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Reviews for Oceans Apart

By : dashleya
  • From ANON - Natsuki on September 19, 2016

    I love it! Please continue writing sorato fics! nwn


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  • From satomika on September 30, 2014
    Wow~!

    Nice~!!!

    I LOVE IT~!!! :D ^^
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  • From ANON - Death Angel on October 17, 2010
    Wow, that was absolutely brilliant. And hot. And well written. Gorgeous! You should be very proud of this piece of work, and I wish you'd write more! Thanks for this!
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  • From ANON - :) on July 13, 2008
    No reviews? Shame. This deserved a few. :)

    My only constructive criticism would be that some paragraphs really needed to be broken up more, because they were on the long side. You also got a bit repetitive with the "He *action*" sentences in one of the last paragraphs. Perhaps joining those separate sentences into long-running sentences, and using other words for transition in place of "He", would help ease the repetitiveness.

    Other than those points, it was well-written and realistic. I liked how you obscured the identity of the female until the end, and was quite pleasantly surprised by it being who it was. Not enough lemons of those two are written, and this was a great addition.

    Certainly a very nice read. Well done.
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