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By : MadameManga

From BeaBea on May 04, 2021
Stop reading after Chapter 27 if you're reading this for the smut. There's steamy tension or full on smut in almost every chapter up until that point, then just about none afterthat, with no warning from the author. Learn from my mistake by continuing to read... Even if you're not here for just the smut, the rest of the fanfic is not worth it (falls into the trap of dragging on, OC's overstaying their welcome and dominating the story, the characterization for the main cast suffers to the point they're not recognizable)

And to vent, there's no resolution or satisfying closures between Manji, Rin or Anotsu...so after everything's said and done, you want to beat your head in feeling led on, thinking that slogging through all that nonsense is gonna reward you...but it won't. Like at ALL. You'll be wondering why you were still reading and what the hell the author was thinking. But before that that nonsense, you get dozens of chapters of well-characterized and well-written hotness. Want to read a version without the AFF formating issues? Then check it out on mediaminer!

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From ANON - yarotaro on October 28, 2011
no more? T_T Love your story. marathon through it.
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From PerireAnimus on October 09, 2010
I hope you don't take this as a flame but hard critiquing. I admire your effort in this fanfic writing, but I have noticed a lot of problems in reading your fic and even mistakes. One that really irked me is your choice of words. I know you use a lot of big words but many didn't fit with the sentence on what you are trying to describe when writing a particular situation and did not seem to get your point across. It made it difficult to get your point across and it seems you used a thesaurus and picked a nice big word to use in your writing when the word itself didn't seem to fit in the sentence and made the reading awkward. You should always look up the definition of the word before using it if you are not certain of its meaning, cause some of the words you used did not fit. Another thing is it is not always wise to use big words if you want your reader to understand what you are writing. Not many people these days use big words all the time when they talk. True it is good to use such words at times when writing, but over doing it gets annoyingly tedious and difficult for the reader to follow what you mean in your writing. I praise you in your research on Japanese culture. Found mistakes on the seasons and what plant or flower grows during a time actually wouldn't, but that's me nit picking, I know you are trying to be realistic and I give you much kuddos~! :3 Another thing is the dragging on. It seemed to be dragging on and on and made me lose interest. I kept on reading but it didn't seem to go anywhere in my opinion. The new characters you added that is certainly your own creation made me want to laugh, I couldn't take them seriously in seeing they could possibly be apart of the BOTI, they didn't seem very strong to me and it just didn't seem to fit. With them entering in the story I very much lost interest, they just didn't seem strong enough characters to me. And their involvement with Manji and Rin just didn't seem to fit either or even what happened after in what they did to Manji if I remember correctly, I could be wrong. But I again praise you for your ideas and creativity. I guess I'm just one of those who don't follow along with the crowd. The story turned out good in the beginning, but then you seemed to lose your touch as you went further into the story and where I lost interest. The on going teasing of Rin and Manji sexually being together got annoying and it dragged way to long as well. Just the same thing with them in each chapter, Manji frustrated, tease, sexually wants Rin but doesn't for her sake but almost does! on and on that it just wasn't much of interest or surprise and was just frustratingly needless repetition that was quite irritating. You need work on your writing but still who doesn't? I know I need work on my writing and still continue to do so. Since English is my second language, I know how difficult writing can be but practice makes perfect! :D I write fanfics to improve my writing only, I'm not much of writing fanfics and never wanted to until I realized it would help with my writing and grammar and I have noticed I have improved over time. And I'm sure it will do that for you. I can't remember all of your story, hence, what happens to me with a story I lose interest in and I'm not trying to be rude or anything, but its just how I am. I'll try reading it again and try finishing it, but I can't guarantee anything cause I'm like this with any writing I come across that I lose interest in. >_> All in all, keep up your writing and hopefully you will become better than you were before. If you like, I can share some input and even show you some writings I have done and is still continuing to work on. I can't say they are great, cause they are rough drafts or just my practice work and even my first fanfics I have done which I think are god awful. But eh, got to start terrible to get better. ;3

Sorry for the long review and I hope to see a reply to it maybe?

With much ado~

Perire Animus
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From ANON - cactus on September 15, 2010
I just really wanted to say how much I love this fic. It's very well written and even though it's no longer conforming too closely with the source material, it's really gone out of its way to continue a compelling story with excellent characterization and plotting. I cannot wait for more.
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From ANON - :) on March 27, 2010
Hi there, Please don't stop writing this story! It's incredible! I've been following you since 2007 and hope that you won't leave this undone, since I have yet to read such a fascinating, well written story on a site like this.

