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By : DarkMaiden

From xain34 on May 19, 2008
I could see what my guys reply to Gary would have been. XD

"We need you to come with us because you may also be in danger Mr.Key"
Gary says as he looks straight at me.

"Psh, you'd be in more danger with me THERE then I myself being in danger if I was alone"
I reply smuggly.

"I could always beat you in a pokemon battle, Steven"
Gary replies cockishly.

"And I could always kill you with my bare hads, so what's new?"
I reply annouyed looking at Gary.

".....Touch'e"
Gary replies with the classic. -_-;

That would be so fucking funny...XD
Meh, just me being bored. And i'll create some more of the chapter as it comes to me. O_o;
I KNOW I'M LAZY! *facepalms*
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From DarkMaiden on May 19, 2008
Thanks for all the reviews so far ^^

I know age in pokemon is a pain in the ass, I think I said somewhere around the League that I had to increase the age of some characters (the League was a huge mess), it's 10 years after the Pokemon Emerald Storyline, but when it comes to the anime it wouldn't make sense to add only 10 since they seem to be forever young in all seasons.
Let's not complicate much about age. The main characters are around the 20s, the adult characters (Ash, Paul and Gary) are around their 30s.
(Actually according to the anime it was Gary that discovered how to bring amber fossils back to life by the age of what...11? Most animes create weird age issues)

About Vi I didn't enter much into personal issues, I was worried about being able to explain the new season, leaving all the drama for the second chapter.
But about her personality, it depends from person to person, but normally when a lot of weird shit happens in life simultaneously people doesn't know how to react at first, there�s a tendency to follow any new door that opens, but it doesn�t really help lol.
Yes she is trying to take the easy way out, making herself believe that there's nothing else she can do but follow what someone like Gary tells her, what could she do alone against a criminal team? But that won�t last long.
Plus battles are a good way to channel anger without having to face the real issues. Sure maybe it's a female thing, but it takes a while to wake up and smell the reality.
Not that it�s much of a spoiler, she�s simply still under depression since the League. I needed this because I don�t want her to go run after Jack and Sam yet.

Don�t feel like I�m arguing or retaliating, I love when people criticize interesting points.
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From xain34 on May 19, 2008
oooooooo, I would so like to commission you for a drawing. When you get the time of course. o_O;

You'll probly say no, but it's worth a shot. XD
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From xain34 on May 19, 2008
A few spelling erros here and there, but a damn good job if i'd say so myself. ^_^

And I forgot to mention if you can, can I have my character appear in both canalave city and the city where team rocket shows up? (to lazy to go check the name for myself) Also, if you need data on how Steven fights let me know DM. O_o;
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From xain34 on May 11, 2008
@Tenkage
Shush already dammit, she'll update when she get's the chance, there's no use trying to tell someone to do something just to get your way, since it never happens.

@...Whoever. O_o

I like the character list, especially liking my scene in the chapter before in where I go into the pit and IT BURNS! And basicly my guy getting hella hungry afterwords and eating an octorok. (what the hell?) I especially liked the part where Jack grabed the machine and started pumping out an ungodly amount of bullts. WHILE, going Rambo. Ah, and then the finale where Damien went insane and pressed the red button and caused a nuclear halocaust killing everyone in the world. All and all the story get's a 10 in my book. For AH THEY TOOK MY FRIGGIN KIDNEY!

Onigashimas DM-sama. ^_^
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From xain34 on May 10, 2008
God, that imbecile Immortality won't get off my fucking comment pages. The little punk keeps saying some garbage about how I attacked him when he was the one that started shit with me.
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From xain34 on May 08, 2008
Huh, Ivan reviewed my story...And suprizingly he actually likes it...I'm in shock at the moment, one of my favorite authors actually likes my story. Even though i'm lazy and get little done. XD

CrazyIvan pwns. O_o;
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From xain34 on May 08, 2008
Okay, thanks for the reminder DM. And sorry about forgetting, and yes. My memory fucking FAILS! EPICLY! XD
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From DarkMaiden on May 07, 2008
I am very busy right now, normally I update or begin to work on chapters on weekends, during the week it's pretty much impossible.

Ok to avoid further confusion -> I'm a girl, "DarkMaiden" a Maiden is a formal expression that refers to young women lol ;)

I'll see if I can finish the chapter this weekend, It's about time to enter the second season. I know I delay a lot and I apologize for that, but yeah asking for updates constantly it's a little annoying.

