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By : chayron

From ANON - naoko144 on October 27, 2007
KYAAAAA!!!! YEAH!!!! xDDDDD!! okay, even if the situation is critique..I am jus jumping like crazy in mah head and shouting HURAY!! YUURI RETURNED!!! (in mah head cause it's like...two in in the morning xD) anyways, YIPPII!! I LOVED this chapter also^^ but Ihope that it won't only be sex between kyota and Amae. AND! wolf has to LIve kay xDD I like happy end..(screw deathfic xDD)anyway, I don't mind how it will trun out, since it is too good x3 (Imma a addict, did I already told?) but I would like it better if it didn't ended as a death fic...but I suppose Yuuri bring wolf to the hospital to get blood transfusion since he lost to much of it?? ne???or something like this (I'm just trying to guess).
Anyway, will the next chap be the last?? T.T I Hope not!!! Faraya has to die by wolf's hand first xDDD (is having losta scenery and ways to torture in mind) >3
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From ANON - rowen raven on October 27, 2007
Ookayy, this chapter was filled with harsh trues & unexpected events. I most say that Kyo & Amae are in desperate need of ethics concerning the mourning of the dead, & the respect of the almost dead. Yeah I know that reallity is hard to face some times, & that they like each othe, but to go shagg to forget that Wolf is diying is unconciderate, it kind of pissed me off & I was strocked with some mild twisted sence of glee, when their shagg turned out to be unfullfiling & unsatisfying, they should be ashame of themselve, Amae does it to secure his safety, but what is Kyo's excuse, that was cold, from both of them. who let yasai loose? I was wondering what had happend to him but I expected he'd be kept prisoner in a tent, tied up and gaged, not roaming around watering horses. I don't want to be anywhere near Faraya when he wakes up & finds he lost the battle, the sucker. The must shocking event, Yuri strolling through the camp, as if nothing had happened. & What kind of greeting is that, "you look, awfull" "what happened?" Fucking Jesus sodding Christ on a bloody cross! it wouldn't hurt to show a little joy. Wolf was besides himself with joy, and even thoug he is diying the idiot in him had a fit of glee upon seeing yuri. I bet wolf is regreting the events that had ocurred, but being Wolfram I belive he thinks himself lucky for being able to see his husband one last time. Now I demand to know where the fuck was the stupid wimp, to beguing with, what was he doing while Wolf raided the country, looking for him. Oh & the gate, that was priceless, you are telling me that the wimp was able to cross between worlds as he pleases? Ok forget that, I mean if he can jump from the demon kindom to earth & viceversa why not from the demon kindom to this other place? & why hadn't I thought about it before? I feel kind of stupid. I'm diying to see the "serious talk" yuri is going to give to wolf, about the war & all, & For kyo to know that yuri just came & went takeing wolf, I wonder will yuri scowl kyota too, & what will he think of Amae? Also who will they deal with the situation on this world, I mean I'm sure yuri will come back to collect if not Kyota then Asami & Arachi, but will he just come, get them & head back or will he do something concerning the war, will there be a show down between faraya & yuri? & more importantly will he alow Wolf to come with him? I guess the story has reached it peak, the rest will come down & falling in to place for now on. God I can't wait for the next one!! ja ne!
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From dawnmm on October 26, 2007
thats a switch wolfram caring for everyone else. wonder why his healing power not working? isnt yuuri at full strength now even though he's on another world? im glad yuuri is back but anticipating the problems you were hinting at. And why shouldnt wolfram come after his husband i would. looking forward to more thanks.
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From ANON - YUURI-EIRI on October 26, 2007
Thank you for this GREAT chapt... Yuuri is back, YAY!... update soon please!!! Yuuram!!!
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From ANON - naoko144 on October 22, 2007
oi, how can I get you into story alert?? must you need my e-mail? if so, here it is, in case^^'' but my username here is also naoko144 (altho I haven't had any story here yet =.=)
yohko_kurama2004@hotmail.com
^^''
oooh, I oved that chapter too XDD (had started writing comment before and after reading now) Kyota is soo messed up, but at least its a start x3!!! I just hope that it will be happy ending for amae at least, he hasn't it easy ^^'' nor does Kyota (he really look messed up oO serious) oooh, and as for yuuri...I can't wait too hera bout him xD!
anyway, it was a good change of pace, having a chapter not base only on wolf, but more on kyota and amae^^ (tho I LOVE wolfram, it's good to know more and follow other character time by time^^)

