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From ANON - yuuri-eiri on September 14, 2007
Hello... i really really don�t knows how do you do it.... i mean...( wow 17 chapt.!!!) you have a lot of ideas and... oh... i�m so jealous!!! you are such a good writer.... i will be waiting for the next chapter... bye!!!
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From dawnmm on September 14, 2007
Faraya realized what Wolfram did huh. Interesting. Kind of wondering why he is warning Amae though. I'm glad he's not going to be there much longer (based on your answer to another reviewer. So we are finally going to see what the rest of the gang is upto that sounds good. Wonder if Yuuri's power is so much greater than Faraya's or just close based on his power rating per Wolfram. I like that Wolfram really cant remember what happened and his anger wasn't as strong as I expected it to be. This is going to be so intrigueing when done. Thanks for the explanation
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From ANON - lol on September 13, 2007
Hi
I like your fanfic, its really great. But what i miss here is that you hardly mention yuuri, for example as wolfram has awaked and find out what happens he didn`t thought of yuuri a lot and he wasn`t so much worry about the rape as i have thought he would be! Or is it because he dosen`t remember much of it? (Surely the last one)
I hope you update your next chapter soon! Recently you update them really quickly!!!!
I am really excited of the next chap!
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From ANON - Razion on September 10, 2007
Whoa! How do you manage to make Wolfram sound so sexy even while he's being taken advantage of? I do hope Yuuri ultimately burns Faraya to a crisp or something of the equivalent. I wonder if he will figure out that Wolfram already experienced power swapping before. >.< And I'm turning more into an Amae fan too! Nicely done! Thank you for writing!
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From ANON - rowen raven on September 09, 2007
Ha! Faraya might as well had shagged a corpse, for all the recognition he got! Tha was worse than a pitty fuck! Well now you've got me I already want to know what happens next, will wolf remember or not, will faraya come back & try to do him when he is more lucid? And what will wolf reaction be when he is finally aware of what faraya did to him? The guy sighned three dead warants, & is #1 in three most die lists, be that of wolf, yuri & kyota's. Oh kohar is going to get it, he touhgt it was pay back, but he only got himself screwd. Well it was not what I expected, I was kind of hoping for a more eventful if not more traumatic, not to say forceful with out ruling out right violent expirience, but it was original, and actualy about the only way faraya was going to get him for the first time wiht out having to kill him first. He thinks wolf behaved like a slut he should see him when yuri is putting it to him, then he will know the meaning of a slut! On a diferent note I don't know if you've seen or heard or read yami no matsue (descendants of darkness) but i belive you would write asome stories about it, specially on the secondari characters like watari or bayko to wich people never pay much attention to, i would gladly read it, but any way that was just a thought I agree with you whats the point in being a writter if you can't write what you want, great chap looking foward to the next, ja ne! ~_^ ps i'm still laughing at the mouse, and now at faraya that didn't go as he expected, I can't belive wolf dozed out on the guy, and to top it all the guy feels ofended he is so pathetic! serves him right!
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From Beachan18 on September 08, 2007
...

Okay that was hot...

I am so going to be happy when Yuuri finds Wolfram and kills the bastards. Really happy.

