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Reviews for Distraction

By : Amako

From satomika on September 22, 2014
Kya~~~!!!

I LOVE IT~!

And I honestly think it's SOOOOO them~ :D

More, please...? ^^ :D
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From ANON - animegirl007 on July 20, 2013
I've been thinking of Princess Tutu for a while, and I'm happy a found a story with my favorite couple.....Very well done!!
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From slayerette0 on January 02, 2010
It was quite adorable. I think it was mostly in character... Fakir seemed a little too confident at first, but I bet after living with Ahiru for years he'd probabl start to get a little used to her being randomly naked.

I'd like to think he'd write her into being a girl again. Otherwise the ending comes off really sad...
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From Kiziku on March 30, 2008
Oh my freaking god! there are no words to descrie how well this story is written it was just...amazing! i heart you for writing it xD!
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From bloop54321 on January 11, 2008
I LOVED this story. LOVED IT! And I have no complaints at all. Would you mind if I take your idea, and run with it a bit? I've never written lemons, before, but your story made me realize just how lacking the PTT section is...

I'll put up my story in a few days. If you are not happy about how I worked off your idea, or anything, please please let me know! I'll take it down. I have a feeling that you'll enjoy it. I didn't try to mimic your writing style, btw... too hard for me to do, hahaha. Your story was def. well written, and something you should be proud of!
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From RMW on December 19, 2007
Niccceeeee...!!!

Though may I suggest that in future lemons, Fakir cut back on calling Ahiru moron?
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From ANON - Anon on November 06, 2007
H-O-T! Amazing job! I was squealing so loud throughout that, I think my grandmother's going to have me sent to an institution! XD I'll keep an eye for more of your stories in the future!
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From Hawkie on August 25, 2007
I... er... hrm. This... This made me blush. A lot. And making me blush isn't that easy. Well done!
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From LoveMonster on April 28, 2007
Hi! I was meaning to review this earlier and didn't. Because I'm bad and lazy. -_- But I'm reviewing it now! Because I must tell you that I **LOVE** it! To my understanding, there's only one other long FxA lemon out there. So thank you for adding to that painfully small number. And thanks for sending me that little e-mail thinger to let me know that you wrote this, as I may not have found it otherwise since I'd just about given up on trying to find an oasis in the desert that is PT smut-fics. Haha.. ^^' One little thing- I was reading an old interview with the creator of this series. She (I think she's a she ^^') had said she would have liked to have made/or would like to make an OVA to flesh out (no pun intended. hee.) the relationship between Fakir and Ahiru some more. But that never came about. D= I was feeling a bit down about that. Then a few days later I found out about this fic of yours and I felt better about the whole thing. ^^ Hehe.

First of all, I wouldn't have guessed that this were one of your first lemons. The level of detail you put into Distraction fills it with win. Makes me want to work harder on my lemons. D: LOVE the dominate Fakir. I couldn't picture him any other way. Perhaps a little more embarassed (given how much of a total spaztastic blushie antisocialite he was in the anime. XD) but still- I found this Fakir to still be very convincing. After all he's 21 and he's been waiting forever. XD XD I cracked up when Ahiru was saying her usual awkward things (to be more specific, the scene (scene? I mean, part.. heh) where she rambles about a time when she was almost going to pull his pants down in front of everyone.) That's just such an Ahiru-thing to ramble about at an inopportune time. Also, sometimes I utterly forget that she's still fairly "new" to humandom and there must be some things she doesn't know. I liked seeing that fitted into the story.

I hope that Fakir will be able to teach her "new steps" for the Pas De Deux again sometime. That's my not-so-subtle way of gently hinting that if you ever chose to write more AhiruXFakir ficcies, I'd love to read them. :D But anyway, thanks for Distraction!

One last thing- my jaw is still on the floor after hearing you mention "perved up Fakiru Japanese fanart and doujinshi." After watching the show for the first time years ago, I combed a load of different sites and didn't find anything of that kind (not that I was exculsively looking for the stuff. XD I was looking for Fakiru is stuff in general..) but still, links please? XD
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From cReaTiVe on April 24, 2007
I truly have no idea what to say...
for your second lemon ever that was pretty damn good!!! i mean, my first and second ones are BOTH cluttered & sort of confusing...unlike yours. If you could please continue to write more lemons based on this anime and others I would be overjoyed.

