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By : Stormborn Apostle

From Stormborn Apostle on September 07, 2007
KuraiD---I might mention other religions over the course of this story, but Jirachism is the primary and ever-present opposition and hurdle to our young lovers, mainly because they're fucking everywhere. I do have a scene in mind for later involving a more radical sect of Jirachism, but...I don't wanna reveal anything yet. Besides, y'all are gonna hate that part... :-(

I know about Gallade, and I really wish they'd made it so all male Ralts become Gallades eventually, cuz the possibility of still having a male Gardevoir is just...unsettling, heh. Like a male Jynx or a female Mr. Mime. I actually go out of my way to ALWAYS have a female Ralts in R/S/E, even if it means spending a few hours looking for one (as I also demand that my Ralts have Synchronize as its ability and be of a neutral/Modest nature).

In any case, I've already got the main characters sorted out, buuuuut...that does sound like an interesting concept for a oneshot...I can't see Gardevoir ever swinging for a Gallade (once you go human, you...keep fucking humans, I guess, and we know Slash won't ever want anyone else, heh), but maybe both of them in the same room or it being Slash's birthday or...heh...if it's a oneshot, I could really make anything happen since it wouldn't have to be 'canon' in terms of Sinners, heh. WE SHALL SEE. :evil, perverted laugh:

And yes, I know about Lopunny, too. Every furry's dream Pokemon. N-not that I'm a furry, I'm just saying...heh...

Imasuky Lomae---Lopunny IS hot. The only problem I have is that I'm not intimately acquainted with it (that sounds dirrrty) like I am with Gardevoir, having not played D/P yet. Buuuuut maybe a oneshot sometime, with THREE trainers...Slash, a girl with a Gallade, and a guy with a Lopunny...like, maybe they're forced to hide from the Jirachians and are in the same place and since they're there for a while they...hm.

This sounds like a good idea to celebrate my 10000th hit (which we're getting closer to!): a crazy oneshot orgy. I gotta remember, I can make anything I want, since it won't be 'canon', HEH.

Y'all got my mind (and other things) stewing now...we'll see. :-P
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From Bishonen on September 07, 2007
I think you should have something about a Lopunny I kinda hate to say this but Lopunny is kinda sexy

With Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From KuraiD on September 07, 2007
The use of Jirachii as religion made me think. Why not sprout some Mew/Serebii cult while you're at it? It'll be even more realistic and they could each have their own beliefs, different yet similar.

Well, this was awesome. And I would most likely get shot if you don't hear me till the end, but the one way to make it perfect is to add a female character at the protagonist's side.

With a Gallade. >_>bbb

I'm not sure if you've familiarized yourself with the DP pokemon yet, but Kirlia now has an exclusive male evolution.
> http://serebii.net/pokedex-dp/475.shtml

So this will probably sound really really wacky, but it would be made perfect if you add a girl who is also obviously getting it on with another humanoid pokemon-and how coincidental, to have it to be the male evolution of Kirlia (though granted, I would love to hear your views on the existence of male Gardevoirs in the Pokeworld, -has one and adores it-). But then again, you might want to take a look at Lopunny, the official poke-slut of the Pokeword(and again, both genders are available for this specie)
> http://serebii.net/pokedex-dp/428.shtml

Otherwise, this is awesome. And my suggestion is just a suggestion; up to you to decide if it would be more spicy to have a male!human/Gardevoir and female!human/Gallade, which might actually lead to some interspecie org-

I've said enough. >_> This is a very good fic, I'll gladly be waiting for updates.
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 07, 2007
Luminous Dark---Fluff is indeed good, and it's what I love writing the most. :-D

Drake---Thank you, good sir. It's only gonna be getting better. ^_^
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From ANON - Drake on September 07, 2007
This is simply the best pokemon fanfic ever. I can say that without a moment's hesitation, it's just that great.
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From Darkone21 on September 06, 2007
Thanks for the go ahead .. im way ahead of schedule and hadnt even planned to be 5 chapters in let alone this far yet

when i get on a roll -.-

anywho I think everyone needs alittle fluff with all the drame ^.^ no offense intended
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 06, 2007
NS---Chapters gotta end eventually...I also hope y'all don't become addicted to the 6000-7000 word long chapter, cuz I can't promise I can do that every time! I'm typically more of a 3500-4000 kinda guy, heh. Anyway, next chapter is in production, and I'll I'm gonna say is that...well, neither of em are dead. :3

