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Reviews for The Sideways Shuffle

By : Emberstone
  • From ANON - ziz1387 on August 01, 2006
    YAY! Another Ed and Spike story! I love this pairing. I like that you made Ed mature and gave lots of cool gadgets on her ship. Sorry if I sound childish, I just Love Ed and Spike as a couple, but see so few of their stories. I just get excited when I find one. Hope to read more soon. Keep writing!
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  • From ANON - critical_bitch on June 12, 2006
    Hey! Well, the idea intrigued me, but by the end I was rather disappointed. =-/ I mean, the 1st chapter left me going, "Wow, MORE!" but whenever the 2nd chapter initially began it felt rushed and forced. First of all, Spike's attraction was...well...odd...especially since he was kissing Ed and treating her as though he were in love with her. From the way you described his attraction in Ch 1, it was a mere feeling of lust...not love, which made ch 2 make less sense. Granted, Ed has feelings for him, but again, it just didn't feel right. The lemon was alright, but very traditional and what I'm used to. Then again, once you've read one lemon, you've read them, all, right? ^^ So I guess I can't really blame you for that one.

    Secondly, I'm not so sure that Spike could ever really find himself that desperate to need to lay Ed, anway...after all, he's had several women in the series that he could've easily taken advantage of, like Katerina, Stella, Electra...heck, maybe even Judy from Big Shot! Hey...I'd actually like to see that one done! ^^ lol

    I hope I haven't discouraged your writing spirit because you DO have a very nice style...you asked for constructive criticism, so I did my very best to deliver. Again, I apologize, and my very best wishes in the completion of this fic! ;0)
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  • From ANON - guanyin-kun on June 11, 2006
    I certainly hope that you'll continue this story. It is the most wonderful Bobeep piece I have ever read. I could never really see Spike and Ed together, but, eh, who knows. Too bad Ein isn't there, or at least with Jet. Wonderful job of getting into each of their heads. Very much in character. Thank you so much for sharing.
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  • From ANON - Nevaeh Bluden on June 11, 2006
    nice! you have captured the characters so well! do continue!
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