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By : Mishizu

From ANON - Dazma on January 27, 2008
Wow, I really like this story. I think it's great that your developing the romanitc relationship between Light and L. Though it is always fun to read a fic where they through themselves at each other because of mad chemistry, this is so much more believable, and a nice change of pace. Of course, that doesn't mean I don't anxiously await each new romantic hint!

I also really like how you have Light as the one reaching out more between the two. I'm a strong believer that the personalities of Light and Kira are alot more different then most people seem to think, and that without the Death Note, for all Light is dangerously brilliant he's also a really kind person. Plus, as the younger of the two it makes sense that he's a bit more idealistic at times. Anyways, in short, I love you characterizations!

Can't wait to read more!
-Dazma
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From ANON - Anon on January 27, 2008
Very nicely done... it's sweet, simple but gentle flow allows this piece to be cutesy but not crackish. Are you going to continue? You are right about the time, Light gets his memories back so will this turn angst or are you going to take it in another direction. Or just quit now?
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From GreatestHits on August 20, 2007
This fanfic is uncommonly well-written and in-character. I could really picture such scenes occurring between Light and L. So, are you going to write another chapter? You haven't updated for quite a few months now, but I am terribly curious to see what happens next, so please do update!!
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From ANON - PAres on May 11, 2007
Whoot! I'm so glad I found this story! I'd been despairing for one that works with the canon, rather than twisting and bending the 'Sacred Canon' out of proportion.

I just have one question - why does L constantly inform Light of the percentages? I get the function, but it just struck me as a little odd that he would constantly mention it, rather than let Light puzzle it out himself.

Again, thanks for writing this!
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From ANON - Annalicia on April 26, 2007
This story is working at a steady pace but also is very enjoyable. Keep up the good work! ^.^
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From ANON - jewel on April 26, 2007
still very good. L seems unusually quiet and soft in this installment. not OOC, just unusual enough to make you go "hmmm". which is what i suspect you wanted as evidenced by the other characters also noticign it. the L- Light relationship is fascinating to watch and seems to be getting sweeter. although i feel it will be bitter sweet as i want them so much to "get together" but even if they do we all know that it can't work or won't last (can it?).
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From ANON - Iris Anthe on April 25, 2007
This story is everything I want from a Light and L story. Well done. Too bad Matsuda and Misa were so completely forgotten just moments after being the cause of such nervous self-nibbling, but that's okay. This is very well written, and it's going to hit us like brass knuckles when Light gets his hands on the deathnote. I will enjoy every step along the way, I am certain.
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From ANON - Aya on April 24, 2007
Nooo...... you simply must write more! I'll be your beta if you want, I just love this story! It's so incredibly cute! Anyway, keep up the good work! ^_____^
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From ANON - angelhideki on April 24, 2007
For 'Red and Black':
I love your whole take on L's reaction to Matsuda's idiocy in this one. In fact, it's just a beautiful analysis of L's character in general.

Your writing is still amazing and I loved reading this chapter! I can't wait to read more!
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From ANON - yeah on April 23, 2007
light is TOTALLY a metrosexual hehehehe

anyway, great update =D
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From ANON - Angel Ishino on April 20, 2007
I LOVE this series. I've been looking through all of my old lurking spots for some Death Note fanfiction, since they never let me down before, but, until now, I hadn't found anything worth sitting down and reading. Your stories just have this wonderful flow to them. I feel like I'm reading an experienced novel writer instead of reading off of a fanfiction site. ...I actually don't have anything to say other than that except PLEASE KEEP WRITING. Your stories are amazing and I'd love to see more.
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From RealPoisonIvy on April 16, 2007
Hi Shinigami Yumi!!

I have followed "In the Spaces between Words" almost from the beginning but never came around to write a review. So I decided to be a good girl and write something. It is nothing specially no real critic, just my thoughts on this piece of writing. I wrote a little bit to every part, and hope it will help you to find motivation to keep on. I as a writer myself know much reviews can help ^^ So here we go!

Part 1:

Ryuuzaki`s reaction to Light`s nearness promises real Yaoi action ^^ In the Anime I found it strange, that both of them just went back to their rutine after that fight (well, I don`t know the manga, maybe it was different there). It`s good to read an interpretation of this situation. A good one on top of it. I wonder what emotion it was, that L saw in Light`s eyes. I think, it`s very likely, that Light really has feeling for L, or at least respects him. Otherwise he wouldn`t have agreed to the condition of being chained to him. Or he wouldn`t treat his wounds.

Part 2:

That was so sweet!! I liked how Light snapped and forced L to let him finally sleep. It was so seme like.. An angry Light is something we don`t see often.
L`s train of thoughts was interesting. Thinking of Light as beautiful, it`s certainly true. And also that he`s manipulative.
I had to laugh as L wanted to nibble his thumb.. XD It was so funny and sweet.

