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By : Duomi

From ANON - finistelluris on March 13, 2008
Oi,

to be honest, I've been following this story for quite some while, but you know how lazy people are when it comes to reviewing (also, using stories for exam relief under pressure doesn't really allow for my bad conscience to use up even more time to non-exam-related stuff...XD). So, to sum it all up, I've enjoyed it tremendously! Good plot, invisible games (hooray for that!) and sexual tension. Big plus for the ending as it stands now, even though it is open; I really like the idea of L and Kira fleeing together without sharing the same ideas about the powers of the note, still trying to manipulate the other.
About your question: The very idea that a single... say, entity (even it was a death god or someone else with supernatural powers) holds a power that vast is frightening. As soon as someone has a personality, desires etc, all decisions are based on that someone's ideas of moral, good and bad, acceptable, and so on. I wouldn't favour an emotionless machine to pass better judgments, though. Plurality is important in order to evaluate a situation and judge adequately. I'd feel better in a way if someone made the world a safer place by stopping crime, but who is Kira to know all the background of, say, a murder? Even if his intelligence is above average, it doesn't mean he is a better judge of character, especially after having shown such talent for manipulation and evil himself. Knowing that and the fact that he's in hiding under very high pressure, together with someone who's equally intelligent and might be used by him would make me very afraid of the situation. After all, he is someone who could possible take all the world hostage...
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From Hellagoddess on March 13, 2008
NooOOOoooOOOoooOOOO! It's over! *flaps hands and makes useless noises of agitation*

You are writing as sequel. This is not a statement of inquiry. It is a factual pronouncement.

I liked the chapter - good feeling for the epilogue and - yes the open ending was nice too. I agree that it would have felt too bogged down with the introduction of Near and so on... It seems like DN itself is in two parts - when L was alive and when L wasn't, so it makes sense to split your story into two also.

As for supporting Kira were he a real person. Hmmm... In all honestly, if I had a Deathnote myself, I would have done the same. I know people say this as some kind of fangirly-o-i-luff-raito-squee-isn't-he-just-da-kawaii-est-fing-EVA?! *cringes internally* (I actually feel ill after writing that.) But they would never have the actual stomach to do anything - it's all a very surreal thing to them. Me however, I would write so much my pens would run out of ink. This world does need to be cleaned and I would be the right person to do it. (Why does this suddenly feel like a job interview? Yes! Pick me! I can be the next KIRA! I'll murder and slaughter like you've never SEEN! Like you've never even IMAGINED! I'm ambidextorous! I can write with BOTH hands, at the SAME TIME! Twice the killing power!)

Forgive me.

I ramble.

I would support Kira, until the point where he started to kill indiscriminately. Then I'd hunt him down and eat him. Well not really but you know what I mean.

Eagerly looking forward to the next story!
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From spoon10488 on March 12, 2008
Wow there are a lot of spelling error in my previous review, but I'm too lazy to fix them. I hope you can understand what I wrote.
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From spoon10488 on March 12, 2008
Wow awesome story. I really hope you make a sequel. I like the open ended way you ended this story, but would really like to see what happen as they are on the run. Not may stories tell you what happens after. It would be neat to see how L and Light/Kira face the changes of Mello, Near and Waterai (spelling?). I would be cool. Also you said you were worried about the traveling around the world thing, but you could have it that L had a secert Layer built years and years ago that not even Waterai knew about. It would be somewhere remote. L and Light/Kira are smart enough to make it look like the were at a lot of different places they weren't. Also with the news of how Kira and L are people would be looking for them. Some Kira groupies might even start to dress like Light making it hard for the police to find the right Kira. That way you wouldn't have to worry about moving Light/Kira and L all over the planet. Even could even have them do so continent jumping before going to L's sercert hide away. L needs to pick stuff up from different place anyway right?

As for your question I kind of have to answers. First let me say that in the Death Note I watched Kira and Light seemed to be one in the same. In your story they are two seperate selves, which I like too. I'm not anti-Kira, but I am pro-Light and pro-L.

I would really like for Light to gain some control back. Now that Light knows he is Kira he could fight a mental battle with Kira ending with them taking turns being in control. It would defenitly make things interesting if L started having sex with Light and ended up climaxing with Kira. Lol. That would be nose bleed worthy.

