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Reviews for Sinners

By : Stormborn Apostle

From ANON - negativety101 on November 02, 2007
Huh, the reviews page actually loaded, and only on the second try.

Anyways I would like to mention that I have a 400 ft long Duckbilled Platypus that shoots a heat beam and gives off electric shocks. It once faought Godzilla to a standstill. Final Wars Godzilla, and if you know Godzilla, you know just how impressive that is. Just saying.

Anywas the fic is too damn good. If you stop... Well look above. I look forward to seeing more developments, and whatever "pervesrions" our leads engage in.
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From Stormborn Apostle on October 31, 2007
Anonymous---I do the same thing with fanfictions, particularly long ones (ones that make the length of Sinners, as it currently is, seem like little more than a footnote). My recommended reading on my profile has some really good stories that I've found around here.

I don't tend to go to fanfiction.net at all (my last visit was to delete my stories from my profile, lol), but I'm always up for reading a good story. I'm a major fan of lemony fics and erotica, though (I love the challenge of making something sexual and yet plot-worthy), so...heh, we'll see.

As for your suggestions...yes, I can almost definitively say that the main work of Sinners will have no cheating, multiple partner action, etc. between Slash and Psymakio. In fact, when the full strength of the combined mating/trainer bond is revealed in the next chapter, you'll see that it would be almost physically impossible for either of them to do so. Now, that doesn't mean I can't/won't dabble in oneshots involving some craziness, but those oneshots would be non-canonical and have no bearing on the main work.

Kiako is an interesting character, one who has only been touched on faintly in Arc 1. Expect major expansion of his character and role in Arc 2, including his history, goals, loyalties, and basic character. One of my favorite challenges in writing is to make a character seem truly evil, yet infinitely more complex than such a label would imply. All I can say for now is that he is different, and his nature---as well as the natures of the protagonists---may surprise a lot of people...including myself.

Incidentally, I may start writing my original story Broken Circle in the near future, which details the history of the original incarnation of Slash, Kiako, and Psymakio, including their links and how they differ/remain in other works (such as Sinners). I'm a major Stephen King fan, and he liked to make broad, link-filled works, so...who knows?

Imasuky Lomae---Obedience is a funny thing. It can be inspired by a lot of different conditions...respect, fear, money, power...who knows what Kiako's motivation is, and how flexible his loyalties are?

You'll all find out soon enough... :3
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From Bishonen on October 30, 2007
I personally don think Kiako is so much subservient as he is obedient and this story has a long way to go he might just be working for his own goals but i could be wrong

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From ANON - Anonymous on October 30, 2007
One of the things I like to do when I read a story is read the whole thing (or what's available, if it's fanfiction and/or serialized), then "come back to it" a while later to see if I still regard it as highly as I did the first time, since I often get on "kicks" where certain kinds of stories appeal to me more than usual.

This is one of the ones that has managed to retain its appeal, and I just wanted to throw my voice in with the rest. (If you ever feel like reading a longish story that also is drawn out and has a somewhat-controversial pairing, try "Soldier of Spira" on fanfiction.net...you're not also boycotting reading from there as you are writing, right? And just to note, it's not my story, just another of the ones that I still regard highly and - oh crap he updated after a hiatus and I have another chapter to read.)

While I'm here, since everyone else is throwing out their suggestions, I'd suggest against having any sort of consensual three(or more)some. Even when you're connected mentally, the trust and jealousy issues could get too out of hand...and, on a lighter (?) note, Giovanni should totally have a Water-resistant (and Psychic-resistant if wearing armor) Nidoking.

And, hoping I don't run into the character limit (though I think and hope I'm well short of it), a bit of idle speculation. Why is such a powerful guy subservient to Giovanni? Sure, he's badass himself, but just how loyal is this part-demon guy? If the chips are down, as they say, will he fold?

Well, I had some other things in mind to say, but I've forgotten them now. Maybe I'll post again after the next chapter (or that Halloween thing, which I haven't checked to see if it's up yet). Sorry for rambling, and I salute you.
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From Bishonen on October 23, 2007
I cant wait to see the Halloween oneshot.

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From Stormborn Apostle on October 23, 2007
Pokefurry---Glad you enjoyed. Arc 2 planning is nearly complete...once the Sinners Halloween oneshot is done, I may get started on chapters 17-19 right away (although the rest of Arc 2 will have to wait as I work on other projects).