DRD---I can feel their pain, too, but they'll get through it the best they can. They might not have many people to draw help from...especially once their relationship becomes public...but they have each other. ^_^

DemonicStrife---My style of writing involves, among other things, the abuse of the ellipses and the utter molestation of the humble semicolon. XD But that's okay, because everyone seems to enjoy reading it, heh. The next chapter is kind of a 'relaxation' chapter...more for me and the readers than Slash and Gardevoir, who are going to have to discuss some very serious problems with their affections. But it'll be very low-angst, so yay. :-D

Will Slash have a rival, someone to fill the role of 'grudging ally'? Ho ho, maybe. But I don't wanna give away too much. :3

And oh yes, I can see Gardevoir in black leather. I finally decided what to do on the issue of Gardevoir's 'clothing' (the discussion will be in a future chapter, lol): it's removable, but she can regenerate it if it's lost/damaged. So yes, she's very capable of removing the long, flowing, elegant dress and putting on a leather miniskirt and a tight top and black gloves and taking out a cat-o-nine-tails and...er...heh.

Luminous Dark---Yes, you can use the characters. I abide by the old-school rules of fanfiction copyright: while we don't own the franchise we're righting about, or the characters from it, we still own the story itself and any original characters within. So it's always best to ask before posting someone else's story, or using someone else's in-story characters. You asked, so yes, go for it, heh.

TIME TO GET BACK TO WRITING :3
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From Darkone21 on September 06, 2007
thusfar im having fun writing for a change .. normaly im all serious

slash my char is going to reach maville in the next few parts or so , permission to use your char and your gardevoir ( not in the comedic sense im using but as just a charachter who happens to be in town .. i had a plan for the most epic line in the history of my char .. when you kick the living shit out of ash in 1 move in a random battle ^.^
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From ANON - DemonicStrife on September 05, 2007
Good God, another update already, and another awesome chapter by Slash. I honestly wish I had your unique, artistic and innovative style of writing. Kirlia's finally a Gardevoir, and now the story shall truly begin... heh. I'm anxious to know how the next chapter will play out, with all the fluff after the large amount of angst. However, you should take a break and relax a bit after uploading two long chapters in one week. Oh, and one question. Will you be giving Slash a "rival"? You know, someone who'll often challenge him, but help him at certain times? I'm just wondering.
By the way, I've read "liek, use thundershock okay" and yep, Ash is a total douchebag. And about the potential spin-off fic with Gardevoir in black, leather clothing.... go for it. Totally. ;)

AFF.net: DemonicStrife (unregistered... for now.)
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From ANON - DRD on September 05, 2007
Wow, this looking easy? I can see it happening and I already feel the pain... post up the next chapter soon slash, and you might find that your muse has been paid to give you the best ride of your life...
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From ANON - NS on September 05, 2007
Noooo!!!! I hate it when the chapters end!! Gardivoir already? Frikkin awsome, I can't wait to see the next chapter. Ha, they fainted in the middle of a huge battle; hope nothing bad comes from that!
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 05, 2007
Luminous Dark---Fluff. Discussion of their situation. Fluff. Fluff. And then, maybe, if I have some time, some more fluff. ^_^

Twi---Life be a cruel mistress most of the time...but sometimes one can find beauty in those cruelties. And they found theirs, heh. :-D

DamienZ3r0---Kinda funny that compared to later in the story, this chapter of their life will seem easy...
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From ANON - DamienZ3r0 on September 05, 2007
Great update. Nice mix of romance and angst.
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From ANON - Twi on September 04, 2007
An interesting chapter... sorry if I haven't reviewed before, I have a bad habit of ninja-reading. x_x;

Anyways, I'm loving the way this is going now. Kinda fun when life intervenes in a way that force-feeds you into getting things into the open, ne? It makes for a good read, at the very least. Hmm-hmm-hmm.
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From Darkone21 on September 04, 2007
I know what they say about rushing greatness but still im curious to see what the next part is gonna be like

ps

slash incase you wanna give me some critiqe my story ( first 3 parts ) is up
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