anywya, I say that you do a good job for this x3 keep it up! I always am hasty to know what will your next chap be and what it'll be and happening and all x3
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From ANON - Rowen Raven on October 21, 2007
Hi quick note,forget I even mentioned Yuri getting mad, if he found out about Amae as Wolf concubine, I just remembered Yuri's performance in the first few chaps, damn the guy was jealous, and territorial! how could I forget is beyond me. yup so lets pretend I didn't wrote that, my bad.
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From ANON - Rowen Raven on October 21, 2007
That was stupid, Kyota telling Amae that he was in need of a good lay, insted of rigth out saying that he likes him, & It was sweet too, to see the general, so sure of himself, always so straight foward, or at least with wolf, stumbling with words like a high school boy, and blushing from something other than Wolf teasing. Thats cute! Right once again, feel free to treat me like afivr year old, & drawing the details wiyh bright colored crayons, but why exactly did Kyo dragged Amae to Wolf, after the river insident, I got kind of lost in that little pice of the conversation, they both know why, but I didn't get it. Amaes wake up call, was kind of rough, I understand thats Wolf way, but he could have been a bit nicer. But what really got my attention was a comment from Wolf, when he said that he treasured yuri's trust too much to allow people to thing Amae was his concubine, does he really belive that yuri would be mad at him for letting people to think that way in order to protect Amae? I understand that Wolf intention is to make some one independant out of Amae, but & correct me if I'm wrong, I know you portrait the characters in a differnt way, & that many years have gone by in the story, they are grown men, but still the last time I checked yuri was too damn naive, maybe thats not the word, he was so good natured & good willed, so trusting, that he would be glad that Wolfram took it upon himself to care for the defenseless concubine, more so than haveing him wageing war in a foreing land to find him. Or at least thats my take, feel free to smack me down, I'm well aware that I'm naivety's bitch.
On another note, sorry (my record in apologysing is bigger than kyo's) for intruding in the privasy of the conversation between you and other readers, but I happend to sqeam over the reply above the one you directed to me, & I was surprise that people say they like one story more than the other, they are very different & equally good because of it. Yeah the 1st one was about wolf & yuri, the 2nd one is about Wolf going out of his rockets without yuri, is quite simple (I know that is badly summerised), but even if yuri is not a tangible character in this story, he has been present through all of it, he is Wolf motivation, every desition, every turne, every step he takes is influenced in one way or another by yuri, that is almost scary in a true-love-level-five-clingger kind of way, don't smack me yet, but you got to admit that is kind of psycotic in a way, though out the whole story Wolf is drived by his need to find yuri, he hasn't even stopped to think for how long will he keep it up, or what will he do if he didn't find yuri at all, or if he finds him dead, I know none of this will actually happened, but they are posible out come that the prince refuses to take in concideration, because he can't admit that he doesn't know what will he do with out yuri. Now you can smack me down all you want.
On a final note yes I'm working on the drawings but is along proses, 1st is the rough sketch, 2nd the clean pencil drawing, 3rd is the inking, 4th the painting, besides I'm going over the story to pic up specifi detils in clothing, expresions, and back ground, wich was never my srong suit, but I try, at the moment I've gotm five drawings two of then in rough sketches, three in cleaned drawings, waiting to be inked and painted, four of them are from wotp, one is woftge. I'll try to get a move on as soon as posible, but is not been easy picking out the scenes, there are like three or four diferent takes for just one scene, and I have to deside between the one I really want to draw to the one that are in side my skills, and all the while trying to stay as true as posible to your stories, yup I've been busting my balls over it, but, happily & willingly, well until I've got something else to write, again sorry for the silly pices of ramdom thoughts, specially for the queen shit, I agree with you with the Mary Sues, and yes the torani thing was out right stupid, but like I said it was three in the morning, sorry no offence intended with any of my comments in this review, the priors, or future ones, feel free to smack me down, send me to hell, or what ever, because I really apretiate this little pices of communication between us to ruin them with my stupid comments, I really value your opinion of me and even thoug it sound pathetic I feel like I'm making a fool of my self, but I still get exited & amazed when I see you reply to my review, ja ne!
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From ANON - Webtester01 on October 20, 2007
Well Kyota finally acknowleged his feelings, and Wolfram put Amae in his place. Great chatper. :)
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From alicem on October 20, 2007
Someintes Wolfram is so mean, but I guess he needs to do this so that Amae to stop depending on him and learn how to stand on his two feet. Since he never had to be fore since he was in the harum since at least 14 y/o.