Anyway back to the question. If I was a Kira supporter and heard that Kira and the famous L were on the run together I would support them. I would probably be a little suspicious of L's reasoning for being with my Kame but I would help them if they asked me. I might even think that L had seen the light (no pun intended) and was a follower of Kira now too.

If I was against Kira I might be royally pissed and think that Kira was controlling L or the L was already dead and Kira just wanted to confuse the world with that lie because he had lost. If I was cocky I might even state that Kira was a chicken.

If I was once a Kira follower, but decided to change side after hearing that I would probably think Kira was a coward too. I would most likely be disappointed that Kira was only a man and that I had been a fool for believing him to be a Kame. I would also either be pissed and be willing to help catch Kira or get depressed and commit suicide (extreme cases only) I might even try and sway other Kira followers into thinking my way and tell them that Kira was a false Kame. That would result in my ass being kicked. Lol.

If I was Misa I would think that L was just trying to steal my boyfriend. If I was Light's father I would be royally pissed that I was refused the right to kill my son then kill myself.

Umm... that about all I think. Oh, as Yaoi facfiction reader my response is that since they are going to be alone a lot then there should be...Hot Yaoi Smexyness! But I think my personal opinion is byeist.___ ;P

Anyway like I said before loved your story. I hope some of my rubblings are use full to you if you decide to right the sequel.
=)

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From ANON - Eclipses_Chick on March 12, 2008
Thank you for replying to my review, and yes, I do agree that there are better writers out there, but you are still an inspiration in my eyes. Crossing my fingers for the sequel!!
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From ANON - Kitty on March 12, 2008
I always liked Light more than L but I don't considered myself a "Kira supporter". I was very devastated when he died but it doesn't stop me from thiking that he's completely insane and I don't think that this 'killing criminals' thing would have gained support in reality. So if I knew that he's a mere human this would be like a 'haha I told you so!' to the crazy people who did support him. And if I would have found out that he went into hiding with one of the detectives who had been chasing him I believe my reaction would be something like: "WTF!? How the hell did this happen!? I want to hear the details! The public deserves to know!"
Anyway, I think that a sequel is a great idea! I can't imagine how you planned to close everything in one chapter. After all, there is a difference between an open ending and not giving a proper ending. Please write a sequel, I think you will be able to make it very interesting.
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From amenochikara on March 12, 2008
Excellent ^^ I look forward to the sequel. I stated reading this the other night and was referred over by Hellagoddess. And what a reference! Very awesome, very awesome. I love how beautifully it fits in with the manga, save the ending. So good...!
As for your question about supporting Kira, I probably would >-> I thought that when I was reading Death Note, but I also hated Kira when reading. If I was just a civilian and didn't know how corrupt Kira was, I would have supported him.
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From SailorAurora on March 12, 2008
Wow, that's very excellent. I hope to read that story very soon! ^_^

As for the "interview bit"... well....

I actually have mixed feelings on the whole thing of supporting Kira or L.
On one hand, I really do understand why Raito would want to do such things. After all, the courts can be a total joke sometimes. Take pedophiles for instance. They rape a child and mentally scar them for life, and they only get 5 to 8 years for that? They're pratically back out onto the streets in no time at all! And female pedophiles get less time than that, just because somehow a older woman sexually molesting a young boy is more socially acceptable...
And then you get bank robbers who get more time than pedophiles do. It's just screwed up when you think about it like that.

But then on the other hand, Raito is only human, and is prone to mistakes like others. The justice system has comemened innocents before thanks to the mistakes or flaws of humanity. And not to metion there have been children and adults who lied out of petty revenge before. Ever heard about that group of boys who lied about thier coach molesting them just because he didn't let them be on the football team? Those boys only wanted to be popular with the ladies, and they were so childish enough to lie for such a stupid thing. The poor Coach was in jail for such a long time before some of the boys finally confessed to being liars.
In the Death Note world, if he had been killed... well, Raito would had basically killed an innocent man based on the words of a group of liars.
proving to the world that one man cannot judge the world like that, even if his intetions were good.

