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By : chayron

From ANON - hey on October 14, 2007
HI i love this chapter, actually your whole story!
But i hope you think twice and let yuri know of wolframs rapping!
I would really like to see how yuri will react.
Could you arrange this? Please!!!!

I`m looking forward to your next update!
bye
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From ANON - Razion on October 14, 2007
Sorry for the double review and misnaming!

For the record, I really hope Kyota and Amae end up together. Those two have this weird chemistry going on!
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From ANON - Zadion on October 14, 2007
Thank you for the updates!

Yessss, I would very very much like yaoi dreams of all of them but sadly I don't get awesome dreams like that. *sigh*

And whoa, I can really see the misdirected mis-expressed interest Kyota has for Amae. It's kind of sweet in a tough love way but nonetheless, I think he really deserves a smack on the head for putting poor Amae through all that. I think Amae's breakdown was just what he needed to put some sense into him!

>.< Poor Wolfram, to have to deal with so much and still be so dead worried about Yuri. >.<

Thanks again for putting all the effort you have into this!
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From ANON - Rowen Raven on October 14, 2007
I'm so sorry but I've got to get it out of my chest, WHAT AN ASSHOLE! Yes I mean Kyota. I can only say that I'm utterly pissed with the guy, I mean what's his problem? yeah the guy can't fend for himself, but there is no ned to be so cruel! I'm proud of Asami yeah I finally remembered his nama after 21 chap, sorry the characters need to stir an emotion in me so I can remember their names, & asami has finally done it he stood up to Kyota to defend Amae. I hope he has a good excuse for his behavior, in my opinion Amae was doing fairly well to be out in the open for the first time. Right I thought oh he's come to his senses when he punished the soldiers but no he had to take it out on the poor guy. Doesen't he feel ashame of himself having to for Wolf to pull rancks on him, having to order him around. why doen't he ask Wolf why he brought Amae. Another thing was his confetion about thinking drugging Wolfram, no surprise there, but why bring it up at that moment, he has no concideration what so ever, Wolf is in between a hard place & a wall, & Kyota is not makeing his life any easier. I like the way Wolf pushed him away when he brought up the violation thing Faraya did. Will yuri ever know it? with this chap I find myself very disapointed in Kyota, I know he will come around, hey he is going to be an item with Amae, I already know that, but there is a serious conversation waiting between Wolf & Kyota ( I just noticed I'm so ticked that I'm using his whole name, not only kyo like my last review hmp my writing reflects my mood) & he better give that bracelet back! I know Wolf is a man, he is strong, and he is bound by duty to his king and by love to his husband, I know and understand that is his priority, everything else falls to a second plane, but he is also "human" (i konw he is a demon, but i'm refering to principals to moral) I uderstand he is indifernt up to some level with Amae because of his duty, he is a soldier & I don't know "queen" of his contry, but I'm wondering how does he really see Amae, undernith his hard and proud exterior, & pretty much most of his interior too, bit deep down, what is really his relation with Amae, it a little confusing, when he ignores him, then he orders him around and snaps at him, then he defends him, or even conforts & reasures him, it amuses him & it anoys him, & it worries him, I know is not very importat on the story, is just that I'm an Otaku, I have to know all those side facts, they make me wonder and speculate.

Sorry I haven't send you any pics I'll get around to it as soon as I can They are all on paper 11"x18" quite a bit bigget than my scaner, but when I'll figure it out I'll let you know, & I'll see about that gallery, thanks.
So apart from that all I can say is great shap, I love the battle of wits between Kyo & Amae, although it had a disastrous result, but things will get better, I feel sorry fro wolf traped in the midle. Hope to hear from you again soon ja ne!
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From ANON - Ducky on October 14, 2007
I feel so awful for Amae in this chapter. The poor guy, I really just wanna pick him up, hug him, and tell him it will be ok. Kyota is being horrible to him, it's very sad. I guess they have a long way to go before things are better, I can only look forward to that I guess. I wonder though, will Amae realize he cares about Kyota? Will the idea sicken him? Will he think he's only ever going to have someone that will abuse/use him? Will Kyota realize the reason he is targeting Amae is because he is drawn to him and he is fighting it? I hope he stops acting so cruely soon.

I'm so thankful that you put Asami in this though, I loved watching him stand up for and befriend Amae. I feel so sad for Amae feeling lost and alone, I'm glad he has a friend.

I eagerly look forward to the next chapter,
Ducky

PS: Thank you for being awesome, understanding, and wonderfully reasonable.
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From dawnmm on October 13, 2007
that was a good ending i like the fact the wolfram is disciplining kyota but i still think they are going to get together. I'd like to learn more of who they are fighting for and some hint of yuuri on the world. But its your story and you are doing great i wait in anticipation for every chapter. With what kyota did to his men i kept thinking maybe wolfram should do it to kyota for a day just for him to see what amae and he went through in the harem. maybe not so much the sex but the helplessness. again and always thanks for sharing
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From alicem on October 13, 2007
Kyoto is just awful. He obviously is attracted to Amae and dosen't know what to do about it other than to fight with him, a bad choice.

At least they are out of the harum and safe from the King at this time. Can't wait till chapter 23 when they find Yuuri.

alice
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From ANON - something's got to give on October 13, 2007
I really enjoyed your first story before this one. I'm trying to get into this sequel, I just can't seem to get into it at all. I mean it seems like it's just dragging and dragging. But overall, your story is really different and I give a 10 for it. But I think that story should just end before it becomes even more of a drag, I hope that this story isn't one of those. I shall wait to see what you have in stores for us. Hope that it works out in the end.
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From ANON - mimi-chan on October 11, 2007
No, no, no! While not exactly clear it seems as though you may have been leaning towards Kyota/Amae, but how about Arachi/Amae and/or Kyota/Asami. I know you said earlier in the story that Asami is straight, but then after they landed in the other world Asami's opinion of Wolfram and Kyota had changed, and there was playfulness between the two. Besides with how long Wolfram was gone and Kyota/Asami left together with Arachi, there is a whole time frame for them to get closer. I just think after Kyota being still hooked on Wolfram it would be too wierd if he fell for someome he just met after pining for Wolfram for all that time and it would be nice to see the best friends get together.

