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By : Stormborn Apostle

From SlntCobra1 on November 10, 2009
Wow, this was very well written dude. Also, it's rather funny as well. "The motherfucking Bahamas!" lmfao. Good one. I really don't know what else to tell ya. You're an excellent writer.
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From ANON - Linette Bird on August 12, 2009
My friend just raves about your work Sinners, being the short attention span person that I am though, I decided to start off with this short story instead. Mostly to deliberate based on your writing, whether it would be worth my time to sit through. Sadly I didn't come to the same conclusion my friend did, though perhaps it's because this is a short story and NOT the original. The beginning was predictable and I felt the characters rambled on too much on what I considered irrelevant. I must add that the sex scene wasn't bad, even though it's unrealistic, for it had a nice rhythm despite it's redundant use of description in areas. All in all, it was an interesting concept idea that I feel could use some improvement. Thank you very much for your effort and time. I wish you the best of luck with your writing career.

Linette Bird
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From zentillion on April 05, 2009
Cute, funny, sexy, and totally delicious are the four adjectives that would describe this little sidestory of yummy naughtiness. Yeah, not much of a review, but hey.

Now, to stop messing around and continue reading through Sinners!
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From RichardH on December 30, 2008
1. holy fucking asscrackers, the tightness in slash's jeans is something I've felt far too often... I worry when my woman brings a lolipop home.....

2. I love a good halloween oneshot, and this story brought out the child/sick bastard in me

3. since I do have some lolipops around, I'll test this idea you have out for you slash, savvy?
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From Stormborn Apostle on March 30, 2008
Josh Palmer---I should make a character Q+A sometime, answering some common questions about the main characters. Like, "does Gardevoir own a vibrator?" and "does Gardevoir use a vibrator?".

jalapeno on a stick---You know what would be hot? Spray cheese.

I am kidding, of course. Although spray cheese IS yummy. It's just not arousing-yummy, heh.

Dante Inferna---Watson is also very perceptive about naughty, naughty things. Oh ho ho.
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From DanteInferna on March 20, 2008
Slash is a horrible liar.
He gets that "I-Just-Did-Something-So-Painfully-Obvious-Look"
when talking to Watson.
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From HartCarter on February 03, 2008
you may not have tested candy/lolipops but a fat man such as my self actually has:D depending on the brand(weird aint it) you can get different reactions and lifesaver gummies work the best candy wise but my favorite is a GF-sunday:D:D:Dlots of choc syrup and ice cream (dont forget cream whipped and non) and cherries make a great orgasm ender (im a pimp biotch live with it)
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From ANON - Josh Palmer on January 21, 2008
That was a entertaining Oneshot =D. And lol at the Q&A.
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From Stormborn Apostle on November 29, 2007
Sirnight777---Yeah, I'm of the belief that the word pussy isn't very erotic and try to avoid it whenever possible. And cunt's just too vulgar for a loving situation, so I rarely, if ever, use it. There's enough of a lemony vocabulary to compensate, heheh.

I do highly recommend reading Sinners when you have time...not just because I like to brag about how swell it is, but also because it's a lot better than this oneshot...which, despite its positive reviews and high ratings, is still just a simple and quickly-written oneshot.

Thanks for the review! :3
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From Sirnight777 on November 29, 2007
It was a 'sweet' story *brick'd*. In all seriousness it was a great lemon, and one of the better humanxpokemon fics I've read. One thing that makes you stand above the others is the fact that you don't just say 'cunt' and 'pussy' all the time. I don't know why everyone seems to think those are the only terms for it. I haven't read Sinners yet(since I'm pressed for time), but after reading this I'm looking forward to it.

P.S.: Damn that lucky little blowpop, and damn you for blowing my garde-fic out of the water.
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From Stormborn Apostle on November 16, 2007
DemonicStrife---The Christmas one won't just replace a lollipop with a candycane! That'd be far too easy. I have an idea in mind already, and if it still looks good when I start writing it, I can promise that it'll be very cute, heh.

Like, so cute that I considered using it in the main Sinners...

Now, I need to stop watching Bonanza and Gunsmoke (lol I'm a dork) and get back to chapter 17!
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From ANON - DemonicStrife on November 16, 2007
Blowpops = Win.