Once again great job!!!
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From LunarAlchemist on April 14, 2007
Wonderful. So in-character, so pretty and well-written, and I never would have thought that Fakir/Ahiru smut would be so... hot. So, simply wonderful. Just out of curiousity, what ages did you consider them while writing this??
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From Amako on April 08, 2007
jess249 - Thank you! I'm glad you thought so. ^^ And yes, this is really my second lemon fiction ever. ^^;;;

Princess Kushinada - Thanks a lot! :D I'm happy that you enjoyed it and I'm honored that you think it was well-written! Honestly, I don't think I could do the crude type of writing even if I tried. ^^; I just wouldn't be able to handle it. I have to have some sort of plot and make the characters appear as themselves or I'd be frustrated beyond belief and certainly not happy with the result. ^^; Thanks a lot for the feedback! I will continue to write Princess Tutu fics, since I have so much love for the series. ^_^

Astrobright68 - ...I admit, my jaw fell open when I saw your name on here in the replies. XD;;; I thought you were going to be horrified or something. XD;;; *paranoid* I did not think ANYONE would recognize me here, or the fic this had originally started as before it turned...over a new leaf. XD;;;

Thank you so very much! :D I'd hoped the writing wouldn't be too bad. XD;; I honestly hadn't written anything in quite awhile before I wrote this out, so I was worried my writing was suffering quite a bit. It's definitely my second. ^^; And I think I may try to write more, because it definitely is different writing, to say the least. XD And I hope to get to the point where it doesn't embarrass me as much. XD;;

You really thought they were in-character? :D That makes me soooo happy, 'cause that was honestly the biggest challenge I had when I started to change this and lengthen it extensively to a smut piece. ^^; (And I thought it would be darn near-impossible, considering the nature of mature writing XD;) Passionate and intense? Really? :D I thought the dialogue throughout might have disturbed that. XD; I did have fun with Ahiru's random blurt-outs and interruptions, though. XD ...You're definitely not the only one! I love foward/aggressive Fakir. XD (Which is probably rather ironic from me considering I draw him sappy and smiling a lot of the time, too. XD; ) ...I'm so glad you liked the pas de deux part! :D :D :D That was one of the things I really built off of since I still wanted to give aspects to it that had to do with PT in general and it just struck me as something Fakir might relate it to. XD (SRSLY!? XDDD Omg. Fakir's lines were definitely fun. XD I enjoy writing him a lot, even moreso since I picked him up in RPing. I'm used to writing from the girl's view a lot, you could say and always feel I can never pin down a good, aggressive male character. So Fakir is a challenge all in his own, but I really enjoy writing from his POV and his dialogue. ^^) I did refer to dancing a lot, because it just struck me as something that could be incorporated to the sensual aspect I was going for, you know? XD And something I could relate both characters to. Ahiru didn't strike me as knowing about sex, either. XD Even if it was an instinctual thing in base, she wouldn't recognize the sort of things that lead up to it from a human POV, or so I thought. XD; And Fakir doesn't strike me as someone who'd intentionally hurt someone he cares about for personal gain/pleasure. I can see him getting carried away at points, but he knows apologies are important.

You have an extremely good eye. I'm so dead serious. XD The "I love you" parts were added after I finished the fic, as was the line that was out of place (and the one before it). XD;; I have a habit of reading through my work after it's done many times and going back adding things where I think it might need something extra or something elaborated. And you definitely caught two of those. XD; I hope the other ones blended in somewhat, but if there was anything else you think stood out as awkward, let me know. XD I'm glad you pointed out the rough edges so I can work on blending the writing more without making those jarring things stick out. XD;;

Much love and huggles for all the feedback! Though I was worried at first that someone found this, I'm really glad to have your support! ^_^ It means a lot coming from a friend! I'm glad you thought it turned out that way! (Fakir is around 20-21, Ahiru 17-18 or so. ^^) Thanks again!
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From momijik on March 27, 2007
I really enjoyed that!! A lot!! That was very good and very well written. I thought given the circumstances they were in character. I love their pairing. Fakir is so awesome and Ahiru is just Ahiru. :)

I thought your writing was very good. Very mature and well thought out. Not crude like some people write sexual scenes. The only thing I noticed that needed some tweeking was the occasional typo.

I hope you will continue to write Princess Tutu fics or fics in general. Your work is great!
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