As for Amae, I think that he needs love bad, as far as needing to be loved and being in love goes because he never had that. Arachi seems like a really nice guy and would be good for him. Someone who would support and cherish hime while he is learning more about the world and himself. Wolfram, Yuuri, etc. can provide him with the friendship type love he needs and Arachi the other. I don't know I guess the whole Kyota/Amae is just wierd for me because personality wise and needs wise they just don't seem to click, oh well. Nevertheless I am happy that Wolfram is still missing and loving Yuuri, I miss him too and happy that we are going to see him soon. I know the fic is mainly about Wolfram but it just isn't the same without Yuuri I guess because he brings so many aspects to a story himself. Oh and any updates on what the other three were doing while Wolfram was imprisonned besides looking for him, its kind of wierd not knowing anything when everything about Wolfram stay at Faraya's was so detailed.
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From ANON - Webtester01 on October 07, 2007
It gets better and better. I bet Kyota and Amae will find some things in common. ;)

But when Yuuri and Faraya clash, it will be big I'm sure.

:D
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From naviarex on October 07, 2007
I've been reading this story for quite a while. I love it!

Amae sure got some spunk XD. And I know that it would be great to have Kyota x Amae: sort of a battle among players to give up the heart? But I still wonder about Amae's commitment to Faraya. Though he says he hates him and so on.. Faraya does have a sort of twisted love for him... Though, obviously Amae deserves a second life in Shin Makoku.. *dreamy eyes* I don't know what to choose. But obviously I'm not the author ^_~
Thank you so much, for giving us this wonderful original story.

To: Rowen Raven - Why don't you try Aarinfantasy.com. It is a huge yaoi-love site. And it is so friendly. There is a big thread on KKM, and people would love to see your art and hear this story. It's a little tricky to learn, but it is so worth it. Let me know if you need any help [gambalung@yahoo.com]
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From ANON - Rowen Raven on October 07, 2007
I just knew they would start with the wrong foot! I can't seem to decide who has the sharpest tongue Wolf, Kyo or Amae. Did Kyo really got that pissed about Amae's comment on him likeing Wolf? I mean is kind of obvious. And what the hell is Kyota waiting to give Wolfram his wedding bracelet back? I agree with Yasai when Faraya finds out they've all been had he's going to flip! Even if it wasn't meant to be, I found it very sweet, the way Wolf reasured Amae that he would keep his promise, and is it just me or they seem to be warming up to each other? I was wondering how strong is Kyo's dislike for Amae, will he be actually cruel enough to trow to the others face that he is mearly a concubine? Will Wolfram have to interfere to defend one or the other and be able to keep the peace between his companions? I'm looking foward to the next chap how much is Wolfram going to tell Kyota about what happened in the castle? This is just getting better and better!
I know you wont belive this, but I've never post anything anywhere, Like I've said before I'm tecnologicaly retatded, I'm a paper and pencil kind of person, my computer has very few uses as it is. Typing homework, doing info search for homework, reading fics from three main sites, and other minor two where a few stories I'm interested are posted in their unedited versios. I just got an e-mail acount of my own like three weeks ago, I was using my mom's before that, I know pathetic. So as a result I don't know of anyplace to post pictures or how it is done, another thing is my inferiority complex, I'm not sure if I'm good enough, I wouldn't want to hurt peoples eyes by my atteps to artistic expretion. But I'll whenever I have the time and when I've finished the drawing on your stories, the two I told you about are still rough drawings, but I'll send them your way, along with a few others of my best, now that I have your permition to send them to your e-mail. I know it sounds silly but I try not to invade people's personal territory, including there phone num, and e-mails, yes I'm socially ill adapted! Well I get to that as soon as I can, school and work are being hell lately. Oh and you don't mind my calling your character by nicknames, am I getting to familiar with them? Until next time, ja ne!
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From dawnmm on October 06, 2007
this was so great after all that time in with the concubines to see wolfram really start to shine again -- i'm guessing that you are going to have kyota and amae get together (i hope so they seem made for each other) their interaction so far is great. looking forward to the next chapter thanks for sharing
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From alicem on October 05, 2007
I'm so glad that Wolfram is out of the Harum and that he took the young Mazoko with him. I can't wait till he finds Yuuri. I wonder if Amae ends up to be Yuuri's son? I hope not cause that will mean he has been there for over 20 years.

Hope to see an update soon.

alice

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From ANON - Razion on October 03, 2007
YESSSSS thank you for updating! ^^ *sighs happily* Amae's being totally droolworthy again, adapting to the situation and proving that he can take what's dished at him. *fangirls*

Hehe, I like how Wolfram misunderstood Amae's motives for the picture. That's really classic. It's also good to see Wolfram kicking ass in the fighting department again. The way he thinks on his feet is so fitting of the Maou's consort. Really, if I didn't like the YuuRam pairing so much I'd be rooting for WolframXAmae right about now. Okay, so I actually am rooting for them now but still... XDD

Thanks again for writing this! I hope I get to read the next part soon. Your story's an excellent bed time read (it's an excellent all-time read) and really gets me happy before I sleep.
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