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By : chayron

From ANON - _Love_Girl_ on October 02, 2007
hiya
thanks so much for doin this.^_^
i hav just come into the story and i find it rele intersting. i hop u carry on doin it.
is there goin to be a big war/battle and yuuri will show up or will they find him or not at all.
will wolfram final get to kill the king guy ( i hav a rele mad memory for names ) and will he and the other people he is gettin away without gettin found out? will the guy from the palace and the guy from wolframs world get along or will they give eachother weird looks and stuff? well i hop they we be at each others throats. hehe tat is prob just me ^_^
i rele wont to no wat happens so could u plz keep writing. ^_^
soz for the bad english it is just the was i am used to writin

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From ANON - Webtester01 on October 01, 2007
Awsome story! I really enjoy it. Keep it up. ;)
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From alicem on September 29, 2007
I just absolutely love this story. When will Wolfram meet up with Yuuri and I wonder how long he had actually been in this world? Will he remember Wolfram and will he be alright?

Can't wait to find out.

alice
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From ANON - Ducky on September 29, 2007
Ok.. ok.. so I can't stay away.. *lowers head* This story has seriously taken ahold of me though. I keep thinking about Amae and Kyota meeting and running through all these possible scenarios in my head. Like for example, I was thinking that they might not like each other right away - especially if Kyota catches on that Amae has a thing for Wolfram. I've been pitching the idea around in my head for a while though and I really do want to see them together. I think Amae is Kyota's match, water to fire. The idea of them getting together makes me giddy, I want them both to be happy, I want Kyota's passion (flashback to the almost sex scene) to go to good use. Jeez, well anyway.. I drew another picture. ^_^

Amae and Kyota.. ---> http://dukgrrl.deviantart.com/art/I-m-going-to-kiss-you-now-66107427
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From ANON - Rowen Raven on September 29, 2007
That kept me tense trough all of it, wow, I'm still holding my breath, Wolf realy is the skillful tactician, the man is the weapon of the great demon kindom like Murata so eloquently puts it is the early chapters. It took me by surprise that he took Yasai and I think he will come to regret that choise, as for Amae, let Kyota handle him, I can't wait until they meet, is just that Amae is so diferent to Wolfram who Kyota bilived to be his one and only love, that I can imagine he will be somewhat exaspereted by the guys antics. I comgratulate you that was a very well planed scape, I'm dying to see them arrive to a relative safety of his conrads in arms side. Obviously the scape from the castle will not be the last they will hear from Faraya. I'm pretty sure there'll be hell to pay for scaping him, I guess he will try to hunt them down if only to kill them with his own two hands. Well I draw in the jap anime style, I've been drawing since I was very little and not only have I impruve greatly I have also evolve in focus, at fist they were ramdom things, I still do but meinly it turne to the characters of the stories in my head, for some reason they are easyer to put on to paper that way than with words, at first the character were mostly teens and mythical creatures as fays and merfolks, the stories basicaly romance, so the drawings pretty much suck. Then I did some fanart nothing great realy, now I'm mainly back at my own characters but this time they vary from teens to mid twenties most of them guys, I have some pretty impresive angels and demoness, some cool vamps,and some very cute and sexy looking geisha boys, but I think that my real passion and the main focus for the rest of the time or at least for a while is gay erotica, basicaly I draw my male caracters doing the nasty. Very explisit I may add. I'm currently working in a collection of drawings of one of my favorite novel series, by michael schielbein, vampire vow, vampire thrall and vampire transgression, very good novels, I recomended to anyone who likes gay vampiers and has a diferent if not more objecvite view on the christian religion, defenetly not for those who are very religious or with high set moral values or belives, it treats very srong not to say blasphemous subjects. those particular pics are in a combination of jap anime style and a more traditional portrait kind of drawing, they are not perfect but they don't make the queen cry either. And I did'n want to spoil the surprise but since you asked I'm also back to fanart, with my new honed skills and they are not half bad, defenetly much better then the once I did a few years back, and among my fanart proyects I'm working on some pics of your kkm stories so far I've oly got the rough sketsh of two scenes on wotp, and I hope to do a lot more, I have no clue how to get them for you to be able to see them so if you could give me a few pointers, like I'm a retarded five year old, I'd be very please and in your dept, I realy would like for you to see them, but I don't know how. I'm glad to know that there will be a third part for the story and I'm confident in your skills, you are makeing me repeat myself you are the best there is up till now so go for it! ja ne ^_^
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From dawnmm on September 28, 2007
excellent escape--who's power or what power did he use for the glimmers? really cool using the air power for the lift. now did those elements get a boost also from faraya or is he using the last of yuuri's. Wolfram said that faraya had to be close to him to feel his element so faraya can stop him from using only after felt and found. so if he's not near enough can wolfram do like guerilla warfare and duck and hide until actually located? Cant wait to see what happens next
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From ANON - Ducky on September 28, 2007
Oh wow!! This chapter was exciting, I kept thinking they would get caught! (Please don't let them be caught.) I'm not sure what I think about Yasai coming along with them. I wonder if he will be a liability, a traitor, if he will turn them in.

