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By : Stormborn Apostle

From Stormborn Apostle on September 24, 2007
Imasuky Lomae---Yes. That devious bastard, whoever he is, even has the same contact information as me! He must be some sort of evil mirror-universe-Slash...yeah...

RoboRed---Plus, if they were invisible, it would make finding their, uh, targets somewhat difficult.

Imasuky Lomae about the cereal-prize pic---Slash got revenge by...I dunno, spanking her.

Black Whole---UPDATE WILL OCCUR TOMORROW OMG OMG

RoboRed---I know, I know...

Imasuky Lomae---Yay for 400 reviews, even if half of them are responses! And the Misery novel > Misery movie. Except that poor Paul gets hurt a fuck of a lot more in the novel...

Fluffy_lover---Big reviews are good, heh. Things are gonna get fucking crazy up in here once the story gets even longer.

GENERAL NOTES

After the first arc is complete (after chapter 16), there will be a moderate break before I begin Arc 2. I need to shore up the current chapters for editing and such...currently all chapters are only double-run edited (meaning, only checked once by eye and once by spellcheck), and I know there are some grammatical issues and very minor continuity/wording glitches that need to be ironed out. Plus, ya know, I have like half a dozen unfinished works that have been sitting around for months...and I'd like to get SOME work down on them.

At the very least, Ballad of the Wind Fish and Stand By Me need a few more chapters between them.

But don't none of you worry...Sinners ain't going nowhere.

NOW, BACK TO WORK FOR ME
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From ANON - Fluffy_lover on September 24, 2007
Sorry Slash , my review will take a little while to do . I re-read your story twice , I've found a few points to discuss and I took some notes . A very big review is coming...soon . (HA! See what I did there?)

Oh btw , Imasuky,RoboRed , CrazyIvan...I will win the review contest! MWHAHAHAHAHA!

Things are heating up , both on Sinners and on the reviews...Damn if this isn't the best fic in this site I will eat my socks , that I've been using for a week !
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From Bishonen on September 24, 2007
400 reviews Also I watched Misery the other day and it gave me some ideas Bwhahaha

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From RoboRed on September 24, 2007
Lol...okay...so far we've got:

- samurai flesh-eating pandas that will break into your house, drink all your mountain dew, and make a bunch of long-distance phone calls
- a league of breadstick-weilding hamsters that will raid you and poke you to death
- and penguin minions who will pelt your house with snowballs of DOOOOM.

...

Better get that update in, or it's gonna be a very sorry morning. :P
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From Bishonen on September 24, 2007
I saw that pic you drew with the charging sharpedo toy when i saw that i nearly pissed myself laughing.

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From RoboRed on September 24, 2007
(dammit...I clicked the remove button...)

Ah well, you didn't leave any subtle hints to sarcasm like slash did...

And slash, I know that the invisibility thing would be too easy..I was just mentioning technical stuff for the heck of it. Invisiblility would defeat one of the majoir points in the story, now wouldn't it? :P
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From Bishonen on September 23, 2007
I know i was doing the same thing.

With Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From Bishonen on September 23, 2007
I saw the comments and if you're not the one who made them then you should find that other slash and tell him to stop takeing credit for your work.

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 23, 2007
RoboRed---Invisibility would be TOO easy, though. Can't have them consistently getting it on without any risk of getting caught...that'd just be boring. :3

Imasuky Lomae---Kiako's background and goals will become greatly expanded upon as we enter the second arc of the story. Just what the fuck is he, where'd he come from, and what exactly is he after?

Maxie did know about Watson and his role in the events of the day both teams were crippled, and that is why he wanted to avoid a conflict with the old electric man...and why, when Maxie was taken down, the Magmas weren't able to respond rationally...instead, they just tried to blitz Mauville, and they paid for it. More Magma/Aqua history and events will be upcoming, both in the next chapter and the next arc.

Like Watson, Briney hasn't forgotten about Team Aqua, either...maybe there will be a little reunion between the old men and the current Team Aqua someday... :-O

Gardevoir's past...the good and the bad...are going to be put to the test. She may be just a little shaken up when confronted with the same kind of Pokemon that killed her family...at least now she won't be alone when she faces her fears.

The Pearls, the prophesy...heheh. The truth behind Giovanni and Kiako's goals...and the truth of the prophesy...have been revised significantly since I began writing. I thought I knew what would happen, but just a few days ago a new idea popped in my head...heh. All I can say is that the inevitable confrontation is going to be big.

BIG SEX SCENE COMING UP AFTER THE NEXT CHAPTER. I won't let anyone down...and everyone will be up. ;-)

If you wanna see the best Gardevoir pic I've seen so far, here it is:

http://www.aerisdies.com/img.php?id=150038

That's what I envision Gardevoir to look like...slim, sexy, silver, heh. Fapfapfap.