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From xain34 on May 06, 2008
@Tenkage

Some of us have lives dude, seriously. She'll(I believe she if i'm correct in assuming this) Update when she(?) updates. And sorry for not remembering your gender DM, my memory fucking fails on me alot.
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From DarkMaiden on April 28, 2008
I hope nobody�s pissed about that, it�s just hard to keep track of everything after receiving so many info from so many characters and trying to publish chapters with a constantly changing season storyline.

�but what I don�t get is: why did you give all that valuable information away for free?�

Actually I�m trying to test something, there�s 3 common ways of adding background stories:

1 � Starting the story (or a season) with the past; I really like this one and I do it a lot, but it�s useful for stories that don�t have many characters, which isn�t this case.

2 � Adding flashbacks; the most common one, it�s useful but seriously overused and tiring, anyone that watches series like Naruto or One Piece knows what I mean.

3 � Using data; mostly used in series like CSI, basically it�s when someone reads the file of a character, that way when the bad guy gets busted they don�t need to explain why again.

What I�m trying to test is a variable from the third option mostly used in games but not in books or series.
It�s when you have a section with all the info of the characters so that you can choose which one you wanna play with and to avoid having to say all that during the levels.
I�m obviously not doing it for those reasons in here, it�s to see if by previously posting the �basics� you can go straight into deeper issues without having to waste chapters explaining details like the past or how the powers work.

Of course some of that info will be repeated during the story, but not without additional and more crucial details.

Let�s just see if it works, otherwise I�ll just return to the good old techniques lol =P

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From xain34 on April 28, 2008
And once again DM, sorry if i'm comming off as a dick, but it's 1 AM at the time of both of these posts and i'm not sure if you meant myself included or not, if you did i'll be more then happy to fill out the E-Mail thing. You still use the same E-Mail right?
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From xain34 on April 28, 2008
Basicly, just the team I gave is different. How he looks when I told you is just his coat removed is all, he still have the black shirt, black pants, black shows, eye patch, the left sleeve is long to cover up the arm you know that. O_o

And black gloves. Hell fingerless right handed glove is a staple for him, Reason? To grab feel around for the bottles easier. You try grabing a bottle from a pouch behind you with a glove on. XD

Anyway, except for very minor changes in his look, nothing is new, except the party which I suplied ample info for. Not trying to sound rude DM honestly, it's just it's 1 AM and i'm typing at this time like an idiot again, like I said before. If you need more info just e-mail me at xainRM@yahoo.com

And i'll give you all the information my decaying mind can muster. O_o
(meaning my memory fucking sucks balls on ice. XD)
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From DarkMaiden on April 27, 2008
You know, mailing me a decent character description with details and definitive ideas would be much nicer than repeatedly asking to enter the story after I said I WOULD allow your character to re-enter.

I don�t mind doing collaborations with other authors or accepting interesting characters or ideas, but that should improve the story instead of delaying it even more than it already is.

Any requests should be sent to -> darkmaidenpm@gmail.com

I don�t want people to be discouraged of posting reviews or proposing ideas, I just want people to realize that if I was prepared to end the story�trying to leech me out constantly isn�t a very smart idea.

Now, I do keep my promises, I�m just asking for a little comprehension. I�m a young adult with a busy life, if I spend my time with this story it�s because I feel like it�s worth it (developing creative and writing skills).

So summing it up -> I accept good and definitive characters/ideas (without constant changes) that have the potential to make the story better. I will not accept random ideas, ever-changing party pokemon and the name of faceless characters. Why? Because that means I am the one that has to do everything and I don�t gain anything from it.

Take the time to send a decent email with info, propose suggestions, ask questions (all by email).

This all may sound harsh but really this is how life works, when you want something you have to work for it, you can�t just demand or beg for it. Everyone will have to go through this at school or at work eventually.

This isn't a personal attack, it goes for everybody.

I hope everyone will understand.
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From xain34 on April 24, 2008
Uh...
*looks at my chapter and my notes for my chapter. Then looks at DM's post*

Oh boy...
*backs away slowly*

What exactly do you mean by humiliating? Like...Him being powerless against a summoner or...
*starts sweating*

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