Also - there was nothing shown in this chapter that made me dislike our dear Amae. I feel bad for him, how strange, how terrifying it must be to try escaping the confines of his life. I know he was excited before but now, I can feel his fear when I read this. I can't wait until they make it out of that cursed place and find Kyota and Arachi. The idea of Kyota's relief at finding Wolfram and then the reactions to the raven haired beauty he brought with him makes me feel breathless. I keep thinking that Amae will end up with Wolfram, and I must say that I've begun drawing another picture of Amae already. (This one with Company.)

I will watch your story, checking it multiple times a day for an update, how very - very much this story has touched me. Thank you for giving me something to look forward to.

~Ducky
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From dawnmm on September 26, 2007
I guess this means that they will be leaving soon? If they do escape and dont kill faraya will they still be able to use their elements? Does he have to see them in order to prevent it? Inquiring minds want to know. excellent as always
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From ANON - msmanga on September 25, 2007
This was really great! I finally finished the entire thing. Though I'm a little suspicious of Amae...maybe he's being friendly for a reason. I dunno. I hope he's not being sneaky or anything like that...everything's so dark and evil, but I don't get why Wolfram's still there. Shouldn't he have left by now? And Faraya is a rotten bastard. Yup. Well, now that the other's know that W's there, maybe something will come of it, eh? Looking forward for the next chapt!
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From ANON - Ducky on September 25, 2007
Dear wonderful author,

I have finished the fanart of Amae for you. I will work on coloring him later - but I finished the pen and ink work and he begged to be shared in black and white.

Thank you for creating a character who is such a wonderful inspiration to me. I'm counting on you to make things right for him in the end.

http://dukgrrl.deviantart.com/art/Amae-Sederu-65737105

With fond regards,
Ducky
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From ANON - Razion on September 22, 2007
Pardon me for reviewing so late! Ahh, you've pointed out something I totally agree with. A lot of native-speaking writers tend to neglect proper spelling and the like. To me, this is the exact same reason some non-native speakers can surpass these people. With familiarity of a language comes the possibility of taking it for granted. Furthermore, this might lead some to take a more straightforward, non-flowery and colloquial road when writing.

Nonetheless, I do see where you're coming from. Native speakers tend to have a better grasp on certain styles of the language because they've had more exposure to it. It's still a great pleasure for me to read works by both those who speak English as a main language and those who don't. It's wonderful to see the effort and I learn something new from almost every fic I read.

And I truly agree with you about not leaving stories hanging. I made that mistake a number of years ago when I started writing fanfiction and told myself never to make it again. In that light, I haven't posted any of my writings in a number of years because they're fragmented in a way that are impossible for a reader to understand if they were uploaded. In a sense, I do appreciate reviews alot but have also found that whether or not a story gets reviewed, I'd still have written it primarily for the joy of writing.

Amae is total fanclub material. I do agree, he feels really human! I guess it's how most of us will always have a soft spot for the tortured hottie who just needs a little respect and proper love. Oddly, I don't quite like Kyota at all. He makes for a good rival in love but I haven't found the lovability of his character yet! XD

And I read WOTP! It was really REALLY awesome. I liked it very very much. It'd made me go "Aww" quite a bit. XD I'm off to read chapter 17 now!
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From ANON - Ducky on September 21, 2007
Your updates are always such an exciting thing for me, each one getting it's own small celebration. I have to say that I have enjoyed this chapter very much. I like the way Wolfram gets excited to learn about Kyota (Whom I think is the 'merchant'.) I'm looking forward to seeing how Kyota plays into their escape.

I think though, that my favorite thing about this chapter was being able to see Amae interacting with the guards. I'm noticing his character fleshing out more and more as the story goes on, and each new part, each new hint into who he truly is makes me like him more. It's very exciting to me, I love how he flirts with Wolfram though it also makes me kind of sad. I do feel sad for him because it seems he is growing attached to Wolfram, and not so much because of Wolfram, but I think more because of what Wolfram represents to him. I think Amae see's a sense of courage and freedom that is foreign to him. I think he is attracted to Wolfram's strength - not only of body, but of character too. I'm just kind of worried about him getting 'too' attached and getting hurt in the end.

