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Reviews for Sinners

By : Stormborn Apostle

From ANON - CrazyIvan(Again) on September 22, 2007
I forgot. RoboRed, I noticed your long review earlier. Now, seeing as it isn't quite as long as mine, but damn close. I'm afraid, you've given me no other choice. (takes out a glove, and slaps RoboRed across the cheek)
After the next few chapters, I challenge you to a write off. Who ever can write a review, that covers the entire story, and is longer than the other person's, is the better reviewer.
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From Bishonen on September 22, 2007
8890 positions wow and when you add in the fact that Gardevoir levitate that makes things even more interesting

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From ANON - CrazyIvan(LeaveAMessage) on September 22, 2007
(picks up a book) There are 1872 known sexual positions, with a total of 7018 variances. That's a total of 8890 positions. Ergo, having sex in one different position, once a day, every day, would take 8890 days. I'm not going to bother with years, because I don't feel like dividing in 4 unit segements. (puts book down)

Now anyways, this was another good, long chapter, and you're still going strong.
I look forward to the next chapter.
Semper phi, carry on...
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From Bishonen on September 22, 2007
Recommended Reading is back and this was the first story a put in there.

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From ANON - Fluffy_Lover on September 21, 2007
I will dedicate this day to reading your fic , Slash . I will re-read it and write some comments while I read. I've been posting a review per chapter so far , it's about time to write something about the story as a whole.

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From Stormborn Apostle on September 21, 2007
DizzyRye---I can honestly say that a Ditto will be in this story...but I won't reveal it's exact role yet, heh. However, a sexiful Ditto...that'd make an interesting oneshot...

Speaking of, I've begun planning a PWP oneshot for Sinners. It'll be done...eventually. Probably sometime after Chapter 16.

monkeygodlance---Newgrounds is so swell.

I've begun writing chapter 15...expect it in a day or two.
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From monkeysocietyleader on September 20, 2007
I've loved Sinners since I first started reading it. I found out about it on Newgrounds and was a bit wary of it, but after reading the first few chapters I couldn't stop reading it. Cant wait for the next chapter.
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From ANON - DizzyRye on September 20, 2007
Hearing you mention an 'on-the-run' arc and meeting other cross-species couples makes me say one thing. Ditto, please?
Not sure if you already had any couples planned, but I think it'd be the cat's pajamas to see a person and a Ditto in love. Both because as a Ditto, there'd be all sorts of knowledge about blending into society, tricks to hiding public displays of emotion and all that sort of thing. Oh, and Ditto tentacle fun time show!
(I know that's why the first Pokegirl I chose for my story was a Titto, at least.)
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 20, 2007
RoboRed---Neither can I. :3

Pokefurry---I didn't choose Gardevoir as the romance Pokemon because she was human, but because of the mental bond thing being a good plot device (see the Star Wars fic "Forbidden" for an awesome use of a similar mental connection). Lots of Pokemon could be physically compatible with humans, even if only on a basic level (as in, intercourse being impossible, but other activities still available).

chaoslord---Gardevoir is fucking adorable.

I never really took writing lessons...the closest I'd have to that would be my time in journalism and the school newspaper in high school...but I've always been a fairly proficient writer. The kind of guy who could bullshit his way through any essay, for example. Although I should probably be arrested for my crimes against the ellipsis (...) and my wanton abuse against the humble semicolon. XD

Nothing wrong with me inspiring you to write...like I've said before, this entire fic was inspired from someone else's story (which I personally consider to be superior to my humble work), heh.

Ol' Slashy is looking into getting a piece of good art done, but I've gotta wait a while to see if the artist will accept my request. Until then, I'm fine with making my own horrible images, lol.

Chapter 15 planning is complete. Writing will commence after I catch some sleep. The next chapter will be entitled "Running With The Devil"...when that title popped in my head, I damn near creamed myself and listened to the song a few hundred times. :3
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From dooomdude on September 19, 2007
Another great chapter man, you never fail! I laughed so much with Psymakio growling at that girl in the restaurant... so cute. Hey, seriously man, did you take writing lessons or is this just all naturall to you man? Mainly because, as cheesy as it sounds, you have inspired me to ATTEMPT my own fanfic. I can think up these great ideas, but when i attempt to write them... my brain practically shuts down on me... blah...

Hey have you ever considered having a professional title art for your story? I dunno if your already working on that or anything... but id be willing to pull some strings and maybe toss in some $$ to help out if yah want...