That really hurt to read. >_< I feel sorry for Wolfram.
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From ANON - Ducky on September 08, 2007
..as another note: Amae really is like my favorite character from this story. Can you tell? Please let something good happen for him.
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From ANON - Ducky on September 08, 2007
I'm so happy Wolfram was able to think it was Yuuri. I feel so bad for him and Amae. I don't want them stuck in that place anymore. I keep thinking about what is going to happen to them once they are out. I keep thinking that Yuuri will come for Wolfram and they will be together again. Secretly, my desire is for Arachi or for Dochiro to fall for Amae, so he can be with someone gentle and kind that will actually care for him - instead of using him like a sex toy.
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From ANON - klen77 on September 08, 2007
I also don`t like the fact that you let wolfram to be raped! I had loved your storys, first Working out the Paradox and this one too, until this chapter. I had hoped that faraya will never sleep with wolfram and whats with yuuri i don`t think he will appreciate it that his husband have slept with another man!
Your writting is great and your ideas too, but why did you have wolfram to be raped?
But i still would like to read this story further!
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From dawnmm on September 08, 2007
not to thrilled about the rape but you did it extremely well. I am happy that he is getting a boost to his fire element though. (I dont like rape in general but realize sometimes it is necessary for the story line). If Faraya is the Maou doesnt he have all of the elements not just fire, like Yuuri does? I cant wait to see what Wolframs reaction is going to be when he realizes what happened though. Since the king had sex with Wolfram does this mean that he is now given permission to use his powers freely without using someone elses therefore it wont drain from him? Looking forward to seeing what happens next
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From ANON - Razion on September 08, 2007
Ahh! Those compliments are definitely not overdone. I mean every one of them.

If only I actually watched DBZ. >.< I'd get to enjoy more of your fics. I'm extremely guilty of "underwriting" and then leaving it hanging. For over a year now I've been trying to write a CastleVania fanfic on Joachim and the inspiration only hits me once in a blue moon. This results in a chapter here and a chapter there every now and then and they're not even in order. Haha, "blabbering" moods are usually good ones ^_^!

And you're totally wrong! Reading your fic I came across words like "enthralling" and "jouncing" and knew that your command of the language was probably a whole lot better than a lot of people I knew. I'm not doubting the language capabilities of non-native English speakers but I'm pretty sure you surpass a good number of them. I do realise that you make mistakes in grammar every now and then with one or two words left out in some sentences but I believe that happens to every writer. Wanting to improve is great and I know you'll do well but don't be too over critical of yourself! ^__^

With regard to your characters, I'm so glad you took out Greta too! In a way I think Faraya and all are kind of endearing in a twisted way. I can't help feeling for them because of the sad state their in but at the same time I can't help wanting to strangle Faraya. That being said, I really want to glomp Amae. XD

Thank you very much for your reply! ^_^ I'm off to read Chapter 16!
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From ANON - Anon on September 08, 2007
You know I really enjoyed the prequel to this but as soon as you let Wolfram be raped by the king, that's it! I'm not reading this story anymore! You have completely ruined it for me!! How could you do that to him!!!!
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From ANON - Razion on September 06, 2007
Wow. Just simply, WOW.

I'm at chapter 14 now and your fic has left me totally awed and addicted. Really, stories like yours so well fleshed out and detailed are truly one in a million and I'm so happy you've chosen to write for this fandom! You've an excellent command of the language; until I read your Author page, I had no idea it wasn't your main language.

I apologise for not reviewing more. This story's just been so enthralling I loaded the page on my PSP and brought it around to read while I was out. In my eagerness to get to the next chapter and the next, I totally neglected giving reviews!

Ah, firstly, I do like your idea of "power swapping". You've explained it and reasoned it out nicely and it fits very well with your story. I do like how you portray Wolfram as well. His behaviour and how cunning he is all so that he can be reunited with Yuuri is really sexy! Lol! The randy side of Yuuri took me by pleasant surprise. I always thought Wolfram would be more inclined to it but I'm glad I've been shown the other side of the picture!

I also love your side characters! You've taken the time to really put personalities to great descriptions and that is something few authors make the effort to do. You've made it absolutely delightful to envision what goes on with your nicely done narrative too!

All that being said, I can't wait to read Working out the Paradox. I'm going to try to drag out reading that though to make a good thing last for a long time, but knowing how addicted I am to your writing, I'm sure I'll be done with it soon. >.<

Thanks for taking all the effort to write your stories!
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From ANON - Ducky on September 06, 2007
This story is so awesome. Please tell me you are going to write more. It's been my addiction for days.
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From dawnmm on September 05, 2007
ok--whats so special about the mouse?-need more--hope to read you soon.

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