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By : firelilly

From ANON - kerrin on June 22, 2006
awww..i loved both of your stories. yah>> i sorta jsut read it after the whole thing was done..so i guess this story was posted a while ago. I mean the original and the sequel. but yes very cute. Im scared now because i think i actually am a fan of yoji/schu pairings o.o...nah...only in your story the rest scare me.....Ken/aya pairing was interesting....*shrugs* anyhoo let me not chat forever, great story and i really like your style of writing!
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From ANON - Gillian Sillis on January 01, 2006
Okay, the last review for this story! (I suppose that if you name the chapter "END" that it will be the last chapter besides the way you ended the chapter also is a clear indication.)
Anyways, it was a wrap up chapter. Some lose ends were tight up although I keep standing with what I said in my previous review, you could have ended it with the previous chapter. This last chapter didn't really held any surprises for me and I think that this will also be the same for all the other people who have read the story. And in all honesty, I would have prefered the story to end at the previous chapter but that's off course a personal opinion.
Well every one is moving on with their lives. Yohji gets turned which I kinda had expected just as I has expected Kai and Shion to take in Annabel. The baby from Ronan was a bit of a surprise but I found it kinda far fetched espesially when the mother of the baby gave her child up so easily and coldly. I really didn't like that small part. The mother was too detached from the child for my liking. It was more like she seemed to just deliver an item instead of her own flesh and blood and although I know that in real life there are mothers who don't feel anything for their own child, it just felt wrong here.
And we ended where we begun with sex between our two main characters. We're back at the beginning! But I must say I never tried to have sex on the beat of music, maybe I should try it out sometimes, LOL. I think that Ran must have appreciated Ken's little dance very much, LOL. It had me laughing!
Well that's it. I think that it is great that you kept up with the story although you didn't get many response for reviews from readers. I can imagine that it must have been hard to then keep continuing a story. You have a strong and great chararcter!!!
Kisses and hugs
Gillie
And thank you for taking us with you on this fantastic journey!!!!

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From ANON - Gillian Sillis on December 31, 2005
Okay, no fair. I thought that I would have been able to give everyone their review before the end of the year and now you have updated again (pouts). Well then I guess you'll just have to do with the review for chapter 17 and the next review will be coming to you next year (oh, this sounds strange!).
Okay, the chapter was mostly fighting with the occasional death of some one of the gang which didn't really feel that sad seeing as none of the key players died (Hiroshi not included and we are glad that he is dead), if you get what I mean.
Now let's see what I can say about the whole fighting thing. Let us start with saying that I agree totally with Ken that Hiroshi definetely was determined. He had already recieved so many blows and some very severe blows yet he still always got back up and continued the fight. There was no way in hell that he was just going to roll over and play dead. He really sold his life at a high price!
Ah there was still time for romance even during a heated battle. I laughed when I read how Kai and Shion just kissed each other in the middle of the battlefield with all these evil creatures still running around. It just made me kinda think of something like "okay time for a commercial break from all this fighting so let us just have two lovers kiss each other and then we had back into the fight", I hope you get what I mean here cause it's kinda hard to explain what I mean.
Uhm a thousand or more creatures still to kill off after Hiroshi is gone? Isn't that a bit much? I know Ken and Ran's group was also big but still. They have been killing already a lot of these creatures while Ken faced off against Hiroshi and then to still have so much evil creatures to kill after that, it just seems a bit too much! By the way I thought that those creatures would have died spontanious after Hiroshi was killed (something like that they were connected to Hiroshi and couldn't exist without him).
I loved those creatures that came off the walls! It made those creatues even more evil and the battle more heated. But Ken was commanding his gang very well and those wall creatures didn't really stand much off a chance. Poor creatures, LOL.
Well in the end there were more dead then Crawford had forseen. Is he loosing his touch????
Ah, I had to blink back tears when Ran and Ken were united. It was very beautiful!!! Finally they were back together as they should be! It was really a very beautiful scene to imagine.
But Annabel really is something. She really has all these strange powers and I still wonder what the heck she is exactly.
Ronan's goodbye to Kai was also beautiful. It made me smile sadly.
That Ken is feeling oddly happy and pained at the same time is only normal. Many of his friends have died in the fight but at the same time they got rid of Hiroshi and he is now back reunited with Ran. Any one in that position would feel conflicted!
And seeing as you updated, this chapter isn't the end yet but still it also could have been the end. I already imagined them all leaving the battlefield with then music starting to play and end credits rolling over the screen. So if you would have wanted it, you could have ended the story here.
Have a Happy New Year and till next year!!

