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By : Stormborn Apostle

From ANON - Isaac on September 19, 2007
*sniff* such a unique story it brings a tear of joy to my eye, and yeah I love fluff, but this is an ADULT site, and of course I come here for the ummmmmmm "special" differences between these fanfics and normal fanfics lol, anywho you have some great skill in writing my friend, you are great at fluff and nowhere near lacking when it comes to the oh so appreciated smut, keep em coming, and I have to agree with some of the other reviews, I love the violence, it was something I found really irritating about the show, you don't get bit by a Golbat and just have a little scratch mark to show for it lol those fangs are like 6 inces long!! wheres the blood?, oh thats right its in this story, finnaly Team magma and team aqua ain't so harmless to the general public anymore like in the games huh?
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From ANON - Isaac on September 19, 2007
Keep updating please, I've been on this site for a while as a reader, and "Sinners" has become my favorite story thus far keep em coming as fast as you can, awsome awsome awsome story
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 19, 2007
Gardevoir is very yummy. Be proud of Slash's self control...a lesser man would have just jumped on her in front of everyone!
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From ANON - SilverSyntho on September 19, 2007
Slash's mini-rant regarding the ketchup was the best thing ever. Can't wait to see what the frig Archie wants.
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 19, 2007
DemonicStrife---Oh yes, Archie is interested in Slash...and if he forces a fight, ol' Slash and Gardevoir are pretty much fucked without the other Pokemon. Oh noes!

And I'm still rockin' over getting 10k hits, heheh. 20000, here we come!

Luminous Dark---I continuously make longer chapters, but I still can't promise that every one from now on will be 10000+ words...it's just been luck so far, heh. I can promise, however, that the first sex scene will be the longest chapter so far. :3

RoboRed---That is certainly a long review.

Yes, this story is a lot like Romeo and Juliet, except that everyone hates them and there are psychic powers and ancient prophesies and twisted half-human monstrosities and more hawt sex. Take THAT, Shakespeare, you bastard!

Realism is why this story is so cool...I'd like to see the anime or games try to show a Guillotine attack just 'making the opponent faint'. Or a Fire Blast capable of melting boulders making someone singed. HAHA, not going to happen.

This story would probably have three times as many hits if I hurried the fuck up with the lemon, but I like plot more than random sex. But for you perverts who are just begging for sexfulness...chapter 16 will be nothing but sexifulness, heheh.

Lately I've updated very rapidly, especially compared to the way it used to be, where I'd go a month or three between updates...I have nothing else to do, so expect relatively quick updates for the foreseeable future!

DizzyRye---When I was originally planning the basic plotline of Sinners, I never thought I'd make Watson into such a pivotal character. It wasn't until I started writing that it just sort of happened...so who knows who else will end up playing large roles throughout this story?

And yeah, once I get some sleep, I'll be glad to give em a read, heh.

anon---Well, the smut won't be until chapter 16, but we're getting very very close! :-D

some one---Heheh, thanks.
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From ANON - some one on September 19, 2007
Fucking awesome. That's all I can say on this one Slash.
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From ANON - anon on September 19, 2007
Another fantastic chapter. Can't wait for some Gardevoir/Slash smut next chapter. Otherwise, great fluff and back story. Keep up the fantastic writing.
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From DizzyRye on September 18, 2007
I really have to say, I'm starting to hate you. This story just gets better and better, and makes my own seem so horrible in comparison. Rather frustrating.
That being said, I found it absolutely amazing how you crafted Watson into such a complex and believable character, before your story I had pictured him as the energetic old fogey type, but now he seems like a real person! And considering he's practically a side character in your story, how much more that says about the stars.
Great work, I expect even better things to come!
(And if it's not too much trouble, if you could read over some of my works and give me some pointers...?)
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From RoboRed on September 18, 2007
Please forgive me for a moment. I may bounce from one thing to another in this review. I tend to go off on long tangets.

I'm a sucker for cutsey fluffy romance stories. I'm also a fan of angsty/dark stories. Piut them together however, and you've got me hooked. It's kind of like the story of Romeo and Juliet. Bunches of loveyness and dark death stuff (I'm not alluding to the fact that the two heroes in this story will die though...god I hope not...)

I absolutely LOVE this fic. It's jsut exactly the kind of romancey/dark thing I like. Except for a small number of spelling mistakes/grammar (and whatnot), This is completely brilliant. I'm also a fan of poke'mon, and I love how you've made it more realistic (unlike the anime...being scorched by a massive fire blast/electric surge does more than make you a little black and crispy). You've improved on it and more, and twisted the regular story in a cool way.

