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Reviews for Another Teen Pregnancy

By : GreyPenInk
  • From Gritz on March 18, 2008
    I really liked this fic even though I'm not a fan of the series (like the characters, the show bored the hell out of me.) I love the fact Raito is the uke- as he should be.

    I would like to point out your writing style though. I get the feeling it's more of a PWP than a story. At times, words like 'owie' and 'preggy' should not be used in a fic like this. Another- caps are a little over done at times. You also switch between present and past tense a lot and it makes it really confusing and hard to read. Other than that, just a few grammar errors.

    But I still like this fic. It's well thought out and it has a nice flow. Raito is adorable. Love mpreg. That's a bonus.
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  • From ANON - REBD on March 13, 2008
    this is a good story and i hope that you do write more
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  • From ANON - Reese on February 24, 2008
    I really do enjoy your story. ^_^ I hope there will be an update soon, but don't rush it. Ideas flow in their own time. I have to say... I really love pregnant Raito. I'm really hoping that he starts wanting this baby too at some point...

    Thanks!
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  • From spoon10488 on February 24, 2008
    Sorry to review again, but who is matt? I don't remember a matt in the Deathnote eps I watched. I am I going crazy? I looked up pictures of him and they aren't ring any bells. Sorry for the stupid question. '
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  • From spoon10488 on February 24, 2008
    You were close on the dates and I didn't notice either way. Besides this is your story so go wild!
    =)
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  • From spoon10488 on February 21, 2008
    Wow I just read your whole story now. I love it. It's so descriptive and interesting. I'm really hoping this story has a positive ending. (Not with all the main characters dieing) I just finished the Death Note episodes last week and I was slightly depressed with the ending.

    I love you version of Death Note better. L didn't die! I hope that Light(I don't remember how to spell the other name sorry) grows to like the baby more. I hope that L and light will get together in the end.

    I also hope that evil son of a b**** Old Dr. get the crap kicked out of him. Trying to get his hands on Light and threatening poor cute animals. EVIL! That wussy Dr. needs to get some balls. I love Light's Dr. though. =)

    Misa misa is a pain and not very smart. Too clingy.

    I wonder when they will find out the gender of the baby. I love how L keeps bugging Light. It would be funny if L pushed Light too far and got like 20 eye twitches and had Light attack L and make out with him. All that pent up sexual fustration. ;P

    Anyway I love where this story is going. I hope you update soon or as soon as you can.
    =)
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  • From GlamReaper on February 21, 2008
    Oh man, killer update! Thank you! I can't wait for more - well I can, I've got the goddamn patience of Job - anyhow, thanks! I'm looking forward to more!
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  • From ANON - Lila on February 15, 2008
    Sorry for reviewing so late but this is a recently discovered area for me...for some reason i thought i didn't like deathnote but when i finally sat down and watched it i fell in love...anyway i love this story just as much... how it flows the characters are out of character in a good way but in character for this situation....ya know what i mean?... anyway i like a little angst as much as the next person but i really would like a happy ending for the couple...The way you write the thoughts going through their heads is absolutely fantastic and engaging......I really can't get enough so when i reached the fifth chapter i was a little sad about it :(.......i won't be one of those people to tell you to please hurry up and update...i've tried writing a story before even when you know the characters and their thoughts and mannerisms like the back of your hand it's still hard to write a story about things you haven't seen them do before....and to have a plot that isn't easy to come up with....so my heart goes out to you and your ability to create and make this situation believable :)...i love the little love hate relationship you have them going through yet adding in that they notice they don't function well without the other present makes it all the more sweeter... although i should probably say the lust fight relationship but hopefully soon to turn into love....Anyway won't rush ya but i will patiently await the next chapter.......(this is my longest review for a story i've ever written i usually just right good stuff...) XD
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  • From ANON - Vish on February 15, 2008
    I so rarely see well-written, in-character stories like this. Especially my fav guilty-little-kink, mpreg! I really like the doctor's character. I hope you get inspiration to write more!
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  • From ANON - Della on January 28, 2008
    Wow... just wow.

    Generally, I usually dislike MPreg stories but this is so well written.... I love it, and would love for you to continue, dear.
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  • From ANON - Bluumberry on December 29, 2007
    As you're using the "-kun"s and "-san"s and whatnot, you might as well turn your "Dr.Name-san" to "Name-sensei". While sensei means teacher it also means doctor so calling a person that would sound a bit more flowing than adding both Dr. and -san.
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  • From ANON - oztan on December 23, 2007
    I hope L can make Raito fall in love with with him.
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  • From animekid on December 13, 2007
    omg make more

    L is such a bastard in this! I love how all the characters are played out and how the doctor interacts with our two boys.

    Still a good piece of work; raito preggy=win
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  • From nathankeogh2001 on December 11, 2007
    Yay! Update:) Love the new chappie as always:3 I look forward to the next one! I was so happy when I saw that this story was updated^^
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  • From ReidMorgan on December 10, 2007
    I love this. I love it so much! I don't think you need to change a thing the chapter is great and everyone is so in character it is perfect. This is such an interesting plot you have here and it only grows more intricate with Light's thoughts and words (I am never sure what to think about him), I look forward to L & Light's conversations and reactions with/to each other. Most of all I love the internal battles everyone has in this fic because you write it all so well.
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