Kisses and hugs
Gillie
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From ANON - Gillian Sillis on December 18, 2005
Okay, slipping you back in two other reviews seeing as you really don't seem have too much luck with reviews. Where the hell are all those other people who read this story!!!!
Anyways, I had the feeling that you did kind of a rush job here. It's like you suddenly want the story to be finished and so you just start making jumps in the story that seem a little bit rash. For example last chapter Ken was nearly dying from sorrow cause he had lost Ran and now all of a sudden Ken has decided that it is enough and goesout to get Ran back. You could have done more with this psychological. But well you didn't.
So we are in the process of saving Ran and getting rid of Hiroshi. Of course Kenken should have known better then to think that he could just slip away like that. I'm sure that the others were keeping taps on him expecting him to go after Hiroshi or do something other foolish act which they could prevent then. Besides Ken isn't the only one who has business to settle with that jerk of an Hiroshi. Hiroshi has made the whole groupe suffer too much to just think that he would get away with it like that.
Off course Hiroshi is Kens. But I'm guessing that the rest of the group is happy enough with killing of Hiroshi's creatures and thus hurting him like that. And the groupe is doing a terrific job with that. No wonder that Hiroshi seems to get angrier and angrier by the minute. He is fighting a loosing battle from which he had first expected to win. Not only does his army get annihalated, he is also no match against Ken who uses his head and calm in this fight (which is the best thing to do when you are fighting someone) instead of letting himself get lost in his rage like Hiroshi is doing. By the way I loved it how you let those creatures appear from out of the wood works, it made them even more develish!
So they will need Annabel to get rid of Hiroshi, this doesn't how ever mean that they can't inflict some serious damage on Hiroshi and it seems that our Kenken knows this very well and is taking this job to heart. But I must say that Hiroshi does deserve an award for continuing the fight even after his ribs are broken, his leg is broken and his arm is bleeding severely. It mustn't be easy to continue to fight like that yet he is a vampire and he is outraged so he probably doesn't even feel the pain at the moment.
And yes we got our three people who would die during the fight against Hiroshi although the question remains if we can count our two previous victims among the three that would die cause they aren't really dead which the end of the chapter also proves. Question remains here also how they came back to live but I'm betting here on Annabel.
Oh and I also loved the line where you said that Shion was so busy fighting that he wouldn't even noticed his hair set on fire. I laughed at this cause I could already imagine it. Shion's hair catching fire and he just calmly fighting on like nothing has happened or like he doesn't feel the heat on his head.
Well that's it for me. I'll probably won't review anymore before Christmas and the end of the Year so Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year. May the muses stand by you also in the upcoming year!
Kisses and hugs
Gillie

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From ANON - Gillian Sillis on December 08, 2005
So you did give up on waiting for other people to review. It's a shame that not more people just take the time to say something about the story cause it does get a lot of hits. Anyways, it was a short chapter (I'm guessing it's just a chapter to get from one point to another) with lots of sex (unwanted or not), tears, deranged minds,... Let's see what I've got written down.
Uhm, to begin with I am surprised that Hiroshi did keep his promise and released the others. I would have thought that he would have given it some kind of twist so that he didn't have to hold up that end of the deal but I guess that I am wrong. So did he also release Annabel or not cause she could be dangerous for him.
Ah you let Ken remove the cross from Ran! That is so sad (yes it is now a sad day in fan fiction land). But I loved how you let Ran think about how he had been naked for thousand of years but that he never felt it till now. It's so beautiful said and it just proves that Ran and Ken belong together!
But why is Ken giving up that easily?! It's not like Ran decided to stay with Hiroshi out of love. He only made that choice so he could protect his friends. So why aren't they planning on how they can get Ran back and how they can get rid of Hiroshi? (Gillie whacks the whole group on their head a few times and looks annoyed at them.)
So Ken has never really been in love before? I thought that he had also loved those other guys that he had been dating before Ran but that those jerks just mistreated poor Kenken. And speaking of mistreating, Ken really hasn't had much luck in the love department. I can totally understand why Yohji wants to see Ken happy and back with Ran. Those two just belong together, they are like two sides of one coin. Soulmates!
Ah so typical for Ken to always be there for his friends no matter what and accept them as they are. Yohji truelly is blessed with such a friend and I'm glad that he realises this.
Shion and Kai's break-up doesn't really surprise me. I would have thought that founding out that you look just like Shion's dead wife would have been enough for Kai to break it off. I mean, how the hell do you know if Shion loves you for who you truelly are or just for who you look like?
I wouldn't call what Ran is undergoing now "cheating". Ran is definitely not enjoying himself and this is just rape. No matter how you look at it, it comes down to rape and nothing else!
Ha but even now Ran and Ken are still connected through their link (like those two need objects for that). Hiroshi will never be able to break that link. Ken and Ran belong together (okay that's the third time that I'm saying this so it must be true) and nothing will keep them apart!
Hiroshi just reminds me of a spoiled brat. He wants something and when he has it, he's not satisfied with it. Just like a spoiled brat.
And Ran being Hiroshi's new toy until forever???!!! We'll just see about that!!!!

Kisses and hugs
Gillie

PS: if you are serious about updating at a quick pace, then I warn you that I probably won't be able to keep up with reviewing. I've got a pile of work waiting for me and other stories that I still need to review. I just squezed you in for this one time but to be fair in reference to the other writers, the next update will just come on the pile of chapters to review and then you will have to wait till the others are done (which may take a few weeks I'm afraid). It's just a warning so that you know that I'm still following the story even though I'm not reviewing.
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From ANON - Gillian Sillis on November 09, 2005
Well, if I do the two chapters in one review, does it then count for two reviews or not? Anyways, I once again have this feeling like you rushed with these chapters (but I can be wrong, it's just my impression). I also had the feeling that these chapters were more just space filling cause not really a lot has happened. So I also don't really have much to say about them. Uhm, let me see what I can say.
Well it seems that only Hiroshi is having fun with all his torturing and raping of the group.
The mystery about Ken is finally solved. He is indeed a vampire but Hiroshi just doesn't know it. I wonder why he can't sense it.
Annabel remains just a mystery with her being able to keep our supposedely dead vampires alive. So once again the question arises: Who or what is she?
Crawford seems to know more about it all and my question is then, if he knows that those two supposedly dead vampires aren't dead, are there then still three people who need to die or did he count those two supposedly dead vampires into his saying that three would die?
Poor Ken is having a meltdown. But hey who can blame him? Seeing your friends get raped and killed, knowing your lover has been raped and you couldn't do anything about it and then getting raped yourself a few times. It would throw any sane man into the pool of insanity.
And Ran sacrificing himself (yuk, now he has to kiss Hiroshi voluntarily) to protect Ken and his friends but which won't do much good for Ken' self esteme. Now he has another point to feel guilty about.
Well I hope you'll get your reviews you want, this is at least one.