This story = Epic win.

Awesome oneshot this was, it made my night. =D I was suptrised when Slash dipped a blowpop into Psymakio, but I like new ideas. I'm open-minded like that. Makes me wonder what a Christmas special would be like, and I'm pretty sure it'd involve a mistletoe... and maybe a candycane. XD

Eh, I can't really see a Thanksgiving oneshot. My mind doesn't seem configured to project that. :/ Dunno why. Well, I guess that's all I have to type here, for now. So yeah.
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From Stormborn Apostle on November 09, 2007
Anonymous---Well, the candy don't gotta be too big...after all, Gardevoir isn't, HEH. And I would have to be a MAJOR prick to have something like...

Epilogue

GARDEVOIR GETS AN INFECTION. SLASH TAKES HER TO A DOCTOR, WHO GETS SUSPICIOUS AND REPORTS SLASH TO THE AUTHORITIES FOR POKEMON ABUSE. HE AND GARDEVOIR ARE SEPARATED FOREVER, AND GIOVANNI AND KIAKO TURN THE WORLD INTO A DARK, BLOOD-DRENCHED NIGHTMARE FOR ALL ETERNITY

...even in a non-canon oneshot. However, I will make a disclaimer that ANYONE ATTEMPTING TO IMITATE THE EVENTS OF THIS STORY CANNOT HOLD ME RESPONSIBLE FOR ANY INJURY THAT RESULTS. ALSO, I RECOMMEND LICKING THE CANDY TO A SMOOTH SURFACE BEFORE ENGAGING IN ANY PLAY. :-O

As for the multiple worlds thing, I think of it in terms of Stephen King's Dark Tower system...many different worlds on different levels of reality. The true incarnations of Slash, Psymakio, and Kiako are in the "world next door", so to speak...and saying anything else about their connections would spoil stuff for Sinners, so I won't, heh.

Pokefurry---Candycane, even without the curvy part, wouldn't really be...satisfactory, I think, lol.

Imasuky Lomae---Yep. "Hey Brock, how's our relationship developed since I first met you?"

"Uh, your voice actor changed, I think. And I got a mom."

THIS IS NOT CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT

Twi---DX?

...are you ready?

Oh, you mean...oh, lol. See, I was making a wrestling pun, and...ah, never mind. Yes, Gardevoir tying up Slash and having her way with him, coming soon to an internets near you.

Although the next story I'm ACTUALLY writing is chapter 17 of Sinners, heh. Then...I dunno, probably 18 and 19 of Sinners, then editing work on the rest of my stuff before oneshot'ing a few things. We'll see.

RoboRed---Don't worry, it ain't going nowhere, heh. Even if AFF were to disappear, I'd still be writing, probably sending it out over e-mail or something.

The lollipop idea did end up being much hotter than I originally expected, kekeke. I need to be even more...creative...for later oneshots...

benn454---The only Thanksgiving pun I could think of is "I'm thankful for that sweet ass", and, uh...not much I can do with that, lol. Although there may be a Gardevoir-meets-the-parents event in Sinners eventually...but that might not exactly end well. :-/
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From benn454 on November 08, 2007
Gardevoir trick-or-treating in a fairy costume? *dies from cuteness overload* And the blow pop was hawt. Great oneshot Slash! :D

I don't know if you could really do a Thanksgiving story. Since that's an US/Canadian holiday, and Hoenn is part of Japan, but hey, that's what artistic license is for! XD

I'll let you get back to writing chapter 17 now. lol
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From RoboRed on November 07, 2007
GAAARGGG!!! I'm sorry I didn't review ASAP! With school and everything, I almost completely forgot about the story! :(

Anyways, even though this was non-canonical to teh story, it still fits in so nicely. You did a great job again. I love the lollipop idea, that's hot... And I still love those "oh snap" moments (which can be easily foretold, such as when Slash began talking about how to get to the gum in the blow-pop :P). The Q+A stuff was short, but funny (the motherfucking Bahamas roflmao...). I can't wait for the next oneshot later, and more importantly, the next chapter of Sinners. Keep up the good work!

P.S. To the saguaro cactus comment: fucking...ow...>_>
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