I hope that Kyoto gets his head straighted out and stops picking on Amae since he likes him so much.

Looking forward to the next chapter with Yuuri. I wonder how long he has been there and what he has been doing?

alice
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From dawnmm on October 19, 2007
except for thinking kyoto wasnt the worst of options that was pretty good and him falling for amae was almost expected. looking forward to what happens next and cant wait for faraya to get whats coming to him.
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From ANON - something's got to give on October 19, 2007
First thing i want to say is, Thank you for the LONG RESPONSE. Now onto my review: Again, I want to say I dont hate this story. Far from it. I'm simply saying that it was dragging for a while. It was getting to the point where too many things were happening at once and it confused me. Not that the story was bad, far from that. It is a very good story with a very unique plot. I'm glad that you are taking the story and telling it from the eyes of Wolfram. Not many stories can portray him and his feelings in a very well done manner. The only issue I have with you is, well, I going to take a shot here and say you are not an Native English speaker. Correct? The reason I say this, well, it's because in your Author's notes and responses, you say {write} in a chastising manner. My experiences with people who are not native speakers made me realize that they tend to speak a bit harsh. Not intended, just that they are so passionate in their own mother tongue, that when learning Enlish, their passion also transfers into English. Believe me I have friends who are not American or British and sometimes when they want to express something in a helpful or understanding manner, it usually sounds harsh. Not that it was their intention. I do hope you understand what i'm saying. As you suggested, I will stop reading the story. Not because I dont like it, but simply because i'm not into KYOU KARA anymore. I'm really getting bored of the same plots in both Animes and Mangas. I followed your story becasue it was unique and interesting, however, i'm just going to focus on more productive readings. I must improve my vocabulary, so I think i'm going to get a new dictionary. Maybe even pick up a new language to learn. HEE...^_^GOODLUCK with your writing and GOODLUCK with your stories. SAYONARA, Omedeto.
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From ANON - oholibamah on October 17, 2007
Hi! I just have to say that I love your stories very much, and I can�t help checking for new updates even when I know that it�s still too soon since your last one. Anyway, in your �Reply to Reviews� section in chapter 21, you commented on something Webtester01 said, something about Yuuri and Faraya clashing. And I think it�s really logical. Even when I lay in bed pondering over what you�ll cook up next, I have thought about it happening. Especially considering your portrayal of Yuuri during the first three chapters (Waah! Yuuri, where are you?!), he got quite angry when Arachi failed to leave when he and Wolfram were getting into it. And how Yuuri liked to reinforce his claim on Wolf whenever Kyota was coming around. AND, when Kyota said something about Yuuri crushing him if he ever witnessed Kyota being intimate (read: hugging while naked) with Wolfram, while he was bathing with Wolf and Asami. So yeah. Yuuri�s suite territorial. I mean, Faraya kills his servants/subordinates who dare touch his harem! I think Yuuri, with his quest for justice and whatnot, would not allow a desecration of his husband � the king�s husband, for that matter � to go unpunished. And Wolfram�s royalty. I think even Conrad would agree if Yuuri decides to kill -- or maybe castrate and strip off his powers � Faraya. Well, providing that he finds about it in the first place. But there. He should! Someone ought to teach that bast*** Faraya his place. Hehe. Oh, and I absolutely love your Kyota and Amae and their interaction even when it�s sometimes frustrating as hell. You create very wonderful and unconventionally loveable characters. I bet they�re going to be explosive when they finally get together. ^_~ Thank you for providing us with such wonderful reading material!
