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By : Stormborn Apostle

From Stormborn Apostle on September 27, 2007
Imasuky Lomae---Oh, they'll be pissed...although, if that's the only thing the Jirachians notice, Slash and Gardevoir should consider themselves lucky...

There will be much more developments with the Jirachians later, and all that they represent.

Fluffy_lover---Slash has powers.

Heh, I'm sure the next chapter will be swell. Been a while since I wrote a long lemon scene, but I'm sure I still gots what it takes...and if I don't, my muse will beat it out of me.

You know, I trust Watson...and, what with me writing the story, you'd think that means YOU can trust Watson. But remember how little control I have over my muse; it's possible that Watson...or any character...can pull a fast one on us. But there will be hell to pay if that happens, heh.

Chapter 16 is actually going along just fine, despite my little personal problems. Getting engrossed in my writing seems to fend away stress, so...yep, lol.

It's not a romantic issue, though...if it were as something as 'some chick is rejecting me', I'd have told her to fuck off and not given it a second thought. The problem is that my best friend of five years (no romance here) just randomly off and stopped talking to me, and hangs up on me if I try to call. I have absolutely no clue why, although there's nothing I can do at the moment, so there's no point in me worrying about it.
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From ANON - Fluffy_lover on September 27, 2007
Oh so the problem is the girl you like doesn't call you ? Well maybe I can help you then.

Be honest . You are sure that she likes you , or that she shows the slightest kind of interest? If she does , then things will get easier.

I don't know much about girls either , Slash . The little I know comes from my conversations with my trustworthy , female friends. One thing I can say for sure is: I'm yet to find a girl that never compared herself with another female , and tried to prove that she is better than her. Seriously. That's why they get so furious when we look at a gorgeous girl in the streets . Women are INSANELY competitive, SPECIALLY among herselves.

If you think that she likes you , but is playing hard to get , you can use that. Judge her personality ( and specially her self-confidence) and plan your next move accordingly. I will quote Freedie Mercury here : "Love is a game that I love to play" or something like that. If you use the rules in your favour , you may have an advantage.

I hope that helps you , even if just a little.

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From ANON - Fluffy_lover on September 27, 2007
Ahh damn you Slash ! This chapter already answers 2 points that I made on my big review =.= I TOLD YOU TO GET OUT OF MY F***ING MIND >_
=D As I told you in another review , I'll be there till the very end. Not necessarily the end of this fic, either.

I just read taht you are having some problems in your real life Slash , I hope that the pressure that we are building for chapter 16 isn't bothering you too much. Maybe you should take some time to rest and think about everything,maybe go out and have some fun with your friends to help you get over that , so when you start writting chapter 16 you can put all your heart in it. I wish I could help you more than that , but unfortunately I can't.

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From Bishonen on September 27, 2007
I was looking trough a list of pokemon and remembered Corphish's evolution Crawdaunt is part dark type i'm kinda wondering how Jirachians will react to that in addtion to the whole haveing sex with a Gardevoir.

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 27, 2007
DemonicStrife---Oh, after hearing about that AND seeing the shitty anime every time I turn to Cartoon Network (do they just fucking marathon that show 24/7 or what!?)...Ash is going to suffer. Wailord, Nidoking, Muk, who knows...

Black Whole---It would be a bit difficult to operate as a below-ground terrorist unit when you advertise via brochures. "For the Team Aqua health plan, turn to page 4." lolno. If Archie had done that, Slash probably would have had Gardevoir blow his fucking head off, and to hell with the consequences.

Slash's unique nature will become more clear as the story progresses, heh. All I can say is that...well, I don't write Mary-Sue-type characters. People will have their flaws and their darknesses...and Slash is no exception.

I should make a picture of Slash and her reading together...

ThatGuy---As I was writing, I was actually toying with them doing a little something during the movie...nothing serious, just handjobbing or something, lol. But I couldn't make them justify the risk to each other (or to myself), regardless of how excited they were, so I scrapped that idea.

Hard times are coming up for Slash and Gardevoir, so I'm getting in as much fluff as I can now...

DemonicStrife---While I can't say what precisely with happen with Slash and Team Aqua...mostly because I haven't solidified it to myself, heh...I can say for certain that Archie is going to regret recruiting this trainer.

And yes, the reading scene was cute, huh? While Gardevoir is very intelligent, there are aspects of society that she's unfamiliar with, so...heh. She likes popcorns, you know.

Magi Kavin---Glad you're enjoying, heh. The next chapter should be out within the next few days.

Luminous Dark---You have no idea, heheheh.

dragonofunity---You won't have to wait too long...although it may be a while before Arc 2 starts after that.

benn454---Maybe it's best that they saw Titanic this time...you don't whip out Rocky movies til the third date, heh. They better get it on video though, because they'll need privacy once things start to heat up...
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From benn454 on September 27, 2007
That was an awesome chapter :D Slash teaching Psymakio to read was utterly adorable. Titanic? I'd rather see Rocky as well :P I'll call of the laser-wielding cyborg elephants. For now...

