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By : Stormborn Apostle

From ANON - DRD on September 13, 2007
Imasuky Lomae, that's a good point.
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SOYLENT GREEN IS MADE OF PIKACHU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Update soon, please? All 3 chapters in september would be killer pwn... do it do it do it!
Consider it a challenge or something.
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From Bishonen on September 13, 2007
Something I just thought of me and my friends talked about this when pokemon first came out maybe you could address it in your fic at some time wher do they get they meat for hamburgers and stuff like

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 13, 2007
Oh, there will almost always be SOME fluff...I mean...well, when I had a girlfriend a long LONG LONG time ago, I remember me and her talking on the phone, having such enlightened conversation as "I love you". "I love you more." "I love you most." "I love you more than that." "I love you more than [insert cheesy crap here]".

I can totally see Slash and Gardevoir talking like that even during epic battles. :3 They're so cuuuute.

Slash also has a surprise in store for Psymakio...you'll see in a couple chapters. ^_^

Ya know, even though I don't really like Christmas (commercial racket), I can still write a cutesy idealized Christmas. It doesn't even matter that Christmas wouldn't be celebrated in a Jirachian world, cuz IT'S A ONESHOT AND DOESN'T NEED TO MAKE PERFECT SENSE. Hot chocolate, mistletoe, exchanging gifts, making love in front of a fireplace...:red: oh yeah, that'd work just fine.

HURRY UP WINTER

And you know, if I could draw well, there'd be so much hentai/ecchi work for Sinners already...heheheh...

Yeah, chapter 14 is coming together well, and since I inadvertently planned chapters 15 and 16 as well, the next three chapters should be released over a relatively short time period: possibly all three in September. :-D

I looove talking with all my readers...I just wish AFF divided reviews up onto pages of 100 apiece, because whenever I click on the review page, it takes my computer longer and longer to load it. :3

BACK TO WRITING!
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From ANON - Fluffy_Lover on September 13, 2007
Hm so the next 3 chapters will have fluff, even if it's only minimal ? Hmm I could get used to this =)

I hope that this fic gets much more chapters . When Gardevoir evolved I thought " Oh shi- , that happened faster than I expected"....Since Kirlia's evolution is such a important part of the history , I thought that we were getting to the end of it ...but then I thought about Giovanni , and teh Big red-eyed guy and all that stuff ....I don't think that this fic is ending anytime soon =D And that's good , very good indeed.

I'm liking this one-shots idea more and more . Some PWP might be good , but a christmas special....AHHH that can be a very nice story indeed and since I know that you will be the one writting it .....I can't wait it =] As always , take your time .

Damn , when I was 13/14 I started taking some anime/manga-drawing lessons , but the professor had to move away and I couldn't continue it . I'd love to make a manga of this story. Too bad , but maybe I can make a game of it , when I get to be a game designer? That would be a secret between us , of course , since it'd probably be hentai =3
Well I don't know if I'll do that , but I promise that if I ever plan to make a pokemonish-type game , it will be unique and much more mature than the ones we have now =) And the main character will be named Slash ;P

So you plan to update the fic in about a week? That's fast >_> You're doing some overtime with your Muse Slash ?

I agree that the communication with your fans is helping your fic Slash and is nice to know that you are so dedicated to it. Hehe but now that you said that , you will have to endure me to the very end!

Well see ya in the next chapter , I gotta go back to studying. I still don't think that I will make it in the first try , but hell let's give it a shot . The exam is very close to my birthday , that would be a nice birthday gift =3
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 13, 2007
Current predictions:

14---Fluff, significant plot developments
15---Major plot developments, minimal fluff
16---EXTREME FUCKING FLUFF, end of Arc 1 (Summer of 16)

At least that's what I'm planning at the moment. :3
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From Darkone21 on September 13, 2007
my spidey sense tells me 14 is going to be epic winnage .. honestly amoung all the writers i comment on slash might be one of the best
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 12, 2007
I'm very happy that I got to write some fluff after all that angst, heh. And an even fluffier chapter will occur in the near-ish future. ^_^

Incidentally, yes, Corphish is awesome.
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From sillyneko345 on September 12, 2007
The happier chapter we've all been waiting for!!! (well I've been waiting for it anyway X3) And cute/sweet/flirty Gardevoir is *love!* I'm so glad they got to have their moment. Which was very tastefully written, by the way... And Corphish at the end there just made me grin, getting a *little* too enthusiastic about "helping" its buddies. It's one of my very favorite pokemon, that's for sure.

