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By : Stormborn Apostle

From ANON - Tai on November 29, 2007
Heh, I'm fairly aware of the free reign-ness, my only pondering is how to use him.

Incidentally, I'm hoping Tai doesn't find that town once Kiako's done with it. His aura sense ability would drive him absolutely NUTS there - all those dying auras flickering and blazing, the fear and despair and panic of an entire town channelling into one mind would probably break him, or at least force a hard reboot.
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From Bishonen on November 28, 2007
I think that Kiako and Giovanni should do a duet

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=G93im2-iCYs

I wonder which one is a better singer

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From Stormborn Apostle on November 28, 2007
Imasuky Lomae---I'd only use the damned thing for item duplication (way back in the days when I didn't even have a Game Genie, lol) and for hunting safari Pokemon easier. Good times.

RoboRed---It scared the piss out of me when I'd encounter a level 100+ Snorlax or something...

I've lost the cartridges for the original R/B/Y games, but hey, that's what the interweb is for. :3

Proximity Alert---Heh, yes. Despite all of his maturity in regards to Kiako, Aqua, and Psymakio, he's still only 16 at this point in the story. I was still cheering to Dragonball Z when I was 16, so...lol. Sometimes his calm slips.

Tai---Yep, I hate plagiarists with a burning passion (even more than people who use ghostwriters!). Lazy shits.

If you need to know about the red-eyed bastard's current actitivies...Kiako is currently heading to Fallarbor to obtain the Sky Pearl...although he'll likely stop to do a quick observation of Slash and "Kirlia" (boy, won't he be surprised...) beforehand. Something pretty catastrophic will happen once he arrives at Fallarbor...but I can't say anything more, heh.

Since it'll be a long time before Kiako's whole story/motives/etc is revealed, you got pretty much free reign over him, lol. Go for it.

Tyrant---Glad you like it. :3
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From TyrantWave on November 28, 2007
Another great chapter dude ^_^

And I
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From ANON - Tai on November 28, 2007
Heh, you've got no fear of plagarism from me. I bitched out my friend in my Web Design class just yesterday because he removed the 'This script created by on ' from the Javascript he took off the net. I hate plagarists, and would dearly love to see them all devoured by fiery electromagnetic destroyosaurs. I'd settle for them being decapitated and mounted on sticks to use as a groteqsuely amusing puppet show. */sicko*

You can bet you'll be in the disclaimer if I do put it up. I'm still toying with plot ideas, though - I know the general direction they'll be heading in is 'Whereever Kiako is so we can kick his ass' but I'm not sure of things like where Kiako would go, or tricks he might employ, or even if I should bring in Team Galactic into Tai's backstory and have them crop up at some point or something. It'd be cool, but I've seen what happens when I try to cram all my ideas into a story in one go, it ends up a steaming pile of goat crap. >
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From ANON - Proximity Alert on November 28, 2007
Brilliance in motion. I especially like how Slash turns into a kid when he starts talking strategy. Anal sex.... damn, can't think of a joke for that at the moment...

Can't wait for the next chapter!
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From RoboRed on November 27, 2007
MISSINGNO ROTFLMAO!!!

I remember Missingno used to scare the living piss out of me because I was afraid of losing my game. I only messed around in that area because I wanted a sneakier way to catch poke's, and teh miss was good training bait.

Meh...now I don't really care about my red version anymore, and I'd be messin around with the miss a lot if I could be arsed...but I can't. :P
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From Bishonen on November 27, 2007
Back when Pokemon first came out me and my friends would catch MISSINGNO. and see who could train the best one

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From Stormborn Apostle on November 27, 2007
RoboRed---Yeah, if people actually cared about each other as much as Slash and Gardevoir, the world wouldn't suck half as much.

Because everyone would be at home making love instead of shooting each other, heheh.

Goggles---Maybe Slash should catch a...no...wait...COULD IT BE?!

WILD MISSINGNO. APPEARED!

OH FUCK IT'S USING SKY ATTACK
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From ANON - Goggles on November 27, 2007
Humanity: Escaping from reality since [date of first published fiction].

