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By : Mishizu

From SeraphimLullaby on July 25, 2010
I spent about an hour or two reading this from start to finish - when I should have been tending to other things - but let me say that it was without a doubt time well spent. This is a masterpiece. You stayed IC throughout the entire story and remained true to the characters themselves. While it meant that it wasn't the perfect romance, or ending it only added to the quality of your writing. I was dreading reading the last two parts because I knew what was coming and hated to think that it was going to end like that. It was beautiful, but terrible and I'd expect no less when it comes to a relationship between Light/Kira and L. I loved how you 'filled in the pieces' in those last two parts and how things made perfect sense. It was like finishing a puzzle.

I could go on and on about every little thing that was great about this piece of work but let me just finish by saying thank-you for taking the time to write this... the best and most satisfying Death Note fic I've read so far. :)
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From Sorachan on April 06, 2009
I really enjoyed reading this fic. It was everything I could have hoped for. Dramatic, wonderfully cannon, a beautiful mix of gay love and raw passion. Lawliet and Light are great together, and your take on Death Note showed them off in all their cute glory! The end even made me tear up a little bit. Thank you so much for posting this story!

The only technical error I noted was that you spelled the word "dab" incorrectly twice. I think you spelled it "daub." I've never seen it spelled that way, but I could be wrong.

Write on!
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From lawliet55 on January 18, 2009
Now that i've finished it, wow - excellently written. Broke my heart thought. I traditionally only read AU's because I can't stand the fact that they're dead, I love L far too much and I feel for Light as well and I think you've captured his plight really well - if they'd had that relationship behind the scenes. I usually hate the ground cannon Light walks on because he killed L, but sometimes I think of him as being possessed by that Death Note and not really himself so then I feel a little bad for him - although I NEVER forgive him for what he did and DOUBLE that if he killed L after having that kind of relationship with him. But at least in your version he's suffering for what he did as well. Great job.
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From lawliet55 on January 18, 2009
Hi! I didn't notice when this was written but I'm reading it now and I think it's wonderful. I'm really enjoying this so much, I think you've done an excellent job and I can't wait to finish reading it!!!
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From ANON - SilveryBeing on December 06, 2008
Oh wow. This story was beyond amazing. Great characterization throughout, of both L and Light. I liked that you addressed that Light would be afraid that he might be Kira. The last chapter was heart wrenching, I was tearing up (as if I wasn't so close in other chapters). This fic has honestly made me think differently about Light, mourning instead of hate, and the duel personalities really struck me as true and made it all that much more tragic. If you ever get a break in workload I would love to to read the AU ending.
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From MadoushiClef on August 07, 2008
I generally wait to review, but oh hell...

"four thousand six hundred and twenty seconds"? That's perfectly what L would think. Damn mathematically competent geniuses! *shakes fist skyward*

So far, it's pretty damn good. I tend to skim over the recap stuff from episodes unless there is something in it that is new information. The missing scene stuff, though, awesome idea. One question? Why are they dabbing bruses with hot water? It needs ice.
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From ANON - Elise on June 18, 2008
very very great fiction! light is too stupid to kill L!
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From anneplath on June 17, 2008
O.O I have to say, even though I was anticipating the ending being along the lines of that... you still managed to make me tear up. Gah, it's been awhile since a fanfic has managed to do that. So kudos to you, my friend, for being an awesome author and being able to convey emotion while keeping peeps in character. *nodnod*

I though L was great, all his social ineptness and lack of finesse. *chuckles* He was very well done, to say the least. I also like that you touched on the essential bipolar personality that Light seems to have... you made me hate and want to hug him at the same time. And I have to say... Misa, done in character in any fic, makes me laugh. I hate people that make her sound like an intelligent human being *shakes head* when she rather clearly isn't. (or at the very least, she's trying to be 'cute' in some manner *shrug*)

All in all, when stacked up against the rest of the Death Note fiction on the site... I not sheepish to say there's no contest. I know this may piss other writers off but... this was seriously the best one I've come across. It had depth, character development, sex, and death all in one COMPLETED package. You have no idea how happy I was upon learning that this had an actual ending... it was almost a fangirl squee.

But, I digress... it was wonderful, keep up the good work! *nod*

Peace Out,
Anne Plath
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From ANON - Lazer on May 15, 2008
Hey there, I just wanted to say that you have a wonderful writing style. I love the use of your wide vocabulary. I also really enjoyed the way you wrote the characters. I hope there is more to come from you, on this fic. Thanks for posting it for all to enjoy!
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From imeL on April 27, 2008
Yay you updated! Very good! Please continue.
P.s. Porn is important so I think your work ethic is fine
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From ANON - D on April 17, 2008
Wow. I found this randomly the other day and have spent all of last night and tonight reading. I'm absolutely blown away by your steady pacing and realistic character development. Light and L's growing relationship has been handled with great insight that I really admire. Thank you so much for your work! I look forward to see where this goes in future chapters.... ^o^
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From ANON - saki on April 11, 2008
Hey there!

Alright, I'll admit I couldn't review each chapter as I read because I was so sucked into the story and kept wanting to read more, so I HAD to keep clicking on the "next chapter" link. Now that you're at a "pause" here since there isn't another link for the next one yet...., it's review time! *lol*

Obviously I reaaaaally like the way you've presented this pairing (you can tell cuz I HAD to read through to the end before reviewing (^_^)), and do like the other characters coming in because I feel it adds more "realism" to the story - and YAY for not automatically going to the PWP plot line (not that I don't like those, but I really do like reading fiction where someone's actually thought out chapters for relationship development).

I'll admit the very first chapter, I had a lil confusion in one paragraph with the "he" and "him" before I figured out - I had to go back and reread that one bit to figure out which "he" you were talking about - I think it was just one place and I think I'd initially thought it was Light, but it turned out to be L... or maybe it's the other way around... *frowns* I'll have to go back and find it. Other than that, very well written - I'm not sure if you planned out your entire story line and then broke it out into chapters and wrote it that way, or if you've got the general line and are now adding fillers!

Can't wait for the next chapter! (^_^)

saki
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From ANON - Koji on April 10, 2008
Nya ! This is good !! I hope I do not have to wait long for more parts to it ! Keep writing your are good !
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From enslavementthesis on April 09, 2008
Porn > Work. Always - It isn't a lack of work ethic, You just have Your priorities straight!

She likes this.

Your writing could use a slight going over - there are some minor grammar/spelling errors, but nothing strong enough to detract from the story, and you seem to use the same explanations for your characters a lot (oddball, eccentric detective etc)but overall, it is fairly well written, and although they are obviously one shots, they relate really well together, and your characterisations of L and Light are pretty spot on.

Kudos for that, L is a hard character to write!

Can't wait for the next update.

P.S. She noticed Your comments on the read and review ratio and couldn't help but laugh.

Don't we all know THAT feeling!

So here is a positive review with compliments and cookies just for You.
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From ANON - Lila on April 08, 2008
Awesome update i had almost given up hope on updates for this story....So much so that i had to reread the entire thing to remember what it was about...Not to complain or anything this is an awesome story worthy of the second read...Anyway loved this new chapter woot woot L light lovin a little violent but what isn't between those two ne? Anyway awesome stuff ignoring the title i almost wish you would AU this a bit to make L and Light live happily ever after while sky diving :) Anyway can't wait for the next chapter XD.
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