Ducky
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From ANON - Rowen Raven on September 20, 2007
Okay, forgive my ignorance, & lack of understanding but, uh, why did Wolfram burned the picture? I mean I know he doesn't want to trust Amae, and aparently he is having a little bit of trouble at it, but that was a sweet gesture from the black haired concubine. Kyota is coming in to the picture & I can't wait for wolf & amae to get the hell out out of there, & fantasysing about amae's & kyota's meeting is driving me insane, I want to know what their first impretion on each other would be, & how will Wolfram take the development of a relationship between them, I know I'm getting way ahead of myself but I cant help it. Any way Faraya is not going to like what Torani did, thats for sure. I'm aso waiting for another meeting between wolfram & faraya, how much desobideance can this guy tolerate before intervining himself. Amae & Lasami are taking a huge risck in helping wolfram I hope no harm will Come to Lasami after wolfram & Amae are gone, if Faraya finds out the servant is as good as dead, & I kind of like the guy.
Any way yes the character was blond with glasses, no matter tough, You are awsome at kkm & I have no complains what so ever, as long as you keep writting it I will keep reading it. I already knew you also do DBZ but I haven't read any of it, that anime though I watched alot of it (I didn't knew better at the time), it doesen't apeal to me any more, no offence but for me anime is art I'm more atracted to the aestetic part of it, and DBZ though interesting doesn't go easy on the eyes. I know it sounds very shallow, & superfitial but I can't turne my eyes from beatiful drop-dead gorgeous men, don't get me wrong, story line, & plot are very very important, I also pay attention to animation cuality, such as colors, and fluid real movements, like in Witsh Hunter Robin, Ergo Proxi or even Beck. But like I said before it has to be pretty, or unusual stile. I agree with you that there ara few stories that are worth reading, in all the fandoms i read the writters tend to over generalise & simplify the character's characteristics & fall in to a pattern or angts, hurt, confort, silly romantic fluff and horny rampages of pwp, with no point to them, I read them any way beacause I'm adicted to reading fanfiction, and when people like you aren't around, I have to deal with what I can find, your tipe of writting is much more entrataining, capturing, & aluring, you simply rock. But you know what the say if live gives you lemons, order up some tequila & salt! I'm glad that you liked the music I recomended and that you founded just as fitting for the characters. Music is what usualy inspires me to draw wich is my strong suit, it also helps me to writte but I honestly suck at it, thats why I don't post any of it, I'm not about to torture the general public with my original stories of my pathetic atempts at anime fanfics, I prefere to read. Woah I've talked a lot, I get out of your hair now, & I'll let you know if I find more songs for your character or the story. ja ne!
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From ANON - Rowen Raven on September 14, 2007
He got that Damn right! Wolf is too inteligent for his own good, Ha kohar got what he deserved, Wolfram is a strategist al right that was an amezing plan, even if the king noticed that he had intended to happen just at it did it was to late the harm has already been done. Hurray for Wolf and getting rid of the first fucker, next on the list is faraya and it wont be as quick as kohar's but just as an elaberate skim as the first one, and just like kohar faraya will see his own death in the beautiful green orbs. I'm just slightly worried whar kind of precaution will the king take towards wolfram, now that he has and an idea of how dangerous the blond is. Even if kohar is dead wolf life is not about to get any easier is it? faraya will have yasai to watch him like a hawk, he will have to be more cautios, i'm also curious as to what will be amaes take on kohar's death at wolf hand however indirectly as it was; that alone will make their chances to of escape more dificult. I like the way wolf put one & one together, adding the fuzzy facts in his disfunctional head to figure out that he had been screwed and that it was the tea that made him sick. Glad to know that I was able to amuse you with my some what colorful way of frasecing my thoughts. Yes you did remembered the anime correctly, Yes the doc is hot, and the green eyed boy is basically useless, the violet eye man is always wallowing in his own missery, & thats basically what one finds in the fics of said anime, thats why I mentioned watary he is the happy-go-lucky-i'm-on-crack scientis with the blonde long hair and the tiny funny owl, just like wolf he is basically understimated, when his intelect alone make him quite dangerous oponent, and besides he make a lovely hot couple with the shadow master, the suit with the blue eyes. you can't blame a fic junky for trying to get his fixt! as for bayko he is the huge white tiger the purple eye guy uses to fight, he has a human form wich i find to be most endearing that come out in the manga wich i asure you is better and more complex than the anime. I saw mirrage of blaze i liked it but is way too confusing i still don't get it, what i really did like and found kind of fnny was that i-hate-you-i-love-you relationship of the leading roles. Any way forgive the rambling and going back to the present story, I had accesed the site to review again to ask you some thing when i came across the new chap, so here is my new inquisiteve, How much is the concentration of demon tribesman in faraya? I ask this because i was wondering how old is he; if the servants were once concubines, is the guy really that old and has enough mayuzoku blood in him to slow his aging conciderably, or is a concubines durability that short? just something i was wondering, keep it up with the up dateing in the posible messures, i can never get enough of this and yes you have to show just how much of a slut can pretty wolfram be. ~_^ ja ne!
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From ANON - Ducky on September 14, 2007
YAY! Oh this chapter was awesome! I love how Wolfram took out that jerk! Sweet Justice! I'm kind of worried about what's going to happen to him since the king knows but I think he'll make it out alright in the end. He has to for Yuuri.

Thank you so much for telling me that Amae is going to be with someone that can treat him right. It really makes me feel better for the poor hottie. (btw - I am drawing a picture of him - I will send it to you when I am done. ^_^ )
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