Kisses and Hugs
Gillie

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From ANON - Gillian Sillis on October 20, 2005
So, should I decline on writing a review for this chapter so that you need two other people to review it, LOL? Well all I can say is that you are totally right to use a little pressure cause I've seen that a lot of people read your story and it does seem strange that no one else reviews it (hope I don't scare people of). Anyway, if you keep updating at this pace (isn't this the third update in a week time?) I don't think that even I will be able to follow with reviewing seeing as starting tomorrow I have a stack of work waiting for me (no more holiday for me). But on to the chapter.
It was short and brutal. I'm glad that at least Hiroshi is still enjoying himself cause I don't think anybody else is. Although after the whole rape and torture sequence that didn't really go to his plan, he may be a bit frustrated now (like he wasn't already!).
Well our Ran won! Let this be a lesson. If you are ever abducted together with your lover by a crazy ex who still has the hots for you, just keep whimpering for your lover and at the end your ex will throw you in the cell with him and thus you are reunited.
But why didn't Ran recognise Annabel??? In the previous chapter she told Ken that she knew Ran and Hiroshi before Hiroshi had been killed so why didn't Ran go like "Annabel?? What the heck are you doing here?" And then Annabel could go like "Well, to be honest I'm just hanging around. So what are you doing here? Oh have you seen Hiroshi? Doesn't he look great? Having been dead really has done wonders for him, don't you think?" (just kidding with this last part)
Poor Kai and Yohji. Their relationship with their lover is reduced to them being food for their lovers. Let us just be glad that they truelly love them and don't suck them dry. Yet this does mean now that they are both tainted and thus better traceble for vampires.
But why the hell is Hiroshi rapping Ken himself? Why not let one of your minions do it so that you won't dirty your body by having sex with Ran's lover? Oh yeah, I forgot, Hiroshi loves raping people and torturing them. How stupid of me to forget this.
Ken really has a strong personality! Undergoing this rape and torture without making a sound and at the same time comforting and supporting your lover, man you really have to have some strong character. He demonstrates here some real strenght! I loved by the way how you made Ken and Ran lock eyes during this whole experience cause it made the whole thing even more powerful if you get what I mean.
But letting this all happen before everyone Ken knows, well that is just twisted from Hiroshi and I wonder if this won't leave any emotional or psychological scarring on Ken. Rape is already something hard to deal with, but when it happens while all your friends and lover have to watch on, well it's enough to leave the country, change your name and disappear forever out of all their lives. If it would have happened to me, I don't think I could live with the shame (eventhough I would know I couldn't anything about it).
Ken's plan was a really a good one. It must have been strange for Hiroshi that no one was screaming or so when he had expected that to happen. That silence must have been extra deafening and extra hard. And it really seems to have made him lost all the pedals, the little bit of sanity he still had left (if we at least can say that he was still a bit sane).
Well Kai isn't a kitten to take on without gloves. She really knows where to kick!!! You just have to love the girl! But poor Ronan. Although I must say that he died for a beautiful reason. He died in order to save the one he loved. Hell, what we don't do for love! This does mean that we have our first death of the tree. One down, still two to go! So watch your back kiddies!!!

Kisses and hugs
Gillie

PS: is it really such a smart idea of Hiroshi to have let the whole gang stay together instead of putting them back in their own cells?