Virtual Reality is a scary thought, now that I think about that.
The interloper is actually...Corphish, with Gravelers left arm attached. It was hard hacking, but I found you out.
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From RoboRed on November 27, 2007
Reply to Slash's reply to Goggles:

Yeah. I agree. I'll refer again to my first review on this story. I like the angsy/romancy stuff. Part of what you mentioned in your reply to Goggles are a few of the resasons why. Stuff like that is just really rare in real life and can pretty much only be found in books, computer games, tv, movies, and anime (n' stuff like that).

But if it did, life would get REALLY interesting...>_>
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From Stormborn Apostle on November 27, 2007
Anon---It was a close one, heh. My brain just kept falling out of the writing zone over and over, but near the end I got the big burst I needed, so heh.

Incidentally, Watson's got some swell Pokemons. It'll be fun writing for him.

DizzyRye---My muse is crazy. It's already nailed down critical plot elements dozens of chapters away, but I don't know what'll happen in chapter 23 or anything...

Anyway, glad you liked this one, heh. Like I said, I'd be shocked if anyone guessed who/what the Interloper is with the scant hints I've allowed so far...the only way I could see someone being right about it is if they hacked into my computer and sneaked through the dozens of Notepad documents I got laying around, lol.

You can e-mail me with a guess, but I'd just tell you if it's right or not, not giving any hints to guide ya, lol.

And if anyone's curious, Slash's Gardevoir is a Synchronize-wielder. Nature is more or less irrelevant in Sinners, though.

Tai---She should be in the SEXY group, dammit.

Incidentally, may as well mention this here so everyone can see. I have no problem with other authors using Sinners characters/plot points/whatever, as long as they attribute the characters/plot/whatever they borrow to me. Doesn't need to mentioned in every chapter or anything, just once in the first chapter/appearance would be more than adequate, heh.

Fanfiction of my fanfiction. That's certainly something, lol.

Imasuky Lomae---Yep, that's fine with me per above. Now I have a mental image of Slash and Gardie making out under the bleachers...lol.
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From Bishonen on November 27, 2007
I've got a Pokemon story set in a high school and i want to know if i could use slash later one as a top student from another school but it wouldn't be for a while

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From ANON - Tai on November 27, 2007
Heh, I think I know why they put Gardevoir in 'indeterminate' - in theory she could fall under both Humanshape and Fairy, and since they couldn't decide for sure they put her in 'Indeterminate' and just never got around to classifying her properly. It's a placeholder. :P

I have a little one-shot in the works, myself. I might just make a mild reference to Sinners at some point, since the characters involved are also going to star alongside Slash and Psymakio in my fanfiction of your fanfiction. :P I'll give you a teaser and say that it involves Spike the Lucario (or possibly a Riolu, who evolves part-way through), the masseuse in Veilstone city, and my own perverted take on just what her 'secret massage techniques' are :P

Maybe I'll even post it up. Who knows? With work as good as this in the world, even the shyest, least confident writers can find the audacity to put their work up alongside their literary heroes :P
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From ANON - DizzyRye on November 27, 2007
Once again, you have made something brilliant, sprung full-blown from your head, or somewhere else...

The mind has been boggled, so here I sit, all boggle-like, wondering why there's no next chapter.

Seriously, though, fantastic chapter! No idea what sort of word would apply specifically to that precise level of awesomeness your works invariably measure up to. Godly seems a bit audacious, not sure what else might fit.

I do have an idea who the Interloper is, but I don't know if I should say it. By freak chance if I were right, that could very well ruin a surprise, so I'll just hang onto the idea for a while. And no, I'm not thinking it's Gardevoir's mom.

And now for the requisite threat. Update soon, or I'll send an army of Pornygons (Porygons that went online to find porn, of course) to destroy all the world's Blow Pop factories! Rawr.

P.S. I am SO tempted to get to work on Ruby again, spend as much time as needed to get a Shiny Ralts, female, Naughty or Sassy nature, with Trace, and evolve it up to Gardevoir and teach it Thunderbolt. Thanks for stealing all of my free time for the next decade!
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