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From ANON - Rowen Raven on October 15, 2007
Sorry me again, but like you already know after I close the browser thats when my bizzar mind kicks in, so I just wanted to share four pices of ramdon thoughts:
1) I want to apologise for using the term Queen for Wolfram, I don't know why but his title of Prince scaped me for a moment and all I could remember was some other story I was reading where tha autor refers to him as queen and wife, when he is actualy as much of a husband as is yuri, he is by no means a woman, thats one of the things I like about your story, since the very begining in wotp you stressed the fact that Wolfram is indeed a boy but I already said that I think, well...
2) I magening a conversation between Kyo and Wolf where they discuss Amae, I realised that Amae is very strong. I'm exagerating when I say this but bare with me, In my opinion Amae is the closest equivalent to Wolfram or Kyotas rank in the concubine world. He had high autority, he matched them in wits and strenght in the harem, he comands and takes charge. while Kyo abd Wolf play soldier and wage war in the battle field, so do the concubines in the harem, not with swords or hand to hand, but with looks, clothes and make up, they threaten, and scheem against each other, and when they fight, having no shame, pride or honour,(except for Amae) they fight dirty, the harem is as dangerous as a battle field and in it Amae is a General.
3) you gonna think I'm insane for having such thoughts but, I don't know why but that concubine Torani I think was his name, How does he put up with being in the harem, and with Faraya, the way you describe him, and the way hw behaves, he doesn't strike me like an uke, I can't picture it, and I don't think the king likes to get "stuffed" (wink), the only thing I could put it together was with drugs (like with wolf)
4) and at last, I thought thank god kyota didn't got in to harem, if he had been given that drug, and turned as violent as wolf at the begining trying to jump Amae, I swear kyota would have raped wolf, in the spot, and to be honest the idea does sound apealing to me, I know it will never happen but is tempting as hell, kyo all out of control banging wolf senseless, ofcurse that would lead to a heavy drama that has nothing to do with your story, so forget I even mentioned it, I know I'm sick (I feed from little children'd tears) I love the drama xp
So there you have it thats where your story has led my mind at three in the morning, again sorry but I had to let it out, At the moment it seemed like a good I idea now it seems utterly silly, but I already typed it so...
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From ANON - naoko144 on October 14, 2007
Ah my gawd, I love you fic xDD but I'm getting a tad impatient as to when will they have a clue about yuuri?? It's getting a bit long and I'm wondering too much and then I want to know the rest, what will happen and all but what about yuuri, I can't wait to know when you'll let them have some clue, or ways to know that he's alive and will he learn about what faraya did to Wolf?? will there be war?? What is Kyota's problem with mae?? Arg so much question xDD!! Anyway, take your time, your doing a wonderful job here^^ (Imma addicted completely xDD!!)

sorry for the crappy english^^'' it's not my motherlanguage^^''
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From ANON - Webtester01 on October 14, 2007
It seems a little more of Kyota is revealed in this chaper. I get the impression that he likes Amae, but has some issues he needs to work out.

I hope Wolfram will modify those two soldier's punishment. It seems extreme.

I wonder if Asami will ever 'sample the other side' with all the stuff going on in his life. I guess that will never happen.

Keep up the great work. :)

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