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From ANON - Gillian Sillis on October 18, 2005
Whoah, talk about a quick update! Not that I complain, but I was just surprised it was so fast.
Well I guess that if Hiroshi has kidnapped all of Ran and Ken's friends that he has indeed enough victims who can fulfill the roll of one of those three people who will be death at the end of the fight.
I was surprised that the minions of Hiroshi had some sort of power that deflected Nagi's power. It really turned the group of boys into sitting ducks but I think we can savely say this for the whole gang seeing as no one was able to stay out of the clutches of Hiroshi. But it still does make you wonder where those minions got their powers from. Did they receive them from Hiroshi and seeing as they are this strong (I thought they would be push-overs), the fight against Hiroshi has certainly taken on a whole different dimension. Namely the one of "Hell, we are in deep shit!".
As for Ronan, let me just agree with his brother that he was a fool for letting Kai slip through his fingers. He had this really wonderful girl and he dumped her (Gillie whacks Ronan on the head a few times while saying that he really is a dumbass.).
So what will this power be that Crawford is talking about? Is it Annabel that he is referring to? But more on her later on in this review.
Well I must say that I was surprised to learn that Kai and Shion are also captured. I thought that they were already long gone. Guess I was wrong! But Hiroshi really is stupid for underestimating Kai. "Never underestimate your enemy Hiro-boy." Okay that he slipped Shion this blood thinner to make him weaker but he should have also seen what danger Kai could represent. After all the girl was already in his possession for three days of torture without breaking so it should have given him some idea about Kai's true strenght.
But I'm getting ahead off myself. I'm glad that Ken's parents are safe cause when you made Ken show there up for help I thought that Hiroshi would also drag them into it all. Lucky for them that Ran was so smart to hide them in the basement but I think that they must have a lot of questions now about what the hell has happened and why. Beside that, they will probably be pretty worried about Ken. Hell they have just refound their son after all these years and now he has been taken away from them again.
Uhm what does Hiroshi mean with "hurting Schuldig for touching what's mine". Did Schuldig have sex with Ran? I know that Ran took Schuldig in and trained him, but was there something more between the two of them?
Hiroshi is really sick! Doesn't he realise that Ran is only having sex with him to prevent Hiroshi from hurting someone else? There is no love involved so how can he be happy with that? Yep he is definately a real sicko! Maybe he should consider some therapy, LOL.
Anyway, let's take a better look at Annabel. I really loved the way she presented herself to Ken. It made me smile and think about how small children are learned to present themselves properly at strangers. She is really brought up nicely. But who or what is she? She brought Hiroshi back from the death and she can sent him back, so how come? How come that she has this kind of power and how did she got involved with Ran and Hiroshi cause she herself tells Ken that she knew Ran and Hiroshi when everything was still lovy-dovy and Hiroshi hadn't died yet. And I agree with Ken that Annabel shouldn't feel guilty about all that is happening. I'm sure that if she had known at forehand the outcome of retrieving Hiroshi's soul, she wouldn't have done it. She really just thought that she did the right thing by bringing Hiroshi back. And it was nice to let Ken say this and comfort her. It is just so typically Ken. No matter what, he never wants others to feel bad about something. He's just great!!! (Yes, I am a huge Ken lover.)
But how did Annabel suddenly get out of her cage and in Ken's? First she is in a seperate cage from Ken and in the end they are all of a sudden in the same one. It's a little confusing. But let me say that Hiroshi made a big mistake by putting Ken in Annabel's neighbourhood cause now Ken knows about her existence and that she can send Hiroshi back. Hiroshi better should have kept Annabel a secret cause Ken would be an idiote not to use this knowledge! It's just a shame that she can't use her powers on the cagedoor like she did on Ken's chains.
Well Kai didn't need someone to break her chains. You just have to love that girl and I totally agree with her comment about Disney movies if this would be the end (which of course isn't). It was a clever find of you to put this comment about Disney movies in. Thumbs up for it cause it kinda made the story a bit more realistic. Hey, they have Disney in that reality!
So what does Hiroshi still have in store for poor Ken and all the others on who he wants to revenge himself? And what will happen to Annabel? Guess we'll just have to tune in for the next chapter.

Kisses and Hugs
Gillie

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From ANON - Gillian Sillis on October 16, 2005
Hey, this time a more positive review cause it seems that you are back!!! (and I'm glad for that)
Let us start with the hot and steamy Ken and Ran. I laughed when Ken went in search for some lube, ran in his mother and she asked him if she could get him something. Man just imagine Ken standing there and saying "Uh yeah mom. I want to make hot and steamy love with Ran but we don't have any lube. Do you have something we can use in stead??? Some oil or something like that?" Luckely it didn't come to that and was Yohji there on who you can always count in such situations. Although I do wonder why he had lube with him? Does he always walk around with it just in case?
But hell I wouldn't like to be Yohji for the moment. Knowing that the battle with Hiroshi is far from over (which the others also know) and that in the end three will die (which the others don't know except for our Crawford). Man just knowing this and then also not knowing who will be the unlucky ones would just make me crazy and I would wish that Crawford never said something to me. This does however made me think about the situation Crawford is in. Having these visions always seemed to me to be cool but now we suddenly get to see the downside of them and it just makes me pity Crawford that he has to live with that gift. His talent is a curse at the same time.
The conversation between Ken's mom and Yohji was superb! There were a lot of nice replies here. To start with Yohji saying "What is not important, plus if your son tried to ask you for what I gave him he would have passed out on the floor." I really laughed at this one and I'm sure that it was the absolute truth. But this made poor Ken's mom really think about other horrible things Ken could have asked for and when Yohji said it was something to relax Ran and Ken, I bet she was thinking of drugs. So it was nice of Yohji to help her out of her misery and just tell her what Ken was searching for.
What Yohji told Ken's mom about Ran and Ken's relationship was so true! Ran really has this tendency to confess everything to Ken and Ken is just so forgiven about it all. Their relationship is really nothing to worry about although I can understand Ken's mom worries. It seems poor Kenken really never has had good luck with the guys he dated. Luckely for Ken he could always count on Yohji and Kai. And speaking of Kai, I would loved to have been there when she gave that ex-lover of Ken the beating of his life. She really is sometimes more a boy then a girl, LOL.
But what to think about the cries from Ran that were heard all over the house?? It must really have been some damn good sex, LOL! Yet if I was Ken I kinda would be embarresed that my parents could hear it all. Hell I don't even dare to have sex in my parents house if they are at home just for that reason!
So now that we are speaking about Ken and Ran's hot sex, let us just continue there. I snickered at Ran's reply when Ken asked him how Ran wanted to do it. Somehow I doubt that Ken was asking for the reply Ran offered. Of course Ran wanted to do it with Ken, I think that was obvious to all of us but still it was a sweet reply from Ran and I'm sure that it broke some of the tension that was lingering in the room. Ken giving Ran a massage to help Ran relax was very nice. I would never have thought about something like that (I would be thinking about taking things slow and the least hurtful) but it was lovely. Nice one!
I also laughed with the whole thing about their conversation about running baths for princess'. It really brought back memories, LOL.
So the link between Ran and Ken is giving troubles. As soon as I read this, I immediately put the blame (although the word blame sounds a bit harsh) with Ran. I immediately thought that it was just something psychological, that Ran felt ashamed or something like that about what had happened and that this was interferring with his link with Ken. That he was afraid that Ken wouldn't want him anymore or something like that and as I read on, my suspicions got confirmed. But what was this move from Ran to tell Ken that he didn't love him anymore? Hell why not just confess that you can't feel your link anymore instead off pulling something this drastic out of the cupboard? Or why not just wait a little longer and see if the link doesn't return cause Ran has gone through a lot these past days and this strain could also be getting in the way of your link. Luckely Ken isn't so dumb and did he make Ran confess the truth.
And this brings us to a very real problem that has been there already for a while (I know I've made reference to it at times already) and that explains a lot about Ran's sudden change of character. Your conversation between Ken and Ran about this all explained a lot and it was a very good explanation. I only hope that we'll get our confident Ran back in the future cause I miss him. So let me just join Ken in his "I kind of like you cocky." By the way the part where Ken holds this speech about needing someone and loving someone was just superb! It was a great speech (such wisdom) and it held a lot of truth! So thumbs up for this part!!!
And as we come to the end of the chapter (way too soon for my liking!!!) let me just say that the part where Ran and Ken are lying in bed and Ran is teasing Ken about his odd sleep positions was very KAWAII!!! The way Ken reacted to Ran's teasing just made me want to jump the poor boy and hug him to death!
Before I finish, just one more thought of my own that has started plagueging me while I was reading the chapter. I just can't help but wonder now if one of the two dies (Ran or Ken), will the other be able to go on with his life? And I mean really moving on with finding maybe new love, being happy,... Just something that's now stuck in my head.
Anyways I'm glad that your writting is back up to what I am used to from you. It was a superb chapter that I truelly enjoyed reading! Keep this up, okay?

