely ever read a lemon from the first person perspective, and certainly never read a lemon fic that successfully used that technique. But yours used it, made it successful, and actually used it to add even more depth to an already incredible story. Finally, maybe my favorite part, aside from the breathtaking lyricism, is the dialogue. The entire story is incredibly intense and intimate, with both characters baring the absolute truths of their character to each other; you can feel every emotion with a pressing intensity, practically filling the air around the READER with feeling and anxiousness! Both are communicating some of the most important messages of their lives, and yet, only four sentences are spoken at all! Simply amazing. If there were more stories like yours on the internet....I don't even know how it'd be, i can't even imagine it. I know that I for one would never stop reading.
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 02, 2005
    Not the most stand-out Utena fic ever, but it is shown very well indeed. ^^
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