Excellent job as always, and still eager for more!
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 12, 2007
Heheh, yeah. Furries are gonna have a field day...

...wait, since I'm writing it, does that make me a furry?

lolohshit
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From Bishonen on September 12, 2007
I cant wait for the update or the crazy-ass orgies with leather and Lopunny

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 12, 2007
Fluffy_Lover---Be careful, I spent most of my second semester in college skipping class and reading fanfictions in the university library. IT'S ADDICTING! :3

Do whatever you want with your life, even if other people think it's dumb. One of the major themes of this story, as well as my own personal philosophy, is "who gives a shit what other people think of you?", heh. You go with what makes you happy, and if others don't approve...well, they can learn to deal with it, lol.

I usually like writing long, slow-moving romance and stuff...where the characters have time to gradually fall in love...but in this story, that just can't happen, because anytime they'd start getting closer to admitting their feelings to themselves and each other, something catastrophic could happen (such as being beaten up and nearly killed by asshats). Tragedy has brought them together, hardship will keep them close, and nothing short of death will tear them apart.

I can't wait to write the first 'real' sex scene. I plan to devote an entire chapter to it---and not a short chapter, either---and it's not too far off now. My planning has come up with some swell ideas. :-D

Incidentally, YES, I NEED TO UPDATE BALLAD OF THE WIND FISH SO BAD. My first main story, one I had so many ideas for, has been laying idle since March! :-(

Ya know, I often love leading readers in the wrong direction, on purpose. Get them thinking something will happen when something entirely unexpected will. I've been getting a good deal of inspiration lately for the events of later, far-off chapters...and the action will blow you all away, cuz no one will see it coming. :-D

Don't worry about the PWP oneshots just yet; none of those will happen until this first arc is done (I'm guessing two, three more chapters), and by then Slash and Psymakio (Sy-Mach-io, heh) will have been...intimate. Very, very intimate. :3

Also, not all the oneshots will be crazy-ass orgies with leather and Lopunny. Sometimes there will be cutesy stories that fit in with the original Sinners, but don't really have a place in the storyline...like a Christmas special or something, heh. We'll see! ^_^

You know, I think one of the major reasons for the success and growing popularity of Sinners is that the audience and the author, humble ol' me, maintain communication. Not only has all the attention and expressions of enjoyment spurred me to focus on this work over all my other fics, but also gives the readers...something more. Like, I know that there are many authors, many of whom are just as good as me (if not better) who don't really have time to respond to reviews or whatnot (also a common occurrence on Newgrounds). It kind of makes the story and the person behind it mysterious, and while that can sometimes be a good thing...I prefer interacting with my fans, hence the promise I make here and on Newgrounds, that Slash ALWAYS responds to all reviews. It's a little hard sometimes, because I tend to get quite a lot of reviews and a lot more e-mails/instant messages/etc, but it's something I'm glad to do, heh...because then, instead of having 'a bunch of reviewers' and 'the guy who writes this stuff', we got more of a community-type thing going, which is awesome.

Daemon---Originally I thought of maybe making Watson having loved a Pokemon a long time ago, but the "Can You?" part of me (Misery readers will understand what I'm talking about) thought that it'd be just a little too coincidental, heh. But yes, the old guy is someone they can count on...and there won't be many more of them, so Slash and Gardevoir will greatly value his help.

Next chapter is currently being written...ETA is likely sometime this weekend. :-D
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From UnholyJustice on September 12, 2007
HURRAY!!!!

They are finally able to do "stuff" now. Bout time. 13 chapters in and finally they fondle each other. It was a good build up. It's nice you made Watson the old guy who was understanding and is glad they are happy together.

Cant wait for the next chapter!
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From ANON - Fluffy_Lover on September 12, 2007
Oh SHI- they cut off my evil laugh! That last part sounded gay without it !