Kisses and hugs
Gillie
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From ANON - Gillian Sillis on October 02, 2005
Whoah such a quick update! Not that I'm complaining at all, LOL.
The beginning was so cute! That scene where Ran and Ken were lying in the bed having that conversation about why Ran didn't want to open his eyes was just KAWAII!
But I do have some criticism this time cause I found that the story was totally going out of character in this chapter. I had real problems with the interaction there was all this time with Ken's family. Ken's mom immediately touching her son's lover, Ran holding on to the skirt of Ken's mom, Ran being carried to the bathroom in front of anyone who wants to see that,... It just seemed out of touch with the story. I mean why did Ran grab Ken's mom's skirt to ask about Kai? He could have waited till she was out of the room and ask Ken instead (that's what I would have done if I were Ran. Ran doesn't really know this people yet and he's just gone through this whole ordeal, so ...) Or what to think about being carried to the bathroom in front of Ken's father's eyes? If I was Ran I would have demanded Ken to put me down and walk to the bathroom on my own.
I also find it very strange that Ken or Ran didn't have a problem with Ken's mom entering the room and starting a conversation while Ran and Ken were lying so intimate together. If it was me with my boyfriend, I would just die from embarassement!
And how Ran is showing so openly his weak side also bugs me. I always thought that Ran was stronger and that he wanted to keep that image in front of others also. So to just crawl onto Ken's lap and hidding your face in Ken's shoulder while all these other people are there, is just strange! And if I think a little more about it, then I would almost say that Ran was almost the whole chapter acting like a small child.
Anyway, Ken's promise to Ran that he won't let anything happen to Ran wouldn't really ensure me if I was Ran. Hiro did take Ran already away very easy (no struggle from Ken) so who says that the next time won't be the same? And to stay with this, if I was Ken then I would feel pretty guilty about it all no matter what Ran said to me. Ran was captured for three fucking days in which Ken couldn't protect him and he was taken away so easily from Ken so that if I was Ken I would feel like I had failed Ran in a very big way.
As for Kai's injuries, she really got off easy. I would have expected worse seeing as she had been tortured for three days by Hiro. And why are you sending her away???? (Gillie pouts cause she totally likes Kai) And it is also a shame that she excepted so easily that she looked just like Shion's dead wife. You could have done some neat stuff with them arguing about it but ah well I guess we won't get that. At least she'll be safe from that lunatic.
Speaking of that lunatic. Hiro knows Ken works for Yohji so will he now not go after Yohji and force the info about Ran's whereabouts out of him? If I were Yohji, I would watch my back.
Uhm why are Ken's parents under the impression that only Ran, Schuldig and Shion are vampires? Doesn't Ken dare to confess to them that he is also one or isn't he yet a full vampire? This is just confusing cause Hiro also called Ken a mere human but I thought Ran changed Ken at the end of the previous story and Ken has been learning about vampire abilities so is he one or not????
Well I would have thought that Ran would have had enough sex for a while but I guess I was wrong, LOL. And nice one to just let Yohji walk in on them. I guess they should have better locked the door. With so many people in the house, it was just something that was bound to happen. Let us just be glad that it wasn't one of Ken's parents but just Yohji. (Yohji has already seen them in action so it's nothing new).
Well that's it for now.

