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Reviews for Hearts Allegiance

By : SinfulBlessing
  • From Siarra on October 20, 2005
    This fic has so much potential in it. The hottest red head pairing ever, a very intriguing storyline full of possibilities, yet... The practical side falls flat on its rear. The characters are filled with OOCness and their names are spelled in a way not entirely unlike "pin the tail on the donkey"-keyboard version. In fact, your spelling on the whole would benefit greatly from a basic spell check and as a writer you'd do well to acquire a strong beta who knows the series inside-out and wouldn't be afraid to tell you when you're straying.
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  • From ANON - MourningStar on September 26, 2005
    Umm...I like it so far, even if they are a bit OOC. I hope you're going to continue it. There were typoes and punctuation errors, but the fic was still perfectly understandable, so they don't matter too much. :)
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  • From ANON - Jamie on September 26, 2005
    *Rolls her eyes* I know how it's spelled; my keyboards busted, twit. I spelled it right the second time, as you saw. *Chuckles* I'm using an on-screen keyboard, which is pissing me off royally because of all the typos. Don't take this as mean, I'm just pissed at my keyboard, heh.
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  • From ANON - Carmen on September 26, 2005
    *Laughs* Dude, her name is Yaone, not Ya O 'ne or however the hell you spelled it, lol! And they're OOC, just so you know. You're turning them into women, here!
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  • From ANON - Megan on September 26, 2005
    Actually, it isnt spelled Kougaji either. its Kougaiji. I realize I made some mistakes..and I know im not supposed to put in my own review into my story, but I wanted to let you know that this was a roleplay on Aol instant messenger with another friend as well. But thank you for the feedback and the constructive critisizm. ^^
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  • From ANON - Jamie on September 25, 2005
    ...Is this going to be continued?

    By the way:
    Yaone
    Lirin
    Dokugakuji
    Kougaji
    (Lol) You also forgot punctuation here and there, and Kougaiji seems too submissive to me. I loved it, otherwise. *Winks*
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  • From lntora on September 24, 2005
    I always wanted a Gojyo-Kogaiji fic, even if it would make no sense from a canon perspective. Thank you for this, I really enjoyed it.
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