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By : Stormborn Apostle

From Bishonen on September 03, 2007
I was so surprised that I died fell over and busted open a pillow which thankfully was filled with Phoenix Down so it brought me back but oh my goddesses this is so fucking awesome update and an awesome one to

With love, Imasuky Lomae

P.S. all of the updates are awesome but this ones special because it came so much faster than normal and you had to bring up the Thundershock an Onix also after reading this I�m finally in the mood to wrok on my pokemon fic again
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 02, 2007
It's unfair, I know. But it's also, sadly, something that's not entirely uncommon. There are places today, even in the "land of the free", where a white guy sitting with a black girl (or vice versa) might be hassled in the same way, even if all they're doing is watching the sun go down as friends...which Slash and Kirlia still are.

...although their relationship might be changing soon. :3
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From sillyneko345 on September 02, 2007
*swoons* Oooh, the angst! Poor little lovers.

Tch... see, if those ignorant twits wouldn't have jumped to conclusions they'd still be breathing. Why did they immediately assume Slash and Kirlia were romancing? Always give people the benefit of the doubt, no matter what you think you see or what you believe you *should* be seeing. Oh, well. Their stupid mistake.

Looking forward to the next (happier!) chapter!
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 02, 2007
Imasuky Lomae---It would be interesting, that's for sure...plus Gardevoir in leather would be ungodly hot...

Luminous Dark---From what I've got planned (and started to write), you won't be disappointed. ^_^
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From Darkone21 on September 02, 2007
Joined officialy lol .. i still cant wait to see what happens next
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From Bishonen on September 02, 2007
You have to do that story about Gardevoir in black leather and a cat o' nine tails that would be so awesome if you write you shall have the Eternal loyalty of my army of samurai flesh eating pandas.

With Love, Imasuky Lomae
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 02, 2007
There is no way I'd ever abandon this story.

As much as I'd like to give all my other stories the same kind of attention, Sinners is the work that electrifies my muse the most. I don't intend to leave the other stories hanging forever...not to mention I have a half-complete Golden Sun oneshot somewhere on my computer that I need to finish...but this one will always be priority one.

Can't promise quick updates though, and I assure everyone, as much as you all may think otherwise, you wouldn't want them. If I pumped out a chapter every three days, forcing myself to write, you'd have a stale, uninteresting piece of crap. Some people may have the ability to sit down and make themselves write something, and have it be good...but I do not. I must be in a very specific zone to write, and, to the best of my knowledge, there is no way to force myself into it. I get hit by inspiration at random times while doing random things. Sometimes it hits when I haven't slept for a day or two (which is semi-normal for me), which leads to me being physically unable to write, as much as I'd like to (in which case I jot down my ideas in Notepad before I conk out). Sometimes it occurs when I'm outside meditating or enjoying a storm or whatnot, and I literally run inside and start pounding away before it leaves me. But if there's one activity that consistently fails to make me be able to write, it's sitting down at the computer and telling myself to do so.

My muse is a dominatrix. :-/

It kinda surprises me when people talk about how they like the violence and 'gritty reality' of this story, because it really hasn't even gotten started. Slash is 16; Kirlia is still a Kirlia. They've only been together three weeks (or was it a month? gotta re-read my chapters, lol). Despite their tangles with Kiako and Team Magma, and their confrontation with those three punks (I refer to them in my notes as the Poke-Prick Trio), their lives haven't really been that hectic, or that difficult. But they will be. I can't say if this story will have a happy ending, but I can say that if it does...the two of them will have earned it.

Random (but hey, this review response/commentary is long enough already), but here's something that kinda sucks: I am getting inspiration to write, but of a chapter that we're not ready for yet. My muse is desperate to write the first non-dream sexual bout, heh...silly brain, you gotta wait.

Incidentally, I have a feeling I'll end up writing a few (non-"canon")Sinners oneshots as this story progresses...that is, ones that aren't part of the actual storyline. One of my more devious thoughts include a little BDSM...with Gardevoir being the dominant one.

It's time for you to call ME master!

LOL how serious am I? Well, if I could write "Liek, use thundershock okay", I think I could write about Gardevoir in black leather and a cat o' nine tails. O_O

