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By : Stormborn Apostle

From KuraiD on September 09, 2007
O: An arc? I'll be really looking forward to that, since your fic has so "harshly" reminded me on how I myself and my friend were going through the 493 pokemon and go "I'd tap that.", for joke or even more ulterior motives, I'm not saying. But... If I might suggest? Gallade and Lopunny are must-have. But a Blaziken would totally be kickass, since I already know one of my own friends who would totally hunt one down and do things with it if they really existed. XD Milotic would be interesting as well (And we so know Shinnoh champion Cynthia has something going on with hers -shot- ), not to mention Froglass, Snorunt's female-exclusive evolution (with its ghost/ice type combo offering interesting kink potential). Luxray, Arcanine, Typhlosion and Ninetails are all good candidates for 4-legged furries with their rich and warm fur, and in its extension the entire eeveelution family could be considered (Flareon's very warm, and Vaporeon sure would be slick as hell in water. Jolteon probably has a mechanism that can make its fur smooth when it's not threatened. Espeon has an interesting tail, Umbreon would be fun in the dark. Glaceon's adorable, and you'd wonder what Leafeon could do in the woods, etc ;D ). For the tentacle fetish, Tentacruel might get upstaged by Tangrowth, and Lickitung/Lickilicky's tongues certainly do raise some questions. And if you can, I think homosexuality/bisexuality would be interesting, as well. Why not go with Girl/Lopunny or Guy/Blaziken male while you're at it? P:

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I talk too much, don't I. -Shakes head- My apologies. Though, do add poffins and pokeblocs, please? D: I'm sure it's a good way to bond, not to mention that a blue scarf would look Gorgeous on Gardy~ ♥

Then I'll watch the Jirachii freaks with curiosity. O: -Slightly laments on how something as cute as Jira could have such crazy fans- Though... same could be said for our world, eh? Do what you must; the readers have no valid reason to start to complain because this fic itself is way beyond their own capacities.

...Well, wherever your keyboard takes you! :D

-About Arceus-

Yeah, since you find plates by going around in Shinnoh/underground. They are of each type, and have the same effect as the items that are Miracle Seed, Charcoal, TwistedSpoon, Blackglasses, etc. Y'know, type damage+ hold items. Except they're plates. Fire Plate, Mind Plate, Dark Plate, etc. And Arceus' type becomes whatever the Plate it's holding is. And with Judgment's 100 acc/100 power, it's nothing to scoff at.

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From Darkone21 on September 09, 2007
* lurks * still waiting
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 09, 2007
DRD---It's nearing completion, although I'm stopping for tonight (seeing as it's 5 in the morning where I am, and my mind isn't coherent enough to write, heh), but it will be done, most likely, tomorrow. Currently at about 7400 words and still got a ways to go, then I need to proof it.

Fantomius---That's what I heard, too. I wonder how common that thing's gonna be when it's released. Of course, I'm sure plenty of them have already been hacked. In any case, I don't own Diamond or Pearl, and even if I did, I only use super-legendaries when playing by myself, heh.

Onar---If I remember correctly, I have a couple of my old (non-lemon) Golden Sun fics on FanFiction.net, but I stopped using the site when I heard about them banning NC-17 rated stories, partly on principle and partly because I was getting into the lemon scene at the time. If that's still in place, I can't put any of these stories on there, because...well, they're all going to be getting pretty explicit eventually, heh.

The next chapter won't have sex, but it'll have...something. All I'm going to say for now is that the chapter begins with Slash and Gardevoir in bed...and it ends the same way. As for what happens between beginning and end...well, you'll have to wait and see, heh.
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From ANON - Onar on September 09, 2007
Amazing! Your talent is wasted on this site, where nobody is taken seriously. You should really post this on fanfiction.net
As for this chapter specifically, It was nice, if not a little rushed. But I'm glad things worked out in the end. Next chapter is the Lemon, isn't it? I look forward to it.
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From ANON - Fantomius on September 09, 2007
You can�t get Arceus in-game, not unless you cheat that is. The only way to get it is to obtain an event-only item; the Azure Flute. Without this rare item, you can�t get Arceus.

But even if you were to get hold on it, Arceus is an Uber and very unlikely to be allowed in competitive plays. However, even if it were allowed, wining with an Uber is something everyone can do since no skill and intelligence � apart from being able to pres a few bottoms that is - is required to use it.