69 the best lay in the world---I'm glad you like this story. I can't post it on FanFiction.net, however, because this story would be rated NC-17, which they no longer allow. That's also why I deleted all my stories on FF.net, because of their refusal to accept erotica/intense sexuality and banning of fics based on certain authors. I avoid that site out of principle, and refuse to give them any views/story work until they open their doors to all types of stories and understand that fair use laws allow for non-profit fanfiction, regardless of what the original authors want.
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From ANON - 69 the best lay in the world on October 23, 2007
Hey i'm a big time fan have been for a long time i came from Fanfiction.net and i gota say that there's stuff there way wrose than any of the things you wrot so i think you should put sinners there so even more pepole can read it
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From ANON - Pokefurry on October 18, 2007
That last chapter was great i hope the next arc begins soon
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From Stormborn Apostle on October 18, 2007
Imasuky Lomae---lol, be sure to click 'permanent link' before linking to AD, because otherwise pictures shift as new ones are added; I copy-pasted that link and found myself with a Chikorita's ass in my face. XD

I know which pic you mean, though; and heh, all I can say is that things will be getting pretty dark soon.

Mark.---Glad you enjoy, heh. Arc 2 planning is coming together very nicely...in fact, the plotline for chapter 17-19 is almost completed already. Might be done soon if I get in the writing zone in the next day or so.
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From ANON - Mark. on October 18, 2007
Great story so far. Really looking forward to the next arc!
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From Bishonen on October 17, 2007
Angel and Devil Gardevoir makes me think of Slash�s two hearts

http://www.aerisdies.com/img.php?cat=1316&img=10

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From Stormborn Apostle on October 15, 2007
Black Whole---Well, seeing as this story is probably about 10-15% complete at the moment, and seeing as the pace of views/reviews has only been increasing since around chapter 6 or so...oh fuck, I'VE CREATED A MONSTER...A REVIEW MONSTER! :-O

ThatGuy---I think the rapid, rapid review jump had to do with the lemon chapter approaching. A lot of people are impatient and wanted the sex RIGHT FUCKING NOW...some probably wanted it even when she was still a Ralts...and the long build-up drove em nuts.

Although I've seen stories that make the reader wait a LOT longer for the first sexual encounter...and a lot of those stories, incidentally, are among my favorites (Slashy recommends TwistedHilarity's InuYasha slashfic "Uke", for example).

It's kinda like an apple pie (except, with lemons). Sure, you could just eat the damn apple, it's tasty enough, you'll enjoy it. Or you can take a while longer, get some flour and whatever the fuck else you need (I ain't no damn cook), stick that bitch in an oven, and then you got something even better.

Although 100 reviews in a day is highly unlikely. I'd guess that 2-5 reviews a day is my average when I'm writing modestly actively...even when a chapter JUST comes out, I don't get too many in a single day. I'm already overwhelmed with the current response to Sinners...if things get any more crazy, I'll be fuckin' flabbergasted.

Since there's still a long, long way to go until the ending...who knows where things will end up.
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From Review on October 15, 2007
Holy S***!!! Look at that! You made me say something that got starred! 500 reviews already?! That just goes to show you, this story PWNS. :D

Hmm...after a quick check, the 400th review was on 9/24...the 500th was on...10/14...so that means...

YOU GOT 100 REVIEWS IN 20 DAYS?!?!? Holy F***ing S***!!!

Good job Slash. Ya know, I'm waiting till you get 100 reviews IN ONE DAY. Think it's possible? Maybe, just maybe...
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From Stormborn Apostle on October 14, 2007
Angel---Heh, you know that you can take as long as you want to read it. It ain't going nowhere. Even in the unlikely event of catastrophic AFF failure, the story is backed up on my machine and multiple external sources, so...heh.

And heh times two, I don't care if you copy/paste it somewhere to read it. Hell, I don't even care if this story is POSTED somewhere else, as long as it's properly attributed to me and properly formatted (those italic/bolds are becoming a bitch, lol). So yeah, no problem.

As for Slashy's life...no new friends (too anti-social offline), no new sights (although the temperature is finally starting to drop, although it's still at icky lawn-still-growing levels), no new loves (no patience for dating). The past week or so, I've just been relaxing after all my Sinners-mania, playing video games and chilling outside and brainstorming for other story ideas.

So yes, it's all good, heh.

slicerness---Glad you liked it. Yeah, it KILLED me to drop the anal scene (I worked really HARD on it, lol)...but there was just too much sex when I got done with the first draft, and I had to cut the 'non-essential' sex scenes. I would have rather had the long, drawn-out anal scene instead of the shower quickie, but I couldn't really find a way to do that and keep up the flow of things, alas.

But do not fear. While I'm not sure about a lot of the Arc 2 plot, I already know that chapter 17 will be the 'morning after' and include some of the things I had to cut. Heheheh.

Imasuky Lomae---I believe my response to y'all is now review FIVE FUCKING HUNDRED. Snap. I've never seen another story on AFF with that many reviews (although I'm sure there must be some in the sections I don't frequent)...

500 is a lot of damn reviews, even with a large percentage of them being my replies. I shudder to think how many there will be by the time Sinners is over...it'll probably take a few minutes to load the damn review page. O_O
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From Bishonen on October 14, 2007
500 reviews
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