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Reviews for Forgetting You

By : XHidaka
  • From ANON - holly on June 08, 2005
    Hey my lovely--

    This is the first one that I've had the chance to sit down and read all at once, and I think I'm hooked.You seem to be very good at getting into a character's head and thinking/speaking the way they do. :) You are so talented, darling. Keep writing! I want to know what will happen between Yohji and Asuka (or what won't) and Omi and Ken and Ran.....
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    You know how to relate brooding/gloom in words as well, a reader wants to continue because they can imagine the way it feels by the words you choose. The only suggestion I can offer to you is to try and stay away from cliches --overused remarks I mean...I had only one example, but you'll know what I mean, I think. Of course if this is what Yohji would say, then you know better than me--but it might be beneficial to character development if you put expressions into Yohji's words.

    I really liked the section about Asuka's answer in the 3rd chapter, and the zombie movies w/dinner. Yum! :)
    I miss you darling, I hope all is going well.
    I love you!
    H
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  • From ANON - chibi hentai on May 23, 2005
    Oh, this is so good. I love Youji/Omi. I really love the way you are writing this, I also like the way it wasn't a quick "I'm hung up on Asuka (5min later) I love Omi", although i can't wait till they get together ^_^. Please update soon
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  • From ANON - Lisn on May 05, 2005
    I luv this story SO MUCH!! Please continue and HURRY!!
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  • From ANON - Heta Noitio on May 05, 2005
    Okay. Yoji is a big dumbass. And Omi seems to be - for once! - older than twelve or something. *laughing* That's a really good thing. Usually he acts much younger than he is, but your fic seems promising. You do pretty nice work, all Yoji's grieving and Ken - oh, I love your Ken! He has guts. *grins* Anyway, I wish you would continue soon, it'd be nice to see where this is going.
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  • From ANON - Sakusha on May 01, 2005
    My favorite pairing by far, even if it puts me in the 'not so popular' class. Youji thinks he has it so bad, and yes, of course his heart is boken. It killed him to kill HER. But I think killing your own brother, and helping to kill the rest of your family, and never understanding why they hated you enough to abondon you in the first place - well that has to hurt just a tad more.
    They are both a lot alike. Both hiding from pain, though in vastly different fashons. Thats why I can see them coming together to heal some of it. But, men can be so dense, and something tells me that Youji is going to hide from this recent event as well, he doesnt want to deal with it. I really would like to find out what excactly traspired, becouse one way or another , it will have to be dealt with.
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  • From ANON - TwilightMorpheus on May 01, 2005
    Very good, subtle, and thoughtful.
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