Kisses and hugs
Gillie

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From ANON - Gillian Sillis on September 29, 2005
Hey, I've got some time so I'm reviewing! I just wish I could somehow also get other people to review your story cause I know you like to hear something back from your readers. Unfortunately that is out of my hands so I hope you'll already be pleased with this review.
Poor Kai! What are you doing to her? I thought that Hiro would have only grabbed Ran but I guess that I was wrong. This how ever does make Ken all the more pissed off so if I was Hiro (and luckily I'm not) I would watch my back.
But Kai really has some strange friends, LOL. Nah just kidding. I wouldn't expect anything else from Kai then to have at least one friend who dealt in weapons. But why do they always have to own these small shops? In almost all the stories it are always the small store owners who are the ones you seek. So a word of advice: "If you ever are searching for a particular shop owner, just start with the small shops first!". I guess we should count ourself lucky that you didn't put the shop in some kind of dark alley cause that is also always very popular. Oh and what extra did the shop owner give to Shion????
Hiro really loves Ran. Kicking Ran, raping Ran, torturing Ran. It must be real love!!! He is just a real sick puppy (Ah no, now I'm insulting puppies!). Hiro is just a real sicko (yeah, that's better)! Especially since he still climbs in the bed to cuddle with Ran after all that he does to Ran. Does he really think that Ran likes that? Hello Hiro??? Is there some one home upstairs????
But how creepy to make Kai look just like Shion's dead wife!! It makes you wonder if he loves Kai for who she really is or because she looks like his dead wife. And why didn't Ran react strangely when he first met Kai? He must have seen immediately the ressembalance, no?
And I was right!!! Shion did sent those vampire hunters after Hiro but I never thought that the reason why would be so awful. Does Shion even know why Hiro did it? Does Shion know that Hiro did it cause Ran hated Shion's wife? If not then this can cause some hassles if he finds out. (And if Kai discovers that she looks exactly like Shion's dead wife then this can also create some dust.)
Why the hell isn't Ran calling out to Ken using the thelapy of their link? That way Hiro would at least haven't known that Ran was calling out to his lover. And why does Hiro call Ken a human? Doesn't he know that Ran changed him?
I have to say that Ken and Shion are sure taking their sweet time to get to Hiro's mansion. Three days to get there??? Is Hiro's mansion on the other side of the world or what??? What the hell kept them?
And it must also have been hard on Ken and Shion. Ran and Kai had to undergo all the torture but Ken and Shion just felt it all through their link and they could do nothing at that time for their loved ones. It must have really frustrated them during their search.
Luckily for Ran that Ken's cross is protecting him a little and it is great that Hiro can't remove it (Gillie sticks her tongue out towards Hiro)! But why didn't he force Ran then to remove the cross? He could have used Kai as blackmail.
What is this smell that Ran also smelled when Ken rescued him? Is this perhaps the smell that vampires emit when they are losing themselves to the darker side? I'm just thinking about this cause Ken was driven so much by his anger during the rescue that it maybe brought him on the brink of the dark side. Hell maybe this is even Hiro's plan. How do vampires become evil anyway?
Ah you are inserting Ken's family. I love it! I just hope that it won't get them in trouble.
Waiting for your next chapter, more Hiro evilness and some sweet comforting of Ran by Ken and of Kai by Shion!

Kisses and hugs
Gillie
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From ANON - Gillian Sillis on September 15, 2005
Am I the only one still reviewing this story? (looks around and sees nobody else) Ah well, then let's just get on with it.
How could you make Ran doubt that Ken was worthy of Ran's ring? Damn it even Kai and Shion aren't that long together and Shion had already given Kai his ring. And then making Ran even think that maybe he should give the ring to Hiro, man I could just throw something at Ran for having such crazy thoughts! Didn't they decided last chapter that Hiroshi was dangerous and needed to be stopped? Well Ran, you don't do that by giving him the ring which holds a piece of your soul (whacks Ran on the head). Luckely commen sense won and he decided to give it to Ken. And even if he still would have had doubts then they most definately would be erased after Ken gave Ran the cross that had been from his parents. But I had forgotten that Ken was also a vampire and that so the cross would contain a piece of Ken's soul. When I read that, Ken's gift even became more beautiful. Nice one!
I loved the part where Ken said that he may not always like Ran but that he would always love him. It is just so nicely said and so true! When you're in love with some one and you're mad at that person you really don't like that person any more for the moment but this doesn't mean that you don't love him any more. And sticking to beautiful said things. The little phrase where Ken asks if their souls are touching when he lets the ring touch the cross, was so romantic! I really loved it! And so let me just say that I love your idea about those objects that hold a part of a vampire's soul.
Uhm what is this with their sex? Are they trying to set a new record or what, LOL. And no wonder that Ken was a little sore. Man what would you expect after having cum 16 times? I think I wouldn't be able to walk any more for the next few days.
I loved Hiroshi's part. It really made me laugh when I imagined him pacing his room and making those complaints about who would call their kid Ken, who in their right mind would ever fall in love with some one named Ken,... It was superb!
But how does he want to make Ran his? Ran is already a vampire so I guess that the biting thing isn't an option here. And let's not forget that Ran now wears Ken's cross which holds a part of Ken's soul. Maybe this will be able to protect Ran from Hiroshi on some sort of level. Oh and let's just hope that Hiroshi doesn't get his hand on Ken cause the future Hiroshi has in mind for our kitten isn't such a nice one.
Back to the happy couple (in bath!!!) I believe Ran is right that the happiness is a result of the two reasons he sums up but what to think of the fact that he says that he would almost give Ken to somebody else so he could watch Ken's face during the sex (with some one else then) cause he just loves Ken's face then? Should you be grateful for such a complement?
I laughed at the way Ken teased Ran in the bed. First getting Ran all rilled up and then turning and saying you're going to take a nap. You just go Ken! Luckely for Ran, Ken isn't that much of a tease and he helped Ran soon enough with his uhm little problem. And the interaction after that was just superb especially when Ran said he couldn't cum any more and Ken pretented to go and test that out which caused Ran to react immediately so he could prevent his kitten from ravishing him again.
Okay, if my friend and lover's sister would be standing in the room while I was naked, then I wouldn't be anoyed but embarrased to death.
And what is this suggestion of Ran that he'll take Ken as his dessert? Didn't he just say that he wouldn't be able to cum for a LONG time? I guess time runs differently in the Ran's universe, LOL.
But what the fuck happened at the end of the chapter????!!! And how can you leave the story there????!!!!! I want to know what exactly happened and I want to go and save Ran!!!!!! Damn, talk about a cliffhanger!
Hope to hear from you soon again (can't be soon enough). Till then,