Can't wait for the next chapter. I wonder who has more stamina, a human or a Gardevoir? =3
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From ANON - dragonofunity on September 26, 2007
I ablioty can't what for the naxt update
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From Darkone21 on September 26, 2007
gawd damn man with all that pent up passion between them .. its about to get messy in that room ^^
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From ExponentialD on September 26, 2007
So far, I'm loving the fiction. It's suitably long every chapter, and I do so enjoy the HumanxGardevoir aspects. I'll be looking forward to future chapters!
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From ANON - DemonicStrife on September 26, 2007
To Black Whole: He sure does. Makes me happy that in Sinners, he was arrested for sexual abuse of his Pokemon. XD

To Slash: Forgot to mention, another great chapter. So in a way, I was correct in my assumption of Team Aqua wanting Slash to join. Heh. And the part where Gardevoir learns to read was absolutely adorable. Nearly had a fluff overload. XD Also... well, actually that's all I've got for now, heheh. ^^; I'm patiently waiting for that lemony goodness, so update soon, or I'll send my army of nuclear-equipped zombie pirates to your doorstep. =D
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From Review on September 26, 2007
Slash Firestom, I bow to you. This chapter was so incredible. Too bad in the movie they couldn't have gotten intimate...dammit, why'd other people have to be there?! *cries* oh well. Next chapter should make up for that...Right? Oh yes, I'm sure of that...xD. And if you keep making such cute scenes between Slash and Gardevoir, then me and the ninja-gophers are gonna demand more. YOU HERE ME!? lol

Keep up the kickass work, Slash!!!!

KABOOM!
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From ANON - DemonicStrife on September 26, 2007
You won't fucking believe this. (Or maybe you will -_-) Well, yesterday I was bored nearly to death, and as I skipped through channels on my TV, I stopped on Pokemon D&P. Seeing as my boredom level was near max, I decided to watch. Well, the episode was about Ash once again battling a gym leader, who was apparently a user of rock types. (You probably know where this is going.) The gym leader eventually brings out an Onix, and Ash of course chooses that electric rat. Being the dipshit that he is, he actually makes his Pikachu THUNDERBOLT THE ONIX. AGAIN! Seriously, I give up. I gave the show one more little chance, and the main character fucks it up once again. I'm never gonna have anything to do with that show ever again. (But I'll always play the games. :3) I'm really hoping that you'll write another Ash-bash fic, Slash, 'cause I really wanna see that little faggot suffer.... Please?
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 26, 2007
Isaac---Rather than forgetting what Watson told him about the Magmas and Aquas, it's one of the reasons Slash decided to join...revenge. Let's just hope things go smoothly with that for him and Gardevoir...

Slash and Kiako DO look similar, yes, and there's a reason for that...the original incarnations of Slash and Kiako are both demons of the same species. And while the stories and incarnations of the two may change greatly...the two will always be bitter enemies.

Whether or not there is any connection between the two in Sinners remains to be seen.

anon---OH NOES, NOT PLOT!

I had the mental image of Slash teaching Gardevoir how to read a while back, and wanted desperately to put it in the main story. Luckily, it DOES fit...and the reason why Psymakio was capable of reading the 'prophesy artifact' and not standard script will become clear in time. In any case, yes, it is very cute.

The next chapter will be very, very lemony. In fact, my biggest plot problem will be keeping the amount of times they fuck to a reasonable level. XD

chaoslord---I've been getting a lot more hits ever since the short sexiful scene earlier, and yeah, once I have 10000+ words of lemon in one chapter...heh. I also hope that newer readers don't only want sex in this story, because I'll be honest...the plot will always be top priority, and there won't be sex when the situation does not allow it. I do not force lemon, and I refuse to sacrifice story quality for sex scenes.

As time goes on, there will be several PWP oneshots of Sinners, so hopefully those will satisfy the less plot-inclined crowd I'm sure I'll draw.
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From dooomdude on September 26, 2007
Well man, once again another great chapter. I cant think of anything to say that i havnt said before. Well, im sure yur gonna get a LOAD of hits after the next chapter, hopefully those people will actually read the story, just not the smut. Its a really great piece of work, you should be proud man.
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From ANON - anon on September 26, 2007
I've been waiting for this update for what feels like FOREVER, and what do you give us? Actual plot development? How dare you...

Well at least the next chapter ought to be filled with lemony goodness (and it better be lemony! LEMONY I SAY!). Interesting plot developments in this chapter, liked the Team Aqua spin on things, and the scene where Slash was teaching Gardevoir to read was absolutely adorable.

With praise aside, the next chapter had better be one big ole' sour lemon! ( ...in a good way ;D )
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