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From ANON - DRD (wishes he had a real-life Gardevoir) on September 09, 2007
*is close to Sinners-induced mental/emotional orgasm*
Put it up! PUT IT UP!!!! The agony is unbearable! Plus, my metaphorical mind-dick is getting sore and blueish! HURRY!!!!!!

Wait holy shit, aside from having godlike legendary stats, the best moves in the game, looking cool as fuck and having a very awesome name, it can be ANY TYPE?! Holy shit man!
Imagine trading to get six of this fucker at maxed stats...
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 09, 2007
I totally will.

Incidentally, expect chapter 13 tomorrow or Monday; I spent all of today working on a LONG overdue flash I've been promising to do for like, six months.
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From ANON - Anon on September 08, 2007
What?! 9000?!

Now you HAVE to include an 'OMFG 9000 WUT' in the next chapter's author notes. :P
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 08, 2007
KuraiD---Heh, it would be pretty hot, even if no 'swapping' was involved. Although if there were an orgy/in-the-same-room-while-fucking scene, it'd almost surely be a non-canonical oneshot, heh.

Without giving away too much, I'll say that Slash and Gardevoir will eventually be found out by hostile parties (obviously). There will be an arc of the story where they are on the run and get taken in by a group of people in...a similar situation. But I can't give away any details about that, because it'll be a major plot point and I CAN'T AFFORD TO RUIN IT, heh. I will say that both Slash and Gardevoir will benefit from having the insight and experiences of others at their disposal...and their own experiences will help out their benefactors.

As for religion...yeah, I know about Arceus, but I'm gonna go on record now and say that the legendary Pokemon of this story do not necessarily have to be as important/powerful/obscure/etc as in the games. This story will mostly take place in Hoenn, so Jirachism is likely the only major group they'll come against.

Of course, everyone must remember that not all of the story is planned out yet. I have a series of 'plot points', which I must work up to using whatever I can think of. I have several scenes in mind that MUST happen, but everything is pretty much open to me, heh. And if I really wanna do a certain scene that just cannot fit in the story...that's what oneshots are for, heh.

DRD---It can be any fucking type apparently, too. I need to get D/P.

Incidentally, my hit count is OVER 9000!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - DRD on September 08, 2007
Shit, arceus is the official god pokemon now?
And to think you can get one ingame...

Chapter 13? put it up soon!!!
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From KuraiD on September 08, 2007
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I was semi-kidding about the orgy thing. But now that you're actually speculating on it, I know the result would be awesome. XD

Well, either way, I think it'll be interesting for you to introduce another/some other character/s that are in the same situation than Slash, since then in one way, they won't be alone and will be able to relate, and in another, they can know more about these kind of relations by learning from these more "experienced" (A guy with Lopunny or a girl with Gallade who travels constantly for a long time because either they've been found or chased or simply traveling because of an exile, but regretting none of it because the reason why they live are right next to them). Gardevoir can still be a little shy and have light uncertainties, one which a slutty Lopunny could blow off with lighthearted and encouraging (maybe even intentionally dirty) jokes (that's totally her kind of personality, ne?), or a Gallade who, usually quiet but obviously always on guard, could soothe with a serious talk by putting forth the example of the lives they've lead with their trainers/lovers. Especially if it's a girl and a boy, they might escape trouble easily pretending to be boy/girl and Gallade/Gardevoir even though mentally, it's so obvious that it's the other cross-sided around. XD But of course, it won't be exciting if they don't get found out...

And dude. I totally wish I could step into your world and hand you the TM52: Focus Blast.
> http://serebii.net/attackdex-dp/focusblast.shtml

As for religion, it's entirely up to you. Though granted, you're in Hoenn, so Jirachii is dominant. Mew would reign over Kanto, and Serebii in Johto. A side-note, I'm not sure if you've ever heard of Arceus, but it's been pretty much declared as the one god in Pokeverse.
> http://serebii.net/pokedex-dp/493.shtml
So while these can be irrevelant, they could have a part to play if you go beyond Hoenn, say, temporarily on a "business trip". :3
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 08, 2007
It'll be even better when it's longer. I can spend an entire day reading really long stories, even if I've read them a dozen times before, and I love it, heh.
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From Darkone21 on September 08, 2007
Either im hi or this story is as good if not better the second time reading
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 07, 2007
Hehe, you know it.

Incidentally, I am currently writing chapter 13...expect it tomorrow or Sunday; Monday at the latest. :-D
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From Bishonen on September 07, 2007
I'm sure that if you wrote something about Lopunny than sevral of your fans would be stewing in something other than thought

With Love, Imasuky Lomae
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