Kisses and hugs
Gillie

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From ANON - Gillian Sillis on August 28, 2005
Hey, I don't know if you have noticed but chapter 6 is the same as chapter 5 or did you make slight changes to it (I haven(t read the whole chapter 6)?
So on to chapter 7 and 7,5. I knew that Ran wouldn't be able to resist to call Hiroshi. Even when he tore the card and tyhrew it away, I just kept thinking "How long till you'll get the pieces back out of the trash and call your ex?" But I guess that no one will be surprised that he did this cause the connection between Ran and Hiroshi is just too strong.
When I read that Ran immediately started kissing Hiroshi, I just went like: Okay, this is something that Ken would love to hear. "Hey kitten, I just couldn't help myself, I had to go and see Hiroshi. And guess what, before we even started talking, we were kissing each other madly." But Ran didn't have to confess at all cause he got sprong (that's what you get when you do this in such a public place).
Well you just have to love Crawford for knowing where he has to show up and when. But what with his vision? Will the group be able to prevent it? Actually, I'm hoping that they won't be able to cause I would love to see how they would get out that situation. Oh and the part where you wrote that Farfie was very absorbed in his driving or that he just was trying to decide if he should hit the nun, made me laugh. You just go Farfie!
Ken's reaction to Crawford's explanation about Ran's occupation for the moment, was just so typically. If you get to hear something like that, you just don't want to believe it at first. Unfortunately the poor desk of Ken had to suffer the consequences (I love you Crawford!) and in the end poor Kenken didn't really got a choice in the matter as Crawford drags him along (no you don't get a choice in this one Ken) to go and spy on Ran. I found it really lovely cause it just shows that Crawford cares for them (hugs Crawford).
But poor Ken. It must have really hurt to see Ran kissing his ex and then even more since it is in a public place. A place that Ran never wanted to be so passionate with you. Ken wasn't good enough for that, but Hiroshi is just a whole different story. (Well, I actually think that Ran looses a bit of his rational thinking when he is with Hiroshi. He also gets consumed by lust, so definitaly not healthy. But the lust that he feels for Ken is mixed with love and thus far more pure. Hiroshi only gets the lust bit.)
If I was Ken, I wouldn't have headed back to the office but I would have let Crawford drive me home so I could pack up some stuff and go and stay in a hotel for a while so I could think about it all (yes, I react always far too emotional!).
But why didn't Crawford tell Ken also about the vision he had?
Now back to the kissing couple. Let me just say eaw! Why continue kissing if he tasts rotten? And what is this whole declaration about Ken being the only one for Ran? The kissing really did prove that! I can understand that Hiroshi got confused, hell who wouldn't in that situation? If I see an ex of mine, I don't just jump him and kiss him like there isn't a tomorrow (not even when I still have feelings for him and are totally overjoyed to see him again.)
Ran how ever does score points by confessing to Ken (and especially cause he tells everything) and if I'm totally honest I would also forgive Ran after what he said. Part of me does understand why Ran did it and then there is still this connection between Ran and Hiroshi.
The shower scene was just lovely and so sweet! And the pj's are just superb! I also want one! (pouts)
I also loved how you let Ran think that the only way to get of being killed by calling this early, is if it is to give Ken the day off. Luckily for Schuldig it was just that. And nice going Ran to unplug the phone. Those were my thoughts exactly. Just be sure you can't get interrupted anymore.
And what whit this kinky sex? Are you moving up on the ladder? And I do understand that Ran was panting after unbuttening Ken's shirt with his tongue and teeth. It really must be hard work, LOL.
And you just have to love Shion! He is a real knight in shinning armor although Kai defenitly doesn't need on. You go Girl! I just love her! And I agree that lust is playing definitl a hugh part in Hiroshi's feelings for Ran. And craziness, man 400 years is just a long time to be consumed by your love for someone!
Well, I have to say that Ran is very brave to open the door dressed only in a pair of pants and semen. I would never dare that (I can already see the whole street running away screaming, LOL! But when he at first just relaxed in Ken instead of going to open the door, I just laughed (Hey, shouldn't you go open the door?) no wonder Kai had to resort to pouncing on the door. (Yeah, she is just superb! Yes, I am a definitly Kai fan if you hadn't noticed yet.)
So if Hiroshi is brought back from the dead, then who is behind that and why? Who is the enemy that is still hidden behind the curtain? Cause I go for the resurrection story and not the other explanation.
Uhm Baby doll? I have a little problem with seeing Shion say this. I would think he would call his lover something else more suffisticater. But well that's my feelings on it. And if I was Ken I would be red as tomato while Shion explains about the link to Kai. Getting so much compliments, ...
Ken being called the stupid stick with which Ran had been hit and had made Ran to trusting towards others, made me laugh. It is true that Ken always wants to see the best in others and that this makes him to easy going, but hell that is just the way I like him!
But why did Kai and Shion leave? They just drop this huge bom and then leave. "Well good luck and hope you make out alive. See ye." You could help for crying out load. But I guess they will come back since you speak later in the chapter about getting the group back together to go and fight Hiroshi. YES BIG FIGHT! Can't wait!
But is Ran deaf or what? Kai just tells that Hiroshi will kill Ken if he have to and Ran just thinks about sex. ("Idiot" kicks Ran)
At least Ran is honest about what he feels for his ex but dragging Kase into it was a very bad decision. Of course Ken doesn't want to see him any more. Hell Ran were where you previous story? Of course Ran hasn't had such an experience with Hiroshi so his love is still there.
Ken gave a nice speech at the end of the chapter and it held much truth. The boy has really matured! But what is this obsession about sex?
So is the darkening sky a sign of impending doom? Just know that it is always the darkest before dawn.