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From ANON - Ana on March 04, 2010
I'm loving the fic usually I don't find BOTI fics and the ones I found are not very good but your is truly one of the best fics I read ever.
I love BOTI and I found really admirable that you was able to keep the chacteres true to their personalitys and with soo many details as the japanese names... You writing is really amazing! So I ask you please keep writing this fic I really wanna see what will happen now. xD
Oh I'm from Brazil so forgive any mistakes I may have made in this review.
Kisses
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From DarkNarrator on December 17, 2009
I'm only on chapter 2, but this is such a great story, I have to review right now. The way you write Rin, her inexperience, her puzzling things out, is just so heartbreakingly true. And poor Manji!
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From ANON - kiplum on April 15, 2009
Ah!!! You're torturing me! I finished this story in 3 days, have checked this page everday since, and your blog too! I simply love your writing, it just sucks me into the story! I've read your latest chapter on your blog and am excited to read more of Manji's point of view...but it's their reunion I am just dying to get to!!! ManjixRin forever definitely! More chapters soon, onegai! :3
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From ANON - SpazRadio on April 05, 2009
Oh I can't tell you how glad that you kept this story going as long as it is! This series is very dear to my heart and I'm appalled at how little recognition it gets! Please keep writing, you have an amazing style that just draws me in! and the fact that I get to read about our fav Yojimbo smexin' it up!
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From ANON - Babsie on March 29, 2009
Hi.
This is the bet fanfiction about Blade that I ever read. But now, I can't wait to read abaout Manji and Rin meeting again. And what Aoshi is doing back? Please don't leave this story unfinished. You are doing a great work here.
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From ANON - Saemi on February 03, 2009
You updated! I was afraid you might have forgotten this story, as I just found this within the past month and have caught up to where your at currently. This is probably the one of the best Blade of the Immortal fanfictions I've read, where manji and rin are actually written *in* character. I hope you continue this story, as I'm wondering how it will turn out with this new development :)
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From ANON - Setryochi on October 11, 2008
Wow... Um... So I've just read all the way through the whole story. *cough* >.> .> This has been interesting. You're really knowledgable and a very good author. I found myself barely able to look away. These last chapter I much say are depressing. I loved the beginning with all the light hearted bickering and such, but found the lastest very very dark and unhappy. I want nothing more than for Rin to say fuck it, tell Manji she loves him and for them to have sex in the good ol' fashioned way. Of course I'm thinking that the story will end far from that. I really want to know what will happen, I'm anxious. When I seen 48 chapters I thought "these are going to be short and crappy chapters" oh how I was wrong! Given that there isn't much in the fanfiction world of BotI, I have to say you're one of the few authors in the fanfiction world (in general) to write so well. I'm very impressed and look forward to reading more.
Set-chan
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From ANON - Babsie on August 18, 2008
I can�t believe Rin could fall for that crap! They want to marry her, to a man that she don�t know, do�t love. She wuold be better with Anotsu that I don�t think was the right choice. And what a horrible persons took Rin in. So prejudice, really ugly. And where is Manji? I know that he had to gave her up so she could be healed but is he really gone? Would he leave her for good? When will them admit that they love each other? Even form themselves? When will Manji make Rin his? That�s what we all want. So please, bring us the second part of this chapter. I Would love to see Rin and Manji encounter again. Maybe have some sex hehehehe.
You are a fantastic writer and I LOVE this story. Keep doing this great work here and update as soon as you can.
Congratulations!
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From ANON - Anon on June 26, 2008
This is shaping up to be quite the story! If I wasn't intrigued before, I'm surely now! And I've been following this story for more than a year! Congratulations, you're a wonderful writer. I have to admit it's getting a little harder to read through the chapters though since it feels like it's going a bit slower and the level of detail into Rin's thoughts gets more intricate.

Can't wait for the next one!
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From ANON - Babsie on June 18, 2008
At first I want to ask you t forgive about my not so good engish, tis is not my first language. But it will not keep me for revewing. :-) I was looking anxiously for this chapter...but now I�m so desapointed. How could Manji give up on Rin. This was soo not Manji way. And about Rin, in the others chapters, the way she is so forward to marry Anotsu...What can I say: I forseing sorrow and pain nothing else. Poor Rin will marry Anotsu problably to be murdered later, afterall she still is a samurai, poor Manji will not find redemption because he fails in his mission to protect Rin, poor Maki always will be a second in Anotsu�s life even if she is what he would like to be. Poor Magatsu will have to deal with Anotsu/Rin marriage, well mabe he will kill Anotsu for traitor, and in a strange way Rin will have her revenge. You are a fantastic writer, with a very good plot. The best I have read about Blade. And because of it, I�ll always read this story. So keep writing, I�ll be here to read it and comment.
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