sorry, that ended up being more wordy than I expected. ^^;; but at least I hope that helps you come up with some intersting responses from the population.
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From ANON - Eclipses_Chick on March 11, 2008
This is undoubtably the BEST DN fic I have ever read. When I first started reading it I was a little worried about where the plot was heading, but you never disappointed me and I give you kudos!!! Keep up the good work and may L share his cake with you!! Please update soon!!
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From ANON - Kitty on March 10, 2008
In the anime the rule said that if someone misspelled a name four times *on purpose* the human who wrote the name will die. was it different in the manga?
I can't believe L went as far as this to save Light...
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From AWickedMemory on March 09, 2008
["...Light-kun keeps repeating when I speak," Ryuuzaki murmured. "Perhaps his hearing-- ow," he finished mildly...]
Lolz. XD

Light is extremely violent. XD I had no idea. All the "first Kira" "second Kira" "third Kira" confused the hell out of me at first, but I think I kind of get it now. But "third Kira"?
(You do realize this constantly makes me think of a) Becca's ex-girlfriend, and b) your Kira? XD)

["Don't do that when I'm trying to-- mm-- be mad at you," Light tried to snap. Realizing that his voice had come out more sullen and breathy than irritated, Light frowned suspiciously at Ryuuzaki.]
That reminded me incredibly of Kian right there. XD

["Mm... Mine's-- longer," he panted smugly.]
["...I'm wider," he stated.]
Pfffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffft. XD

["Light-kun is learning more effective threats."]
Nice. XD

Quillsh Wammy???

[Was this how it felt to be normal? Completely unable to function properly?]
I love how Light completely can't dress himself. XD

O_o; Does Misa really talk that... childishly? Act like a little girl like that? I always pictured her as more... I don't know, fangirly, but serious, not all "He's Misa's Light! ♥" What is Misa, a singer? An actress? It sounds from the story like she's some sort of celebrity or something, having a manager and going by MisaMisa.

Aizawa makes me think of Gravitation. XD Rapist asshole bastard. >_< !!!

ANYWAY. Except for the parts that confused me, it was cool. :D I like that L is escaping with Light after securing his own safety with the Death Notes... Nice. Much better than dying.
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From ANON - Mewmew2 on March 09, 2008
Dang! Excellent job on this story. As for the ending of his latest chapter all I have to say is 'What a twist!' Nice job. Please update again ASAP! You've got me on the edge of my seat.
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From Hellagoddess on March 09, 2008
Wow! Exciting chapter! I absolutely LOVE the fact that someone has finally used the 'misspell rule'. It's just such a blatant out for L that I was surprised that it wasn't commonly used - so thank you for picking up on it!

"or, in Matsuda's case, a tiny girly yelp followed by an embarrassed laugh" This made me laugh for a long time - such a Matsuda thing to do - I could completely see it happening!

Really liked the chapter, it was quite heart-wrenching at the end, when L was saying goodbye to Watari and just, the whole surrogate father thing and that he'd never see him ever again and it was all because of Light and- oh! *wipes tears* Really sad but really well done :)

And thank YOU for your advertisement of my video! I wasn't aware you liked it so much! I would say I'm quite proud of it - I'm currently working on another DN video (or three actually) but can't decide which one I want to work on more :) And thanks again for all your reviews on 'Shades'. It makes me happy to know that someone who writes so well likes my stuff!

Eagerly awaiting your final chapter!
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From ANON - Nilahxapiel on March 08, 2008
Okay, and here I thought this story was good before...but Near/Mello vs L/Kira -? That's quite possible the most brilliant idea anyone has ever had, and I'm fairly jealous that I didn't think of it first. Damn. Damn, damn, damn. But good on you, and I hope you're quicker about updating, because I'm seriously loving this story, -faints - You should think about posting it on Fanfiction.net, you'll get LOADS of reviews....just a suggestion.

Great, wonderful, perfect, awesome original story. I'd thought, up until now, it was just another (although well written) L/Raito story, and this AU is just bloody perfect! Please continue!

Nilah
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From spoon10488 on March 08, 2008
Awe I love this story! I really hope that Light comes back and Kira is gone. I'm a sucker for happy endings, or at least happier endings then L dieing and Light being shot several times. Anyway, this is a great story. I love how you kept everyone in character. I like your writing style too. I can't wait to read more. Hope you update soon.
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