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Reviews for Hide & Seek

By : breathlessnight
  • From ANON - kc on August 10, 2005
    I liked it a lot .. maybe you could consider doing a sequel .... maybe with Yuki being a bit more dominating .. I dunno but overall it was awesome ..
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  • From ANON - A friend on August 10, 2005
    Don't pay any attention to those who seek to destroy a creative mind. Just do your thing as best as you can, you will get better. In my opinion you did not do that bad like some of the reviewer said. It can improve here and there but overall it was good. So, don't get discourage keep going at it. I hope to see you updating a new story for us. ;> I love bunnies! ;P
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  • From on August 09, 2005
    i loved your story ^.^ it was really interesting but now my boyfriend is smiling evily oh dear
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  • From ANON - Ed on August 09, 2005
    ...As much as I love drama, the whole thing with Mika being there was half-baked and made your writing look half-baked. Like you were writing a PWP; then somewhere along the way just decided to give it a plot...And honey that is not a bold move. It's redundant

    This isn't a flame, by the way, I'm just giving you some constructive criticism. Don't bother putting in little scenes that require Yuki to make a dramatic speech about his endless love. If you learned to show and not tell, you'd become a better author, and that's the fun of the game, isn't it? If there's nothing to learn, there's no point in going forward jadedly.
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  • From ANON - lizzy on August 09, 2005
    This fanfiction was very interesting. I thought that it was fun how they dressed up. You should make more fanfics like this one.
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