I talk too much. :3
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From ANON - DRD(he RETURNS!!!) on September 02, 2007
There has never been a single fanfiction I have ever or would ever say this about, but I swear I would literally condemn my soul to eternal damnation right now for this story to be finished with all of the chapters right now. I seriously mean that man, not even Halo 3, Gears of War 2 or a darker more realistic pokemon anime or hell all of the above, are worth that. But at this moment I would do that to have this completed story. There isn't any higher honor for a fic I could think of than that. I am very honestly not surprised you have so many reviews, and part of that is how you gave us all what we wanted. An adult, realistic version of pokemon with character deaths, sex, violence, and for the sappy ones, an anime style romance; except this one actually happens! Ever watched an anime, seen a romance hanging on to nonexistance by the slightest of threads, only nothing ever really comes of it? (cough Inuyasha cough) Your story delivers.
On top of that, you picked the best possible pokemon for the job. A sexy pokemon, who more importantly is psychic, and therefore shares a mental and emotional bond. Probably the single reason I like the Inheritance trilogy (Eragon) so much is that Eragon and Saphira share this kind of bond, albeit without the romantic/sexual potential. All these elements combined make for a VERY strong story, one that you will finish if I have to track you down across continents and force you to write. Please overcome your lazy (luxurious, I'd say... I'm the same way!) nature and pick up the pace on this fic... one thing that is ultimate torture beyond a great fic being unfinished is watching a fic go unupdated for months, knowing it will eventually, and knowing it will be updated in bits at a time, the same way, for hundreds more chapters! Please, think of the Kirlias!
Every week you don't update, god or whoever brutally murders a Kirlia. Don't let your lazyness result in the deaths of innocent futuresexy pokemon!
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From ANON - DRD on September 02, 2007
Oh god PLEASE continue this story this must be my favorite story on AFF (and that's saying a LOT because usually I come here to jack... any story going this long without some actual smut [short dream sequences don't count] that I like this much is just incredible.)
I don't care if you have to brutally murder all of your other projects, just please update this! Preferebly with 2 to 3 chapters at a time once every half of a week...
I swear if you ever leave this hanging I will haul my ass across the country to pensacola and beat your ass!
No but really update the story man...
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 01, 2007
Heh, I had to stop myself from making the dream go any farther than it did. There won't be any Slash/Kirlia action...not because they wouldn't do it, but because 1) they're not anywhere near that stage of their relationship...2) certain...logistical issues in terms of physical constraints...and 3) she won't be a Kirlia for much longer. :3

The chapter involving religion is only an introduction to Jirachism and Slash's own faith (or lack thereof). It will eventually become quite the pivotal issue...particularly when he and Kirlia get 'found out'.

As for the old-man-on-the-mountain idea...notice that I've already set up a couple older, more experienced males in this story? I won't give anything away other than saying that one or both of them will become significantly influential for Slash, heh.

OH GOD I WANT TO SAY MORE ABOUT THE PLOT BUT I DON'T WANNA SPOIL ANYTHING GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH

:pulls out hair:
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From ANON - Darkside on September 01, 2007
You know I was kind of surprised while reading chapter six until I realized it was a dream sequence. I thought, 'What? He's writing the smut already?' Heh. To tell you the truth, I like this story very much. The development of the characters is spot on, and I suppose I feel a sort of kinship with the protagonist. Your writing style is really great too. I mean in that Birds and Bees chapter (chapter five, wasn't it?) you laid out Slash's logic and reasons for being an atheist so well that for a moment I thought he was me. :P I've spent hours upon hours trying to explain to people why I choose not to believe, and you explain it with a single chapter, and in a work of fiction, no less! It's truly amazing stuff.

On a slightly different note, I have this idea floating around in my head that you may want to use. It's vague, but an idea nonetheless. See when I was thinking about Psychic types, I started thinking about the mind, and thinking about the mind makes me think of Zen monks, so basically my idea is this: One scene or perhaps a chapter could involve Slash meeting a Zen-like old man/monk, either on a mountain, or perhaps inside that ghost-tower place (Sorry, I can't remember what it's called, it's sort of east of the center of the region). Perhaps Slash comes to think of the old man as a grandfather or a mentor, and then, for some reason I haven't thought up yet, Mr. Red-eye man murders the old man. Sorry that it's not very well worked out, but that's the extent of my idea for now.

Anyway, your work is developing very nicely and I look forward to your next update.
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From Stormborn Apostle on September 01, 2007
I'm glad you hold such a high opinion of this story. ^_^

I know, I don't like writing sad chapters anymore than y'all like reading them, but they are necessary in the long run. And things will get worse...darker...in the future. But this is not a darkfic; there will be many moments of happiness in the future.

I can't honestly say if this story is going to have a happy ending, though. A lot of the plot is in my head, but the ending is not included amongst those ideas. Once I get farther in the story, it'll start writing itself, and I'll be more of a channel for my muse than a writer, heh.

Also, to all readers...chapter 12 has been pre-planned and is in first-stage writing right now. :-P
I'm surprised I got the plot in my head so quickly after 11, but...it just fell together beautifully, all the plot, all the characters, everything. And I promise you all...you will not be disappointed. ^_^
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From ANON - DemonicStrife on September 01, 2007
I now accept this story as one of the few greatest stories that exist on this site, in my opinion at least. I knew a sad part of the story would be coming eventually, and I usually don't like them much, but this chapter was fantastic either way. Kinda makes me feel like writing my own story, but I'm not very good at that, and I'm just... not... quite... old enough... >.
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From Stormborn Apostle on August 31, 2007
Because my hands start getting tired after 6500 or so words. :-P

Plus that's as far as I got with the detailed plot. I don't write with outlines, heh.
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From ANON - NS on August 31, 2007
*whines* Aww, come on, I was really gettting into the story! Why, oh why, do the chapters have to end??
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