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Reviews for Non Compos Mentis

By : rAiNwAtEr
  • From ANON - Talia on November 22, 2005
    You need to reread or get a bata for your story. it's so good but the spelling and grammer errors make me cry (figuritively). good decription, good character portrayal, just... gah... the spelling!and your Japanese is wrong. sumimasen- meanings: pardon me, excuse me, I'm sorry, Thank you, you're welcome (I love Japanese, don't you?) I'm currently taking Japanese so I'd be willing to give you the proper meanings for the words. Oh yeah, Shoji= doors, Shojo= girl-oriented media (manga or anime). Some of your sentence structure is odd or repetive. (eg. My knees bruse from having my weight centered on my knees and the hard floor.) Again, It would be best if you reread you work. I'm only telling you all of this because under the few mistakes is a phenominal story. I hope my suggestions helped.

    -Talia
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  • From ANON - devon on November 09, 2005
    i dont know why but i really enjoy relastionships that would be hard to imagine like akito/kyo i love that paring!!!!!
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  • From ANON - BakaDen on November 08, 2005
    Hey this is interesting. please continue. I wonder what's going to happen next, well, I think I have an idea. But anyhow, update soon.

    -BDen
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