Part 3:

Light is sure keeping an eye on every on L`s quircks. That pinching from L might hurt, was funny ^^ I like such small thoughts, like the one about how clean L`s feet could be after walking around bare-feeted. This adds to the reading pleasure.
Light represents all values of society in terms of manners etc.. it is funny to see him clash with L in every way during their time together, who is seemingly polite, but inexperienced in sozial life. I wonder where he gathers all that patience from O.o I would have punched L by now, or find another way to relieve myself of the tension� XD MUHAHAH

Part 4:

Your description of L is very good and accurate. Now it becomes handy, that Light observed L�s habits, making the coffee. I like the banter between them resulting of it. L surely is paraniod, but it seems to be necessary for a detective. I like Light getting L back for the torture by making L so uncomfortable. And it pleases me as Yaoi fangirl. Especially the scene, when Light gets close to L and makes him shiver *kyahh*
Erm� well, I hope there will be more friendly (or more) banter between them.

Part 5:

God, I LOVED this part!!! L`s gall to fake a heart attack!! Poor Light for being cuffed to this man. You can`t even stay angry at someone so cute! It is soo clear, that they like each other, but the circumstances still prevent a honest relationship. *sign*
The scene, when L wiped him was screaming for a lemon.. well, in my opinion ^^ L warmes up towards Light, even if he tries not to. Great part! They are all great!! Keep the work up!!

Part 6:

It was funny to read the german title �Jenseits von gut und b�se� inbetween the english words� I am german, and just kept reading, without realizing that the language switched.. ^^
Poor L, always thinking about the possibility of Light being Kira. That must be really trying.. but he seems cormfortable enough to fall asleep next to prime suspect. ^^ QUOTE: �I apologize, Light-kun. My body appears to have grown accustomed to your presence�� END QUOTE I hope his body will get even more accustomed to Light in the future.. will it?? ^^
I liked Mogi`s appearance in this one. It is interesting to see their relationship from the point of view of another character.
Did you read the books you have mentioned? I was always interested in philosophy, but never got around to actually read anything about it.

Part 7:

It seems Light got used to L inability in sozial ways.. and to being called Kira. They got to know each other pretty for Light sensing, when L`s only teasing. I like that! ^^
It is interesting to see, how hard Light stuggles to be a �good boy�. He is so concerned about his image, that he easily manages to control his temper. So it shouldn`t be surprising, how good he is at acting and decieving. After reading this I am also wondering, if you get those two together someday.. after all, wouldn`t Light think a relationship between two man to be unaccaptable?
But it is nice to see, that L`s really getting comfortable around Light and accustomed to his touches. It seems he is not quite able to keep the suspicion up. It was sweet to see L trusting him enough to tell him his birth country. Even though he maybe just did it to see Light`s reaction. But he feels the changes in their relationship stronger.
Your explanation for L`s addiction to sweets is very likeable and easy to comprehend.

Part 8:

That was so funny!! Especially Light`s thought about being glad he never jerks of in the shower XD I can understand his discomfort. Even without worrying about the other sexuality, it would be a strange situation to be observed even under the shower. Those are very intime moments. But why is he such a girl in terms of cosmetics??? O.o
And he shouldn`t be so prude in terms of nudety� damn, modesty. Who needs it?! L is just comfortable with himself XD I think Light`s just shy, because he fear he could like what he sees, and this would be inproper (yeah, Yaoifangirl-mode is in control right now.. ). His reaction about demanding a longer chain sounded weird, like he thinks he should aswer this way, like a �good, straight boy� is supposed to. I hope he gets over that soon.
I was a shock to see the calm Yagami Light loose control enouhn to actually atack L. He must be on the edge O.o But I like such moments a lot. L is always emotionless in his attitude, but at least he doesn`t try to hide it. Light is almost the same, but it`s hard to see under his talkative nature.
Again a great part!! ^^

Part 9:

I like Light`s smugness about comprehending L`s eating habits. They understand each other like an old married couple XD
I was good about guessing L`s age.. I thought he would be 25. ^^ Can`t wait for more of your good writing!

My regards, Ivy

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From ANON - Batmanyaoi on April 16, 2007
I think Part 8&9 are my favorite because the shower sence was just perfect. I don't even know who to descride the effect Light's gay question had on L. How L asked Light what he would do if he were before giving an answer is so like him, yet, for once, not for the purpose of Kira but to negotiate his own answer. Then the half eaten strawberry was uterly sweet and Light's knowlege of the kind of person L trully is when he observed that the fruit was his least favorite was beatiful. And after all that nonsence I just wanted to say keep up the good word. I like what you write, it moves me to see that pairing in a more appropriate way then just having sex within 1000 word.
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From ANON - Cissi on April 15, 2007
You are just so adorable when you're asking for reviews, and your story just kicks ass...so...wanna know what I think?

ZOMFGILUVUPLZMARRYME1w4NN4H4V3URB4BIEZZZZZ!!!

In non-teenie words - I LOVE it! ^_______^

Love,
Cissi
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From ANON - Reien on April 09, 2007
I really like the subtleties in Light and L's interactions, it's quite a feat to make passages about them going through their daily routines interesting. Also like the slow and steady build up in their relationship, you've kept them wonderfully in character (it seems remarkably easy to go OOC when writing Light and L, if the fics I've read are any indication - a good number of authors seem to favour fanservice and make the mistake of idealising them). Looking forward to updates! ^^
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