The next chapter is nearing completion...should be done tomorrow or Tuesday if all goes well.

You're right about the chapter size, too. Early chapters were pretty short, but the more recent ones have been around/over 10000 words. I thought I preferred shorter chapters, but now...well, my muse is hankering for more meat per chapter, so...we'll see how long that continues. ^_^

And yes, that was a long review.

benn454---Glad you enjoy! ALTHOUGH I TOTALLY DON'T GO TO THAT HENTAI SITE. JUST BECAUSE THERE'S AN ACCOUNT NAMED SLASHFIRESTORM ON AD, AND I REFERENCE PICTURES FROM IT, DOESN'T MEAN I GO TO A FILTHY PORNOGRAPHIC SITE LIKE THAT

...totally not! No!

...lol :3
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From benn454 on September 23, 2007
Suikotsu from AerisDies checking in.

I see you made good on your idea to write a humanxGardevoir fic, and I must say; Bravo! My hat's off to you, good sir. :)
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From Bishonen on September 23, 2007
One last last thing that had to be the longest review i ever wrote.

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From Bishonen on September 23, 2007
One last thing to say almost 400 reviwes.

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From Bishonen on September 23, 2007
I reread the story just because and here�s a few thoughts and comments

1. Even though Slash is a lot stronger he has a long way to go before he can take on Kiako and his freaky arm also I cant wait to find out more about his red eyes that is just so fucking cool.

2. Too bad for Maxie he didn�t know more about Watson or else he might have lived.

3. I wonder will Briney be any help with Aqua since they�ve shown up now.

4. Slash said to Gardevoir that home is where the heart is so that�s why he has a girl back home wherever she is earlier in the story Slash commented on how nice the area they were in was nice and Kirlia said It reminds me of home, Well, where I lived before I met you. because now, home is wherever you go, and i wouldn�t have it any other way.

5. I still have only a very hazy idea of what Giovanni is after with the pearls I cant wait until more of the prophecy is reveled.

6. Gardevoir is hot and I already know that you can write great sex scenes and I�m dyeing for some even if it�s a none cannon one-shot although something connected to the plot would be better I guess I�ll just have to wait a while longer.

7. I�ve been looking all over for Gardevoir pics and one of the best ones I found had her dressed as a bunny girl complete with puffball tail.

9. I hope the next chapter is up soon I love this story and think that everyone who reads it and has an account should put it into their recommended reading section especially if you don�t have any stories of your own that was why I first made an account a few years ago.

10. Because of this story I�m going to put more effort into my own pokemon story Pink Version which is pretty much the opposite of this and now I�ve decided that one of the characters will have both a Gardevoir and a Gallade one her team and a relationship with her female Gardevoir because interspecies yuri is good but rare.

11. Back when I first saw this story I was hesitant about reading it because I didn�t know what to expect from a pokemon/human love story but this is better than I could have imagined back when I saw it frist posted

12. I�d forgotten how short the early chapters were in comparison to some of the newest ones I hope that they stay like they are now but if they keep getting longer my as might end up fusing with my chair.

13. I�m throwing my hat into the ring for best reviewer and I�ve go the jump on you CrazyIvan and if you beat me then my Samurai Flesh Eating Pandas will break into your house and drink all your Mountain Dew and make a bunch of long distance phone calls.

14. Wow that was a lot longer than I thought it would be well I�m going to wrap everything up and just wait for the next chapter on the edge of my seat.

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From RoboRed on September 22, 2007
*response to Slash's response to Imasuky* -- Well, if you wanna get technical, Gardevoir could actually make them invisible by using telekinesis to bend light around them (hey, it said in the game that Gardevoirs have the ability to create black holes...so if they have the power to do that...).

CrazyIvan -- owchies...rofl...
Well, define "a few", and we'll see...I guess part of the reason it was so long is because I came late in the game. Usually if I come into a discussion later, I try to keep on top of whatever was said earlier. (or something like that)

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From Stormborn Apostle on September 22, 2007
Fluffy_Lover---Awesome, heh. I love reading reeeeally long fics (like, takes-me-a-whole-day long), and eventually Sinners will become one of those stories, heh.

Imasuky Lomae---Kick ass. I'll check that stuff out later, because there are a few stories around here which I owe a lot to for inspiration.

CrazyIvan---24 years. O_O

Imasuky Lomae again---Yes, she could teleport while doing it, and float, and maybe make a force field around them and do it under the ocean if she gets strong enough...hm, that'd be a good way to avoid detection!

CrazyIvan again---Slash hearts long reviews!
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