Let me add it now :

*MWHAHAHAHAHAHAHA*

There you go =D
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From ANON - Fluffy_Lover on September 12, 2007
Damn Slash sorry I�m late again . I�m trying to enter in one of the best universities in Latin America and it�s driving me crazy x_X Your fic is my only salvation!
I�ve decided to be a Game Designer! I never really wanted to accept it , but video games are my life . I know that this my sound sad to some people , even pathetic to others , but guess what? FUCK THEM . I gonna do what I love and the rest of the world can go to hell , I don�t care. Your fic is giving me some courage , I think =) Now I just need to beat about 20.000 to get a spot in teh university! ...yay... Well I may not be able to enter it this year , I�m not used to studying all by myself and the exam is in November already x_X heh ...Well at least now I know what I want , so next year I can prepare myself properly. I�ll be 20-21 , that�s still a good age to enter university , isn�t it?

Now to the fic!

AHHH that was so sweet , I might need to go to a dentist ^^ The fluff was awesome ( you know I love that ...thank you Slash =D ) and the smut was perfect . And damn Slash , I didn�t know you could get so BIG ...

Gay jokes aside , I�m amazed . The giant leap on Gardy x Slash relationship , in such a small time period , and the size of this chapter...Overwhelming (sp?) , I must say!
I already knew your smut-writing style because I read that Zelda fic ( The Ballad of the Fish? Damn I didn�t check it for a long time , did you update it?) . Romantic , as it should be on fics with such a great plot . You avoid repeating terms , thats really great , and you didn�t use too much vulgar language ^^ That can really ruin a sex scene , I can tell ya. Lol @ Slash talking dirty, the cornyness was BEYOUND 9 THOUSAAAAAND (congrats on teh 9000+ views , btw . I�d love to be the 10000th reader , but I don�t think I will be able to do it) .

What I way to end a chapter , as well ! That me me Lol really hard , I almost got caught. When I say lol , I truly mean it . I�m not teh kinda of person that types lol when actually I�m just grinning or smiling . If I type Lol , if because I�m LAUGHING FUCKING OUT LOUD.

Hm I like to try to tell what is going to happen next in the fic , but you are proving to be very hard to read . When Slash started to talk about rape and Gardevoir asked if he couldn�t be raped as well I tought � Oh fuck probably Slash got raped and he will probably try to hide it form her in the whole fic , but in teh end Gardevoir will discove rit and it will lead to some nice fluff � . Then , a few lines later , you reveal that it was actualy his cousin that got raped , without giving too much attention to taht . You know , more previsible authors could base their whole fics on the mistery of Who Got Raped , but you are inprevisible =/
I�m still thinking on some guesses , but I will keep them for now ;p AHH GET OUT OF MY MIND CHARLES !

About the PWP one-shots , I fully support this idea . Just be careful about when you are going to release those , you�d probably wnat to have at least 2 real canon sex scenes before trying something more ....naughty .
Hmm Psymakio? It�s kinda funny to speak that in my language , definetely not something you would want to scream while you orgasm. How should I pronnounce it , Slash ?

Well I guess I typed enough already , I don�t wnat to bother you too much =) But before I go , thank you Slash . When you are praising a real good story/video/whatever , you know that your comment will be another one in a ocean of good reviews , Add that my English isn�t very good , and it would be natural to think that my comments would be ignored ( or at least wouldn�t get too much attention) , but its not like that with you. You gave me attention , and you were kind with me . That really made me happy Slash ,and I really would like to consider us to be friends , even though our communication is limited to reviews . Maybe someday we will talk about much more things , but I won�t push it .
I don�t know when I will be back , Slash , but keep writing >=P You know that I�m always watching you

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From Stormborn Apostle on September 11, 2007
Not only is the story not over yet, but it's just beginning.

Slash and Gardevoir becoming a couple is not so much a major plot point as their continued struggle: the difficulty in keeping their feelings hidden from others, their desire to show affection even in public areas, and the catastrophic effects when (not if, when) it becomes publicly known.

As much as I'd love to have a happy, fluff-filled story where Slash and Gardevoir hang out and giggle and hold hands and make love, it would be unrealistic and...rather boring. They're going to have to contend with enormous challenges, from being found out to continuing their quest for power to stopping Kiako and Giovanni...and they'll have good times and bad times, successes and failures...and in the end, they might not win, they might not survive, but they will stand true.

Thanks for your compliments; I will try my hardest to never disappoint.
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