Well man, once again man great chapter, and a hell of way to end it too man, those two just kant seem to get a break can they? Looking forward to your next one man. EPIC!!!!!!
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From ANON - Pokefurry on September 19, 2007
One pokemon that could be used with a human is Machamp but that would be freaky
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From RoboRed on September 19, 2007
oooh goody! I can't wait. :D
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 19, 2007
Isaac---Don't worry, there will be more sex and violence soon, heheh.

Asrael---I ain't gonna quit til it's done, heheh.

negativety101---Some heavy shit will be happening with Team Aqua in the near future...

Yes, the Jirachians pretty much worship the Pokemon that they do because...well, they're greedy. Most religions started out with people not liking the idea that their lives were out of their hands, and so they made up deities that controlled their life, and the concept that pleasing such deities could bring them fortune. It's a way of escaping reality and denying responsibility for both one's own faults and circumstances beyond their control. And, of course, when stuff doesn't go their way, they assume that the deity is angry, and thus they blame something...or someone...and censure them.

Bleh.

Legendary Pokemon in this story...and Pokemon in general...don't necessarily have the same power ratio as they do in the game. While Sinners follows basic strategy and mechanics fairly dead-on, things aren't dead-set to the exact stats of the game. For example, we can all guess what the "Three Princes" are, particularly with Relicanth and Wailord being required to access them. Those three Pokemon, while 'legendary', aren't particularly super-powerful, but in this story they're near-godlike. A few other legendary Pokemon, while not uber-powerful in the games, will play enormous roles in this story.

As for attraction to Pokemon...yeah, there are some Pokemon that couldn't be with humans, based on sheer physical differences...although a great deal of them, the majority for certain, could manage in some capacity. But in the cases where it's simply impossible, it's unlikely that any attraction would show up, anyway...for example, Magneton or Wailord (god help anyone who fell for a Wailord). It would all depend on the situation. There will be a few other human-Pokemon couples in this story, during the 'on-the-run' arc later, but none of them will be particularly unbelievable.
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From ANON - negativety101 on September 19, 2007
Another great chapter. It does a good job showing the deepening bond between the two leads, and establishing the inherent problems and corruption that have driven Teams Aqua and Magma to become what they have, and the atrocities they will engage in. Though it seems Slash needs to get better at not saying some things aloud.
It's intersting that the Jirachians worship Jirachi, as there is nothing in any of it's entreys that really make it sound divine. Rather it just grants wishes. So it seems they are really just sucking up to the one who they hope will do something for them in return, as oppesed to the likes of Arcues, Groudon, Kyoger, Rayquaza, Dialgia, Pailkia, and Regigigias, whos entry's all seem to imply they had major roles in the creation of the world. Incedently looking at the stats using Daimonds handy comparison feature my highest Jirachi is weaker than Dialga, Regigigas, Rayquaza, Kyogere, Heatran, Groudon(whos elemental advantages would kill it dead several times over) And Giratina. Granted a few of them were in the 70's as oppesed to lvl52 like the Jirachi, but still...
Now on the subject of cross species relationships. In the case of something like a Gardevoir it's huge thing in my opinion. Both in terms of physical and mental similarities I don't think their would be a huge amount of problems. Something like a Magnaton would be impossible to have any kind of romantic or physical relationship with, due to the fact it's a genderless inorganic lifeform, that most likely has radicly different though processes. Again their is unlikly to be any possibily of such feelings with a bug type pokemon. But when you get to those who both have simeler thought processes and biologys, it becomes less improbable. To use Star Trek as an example, who even blinks about Spocks parents relationship, due to the simelarities. In terms of mental development a Gardevoir is every bit a humans equal(and possibly superior. Several psychic types are stated in their pokedex entreys to by smarter then humans. I don't recall Gardevoirs ever saying it, but I could be wrong.)
Well this got off on a tangent for a review, but the story is one that well deserves deeper looks. It's worth noting that the human culture looks down on the pokemon, and assumes they must always be victemized or defective in relationships such as the protagonists. But as has been shown, the Pokemon do know what their doing, and are far less brutal and cruel than humans.
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From ANON - Asrael on September 19, 2007
i just want to say this.
IF U QUIT THIS STORY NOW IM GONNA KILL YOU!!!!!
Keep upp the good writing man. always exiting to see updates ^.^
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