Kisses and hugs
Gillie

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From ANON - Gillian Sillis on August 17, 2005
Here we go again.
The butler you had working for Hiroshi is just the kind of creature you'd expect. Unfortunately for that creature his lifespan was cut short. This made me think of Star Wars were Dark Vader just kills of his second in command when he brought news that Dark Vader didn't like or when something went wrong. Dark Vader also just killed his second in command and replaced him then with the next one in command. (Definately not a boss I want to work for,LOL)
But hey, did you read my mind? I wanted to ask in this review if Ken was still working for Yohji and this chapter just answered my question. But why didn't Ken ask Hiroshi for the names ofthe persons that he is looking for? I would think that that would also be a standard question that Ken could have already asked. And as for Hiroshi wanting to repay Shion, I went immediately "In which way do you mean?". I just think that there is a whole lot more behind the story how Hiroshi should have died. Maybe Shion tipped the vampire hunters so that Hiroshi would be killed and that Ran would be protected cause Hiroshi was loosing the plot (or that's what you've been implying in previous chapters and he still is wacko). And the look Hiroshi had while saying this to Yohji kinda confirmed that suspision.
But congratulations to Yohji. You really must be a good detective to be able to hid that you know the persons some one is looking for. I wouldn't be able to do that. I just would go "Hey, I know him. Etc."
And okay, I did say that Kai and Shion made a beautiful couple, but getting engaged after one week? Isn't that a little bit fast???!!! I did laugh how ever when Kai showed the engagement ring (if we can still call it that, maybe engagement rock would be better) and told Ran and Ken that Shion was upset that that was the only size he could buy legally. Poor Shion, LOL.
And I also loved how you made Yohji turn into that protective old brother who just wants to look out for his little sister. It was so nice!!!
As for Ken telling Ran about Hiroshi, I wish I could say that he did it because he completely trusts Ran but if that was the case, then Ken wouldn't have delivered that whole speech to Ran. Anyways, Ken opened Pandora's box himself while Yohji wanted to keep it closed. (You should have listened to Yohji!!!)
Hope to be able to read the next chapter pretty soon cause I'm looking forward to Ran and Hiroshi's meeting (although you always have to be careful with what you want).

Kisses and huges
Gillie

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From ANON - Gillian Sillis on August 10, 2005
Hey, first of all you don't have to thank me for reviewing, it's my pleasure. I don't review to get a thank you, I just do it so I can voice my thoughts about certain things and so I can try to guess what will be coming next.
But on to the chapter. It just started with such a beautiful description that it made me just wish that I was there with my lover instead of Ran and Ken (sighs).
What the whole Ran and Ken relationship conciders, I'm beginning to have opposite feelings about them. On the one hand I think it is really beautiful that you can be so in love with some one like Ran is with Ken but on the other hand it also makes me sad because Ran doesn't seem to be able to live without Ken. I believe that no matter how much you're in love, you're still two individuals who don't do everything together and so still have a life beside that of the one with their lover. A life they can turn to should the relationship end. But weel, that's just my opinion.
So you're making our Shion turn into e real gantleman now are you? The saving Kai from that jerk was so chivery and the kissing of her hand, oh man where do you still find men like that? It's just so romantic and if it would be me in Kai's place, well i'd be sold immediately (yes, I'm a hopeless romanticus). But I guess I'll have to use a time machine in order to find some one like that cause the guys now a days simply aren't like that any more (sighs again).
But way to go Kai! The way she greeted Shion was just superb. It made me laugh so hard! It would definately be something to tell your grandchildren but I guess vampires can't get children and so grandchildren are also out of the question. (too bad)
But can we expect more Shion and Kai in the future? "There may be something there" (just like with Belle and the Beast). So when Ken said that he thought Shion was gay, I just went: "He's gay?! (grabs Ken at his collar and starts shaking him) Nooooo!!! What about my romance? The wedding I've already planned for them?! Aaahhh it's all down the drain!" (starts crying and does a dramatic fall to the floor) Luckily there is still Ran who saved me from my waterfalls.
I really like Kai and I'm glad that she has showed back up in the story. Let's just hope she keeps popping up as the story continues.
And Ran also scored some points with me by thinking of the poor dog when the meat was totally ruined by oud dear Ken kitten. You just go Ran! (does a little cheerleader's dance while spelling Ran's name).
The congratulations Aya got from Ken were also magnificant. It just made me laugh and i went "Nice congrats Ken kitten".
But the way Aya just barches inn and Kai calls to tell them about her date with Shion, made me realize that they have really become one big family with their group and that made me feel warm inside. I really like that.
Okay, I'm out of things to say so I guess this is goodbye.

Kisses and hugs
Gillie
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