I like the religious addon. That's something you normaly don't see in games and it gives an intersting twist. I like how the criminal organizations are a hundred times more evil and ruthless. More importanly, I like the aspect of the dying/death stuff. Good dark stuff. I wish you'd work on the battles a little more. Like the chapter where the Magmas made a mass seige on Mauville. Sounded dark, but a little more point on a few individual battles would have made them seem more than a background (like having Slash and Kirlia get caught in random duels between the townsfolk and Magmas, not getting bombarded by random poke'mon).

I like the personalities given to the various poke'mon, especially Gardevoir (one of my faves). Nice, inquisitive, protective, and I like the psychic bond thing (kind of expected though). The biological aspects (skin-clothing thingie) were pretty ingenius, and also make this fic more realistic. I can't wait for the actual lemon part. Actually in reference to that, I like (and to some bit hate) the fact that you built up the characters personalities (but there's no instantaneous lemonyness, and therefore no fap fap...). It's an important part of the story, especialyl one this long.

On some general notes (and a reading of the long list of reviews), I'm glad I found this story two days ago (just in time to catch the next update). Normally after having to stop reading at the point of thirteen chapters, my brain jsut screams "OMIGODZ NOOO! IT'S OVERR!!! I NEEDS MORE" Then I remember, "You lunkhead...he said 'To be continued' on it." So yeah, I got to see another chapter two days later. But apparently, after reading the long list of reviews, you take ages to update. (once again, I got lucky, but I shouldn't get used to it...) I also got confused when you introduced some D/P stuff. Like you, I don't have D/P (me needs a DS). So I don't know much about it(I should look at serebii.net more...).

Anyways, awesome story, keep up the good work, and HURRY AND FREAKIN' UPDATE BEFORE MY PENGUIN MINIONS PELT YOUR HOUSE WITH SNOWBALLS OF DOOOOOOM.

Cheers. ^_^
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From Darkone21 on September 18, 2007
need i say more than this .. simply godly man

romance , angst , passion , doubt .. you bring it all and then to top it off with an epic chapter in size and sheer stoping power .. you rawk
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From ANON - DemonicStrife on September 18, 2007
Uh huh...

Damn cliffhanger!!! My face was practically in my PSP (computer problems ^^;)!!! Yeah... I'm that devoted to this story. Anyways, wonder what Team Aqua has in store. I'm guessing they're possibly thinking of trying to recruit Slash, after the whole Magma incident. Or want info on the Sea Pearl.

This story's over 10000 hits, and it's not even at the lemon. O_O Whole...Lee...shit.
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 18, 2007
ThatGuy---If the psychic world's a rockin'...

Incidentally, I bet my hit rate will double once I get THAT chapter out, heh.

Imasuky Lomae---It's so hard to have a romantic moment without some dipshits ruining it. :-(

Next chapter will be...hopefully soon. I'm guessing it'll be shorter than the last few chapters, but I still need to plan it before I start writing.

DRD---Cliffhangers, eheheh.

You know, when you think about it, the entire concept of the Pokemon franchise is pretty fucked up. Taking creatures that are established to be sentient and free-thinking from their natural environment, enslaving them with restraining devices and mind-control badges, pumping them full of drugs and enhancers, and then having them fight to exhaustion for entertainment...makes the concept of fucking one seem pretty tame in comparison, huh?

And yes, Slash and Gardevoir are going to need to be more careful...can't have her growling at every female that passes, and can't have him teasing her shy little self out loud, heh. But I'd never let them get found out this early in the story.

...would I? :-/
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From ANON - DRD on September 18, 2007
Goddamn you Slash you evil mothaf***a!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Why, why end such a good chapter with a cliffhanger?!
EVIL!!!!!!!!!

Nice chapter though. Some deep insights, and the Burning Of The Beach was absolute genius! Sometimes I wonder if the guy who made pokemon had a more realistic approach to the series, but was forced to dumb it down for the kiddies... And you have the darker, better version of his work for yourself.

Also, you make Slash flirt OUT LOUD waaaaay to much to keep any kind of secret. He's going to have to cut it out unless he wants discovery to come within a few chapters...
It won't, will it?
Will it?
Update it, and quickly! (And hurry, get it done before the 25th... I won't have the time to read ANYTHING for a few days after Halo 3 comes out...)
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From Bishonen on September 18, 2007
Damn Fuck Shit Hell!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Why did it have end like that Update soon or i might have a heart attack.

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From Review on September 18, 2007
Hm, Chapter 16? I'm guessing a couple things.

1)important event in the plotline

2)as said in an earlier review,"EXTREME FUCKING FLUFF"

I think I know what's gonna happen xD.
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