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Reviews for Seven Days of Terror

By : Perfect Purity
  • From Revu on October 10, 2008
    He's the one they call Dr. Feelgood
    He's the one that makes ya feel all right
    He's the one they call Dr. Feelgood
    He's gonna be your Frankenstein

    Wow ask and you shall receive, I should have checked back on the story like 2 seconds after my last comment... Haha

    Well the latest chapter did not disappoint! Though it would have been nice to see more Pika action during the battle, I really liked the intermingling of multiple scenes and POVs and keeping everything straight and vivid. Brock's Ludicolo had good vibrant depiction, I could really see it dancing around in the rain.

    Also it was interesting how you worked Misty back into the story while still leaving enough to mystery. Relationships are budding but ooooh is Ash going to have his hands full with both Misty and May on this trip. Not to mention we have a major confrontation building... Oh and also the dark prelude you threw in there "was it a dream was it a vision?" Oh yeah... there are horrors to come, excellent!

    The one gripe I had was that it looked like the formatting messed up in the upload and left the end of the chapter completely italicized. But that's an easy fix around here so no biggie.

    I can tell you this story has really made me focus on a pokemon story of my own. I wish onto you the inspiration you've provided for me since especially I for one would like to see this story completed in all the angsty goodness I know is yet to come.

    Well good luck to you and I'll be sure and write again later!
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  • From Revu on October 08, 2008
    It's been a month since the review I left for this story and I have to come clean and say it's been bugging me all month that I want to know what happens next. I haven't been able to get this story out of my head, freaky huh? Well it's a tribute to your creativity and conceptualizing. I just keep playing out scenes in my head. Like I can imagine Misty getting emotional with Ash telling him how can she ever forgive Tracy for taking away the special pokemon that ASH gave her. And then I hope that Ash has enough sentimentality to say something besides he can get her a new pokemon. Maybe something like he gave her the evee so a part of him would always be with her, but now he can come clean and say he wants to be with her himself and doesn't want her to live in remorse over the past. In either case good luck, and I'll be keeping my fingers crossed to see more.
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  • From Revu on September 02, 2008
    Wow such an interesting story concept. I just sat through the whole story, read the reviews to it... and I have to say I can't understand why there aren't more... The story is well written, there was never a grammatical error that threw me off track while reading. The story has a lot going for it. It's good even if the title is cheesy. Sometimes lacking reviews can be disheartening, I'd tell you not to let it get to you but I'm in the same boat haha. But we still try.

    I like the character portrayal so far. Though I have to admit that Ash has come off feeling a little too calloused to me... I mean being a Pokémon trainer himself and also being a little more mature as you'd expect him to be over the years, you would expect him to be a little more sympathetic with Misty. You can tell he feels bad for what's happened, just I would think someone in that position would have tried to do more to comfort the other person. But I suppose there's still plenty of room for that coming up here.

    The one thing about the story I wasn't too thrilled about are the Team Rocket chapters. I liked the idea of the prologue giving in the general overview of Team Rocket's plan, but the other two rocket chapters have left me wanting to skim through them to get back to the trainer's drama. I'm sure what's going on there is important for the story to come, but I also feel like I should be surprised by what's been going on here later.

    Overall again well done! This is just one of those stories that manages to keep you glued to the screen to find out what is going to happen until the chapters end. Well anyway, I do hope you continue your story, because I would love to finish this one.

    Here's hoping it will be soon,
    -Revu
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  • From ANON - pinoysw1mmer on August 29, 2008
    Ah and being a swimmer and because I cant find much fault in your writing, I must say that if someone were to inhale water, they would actually sink not float. ; P Otherwise great. Especially the dialogue. i cant wait to read chp. 8 to bridge the gap to "Violated." lol.
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  • From ANON - pinoysw1mmer on August 25, 2008
    oh lol you dont need a whole lot of porn i was just saying. i like the chat. that* is so realistic. 5star.
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  • From ANON - pinoysw1mmer on August 18, 2008
    hello i just read chpt 6 and i must say its pretty good so far. you know your pokes xP
    but i guess you want a review, so here goes: i thought the begining was a bit weird with the team rocket smut, and im hoping you build up to at least a few more scenes with misty or somethin(may would be a pretty cool one nite when ash visits...im just saying)
    i like where the character devel. is headed cept for tracey, i wanna punch him in the nose. but im on my psp so im out of letters so bye for now!

    Michael
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  • From ANON - Anonymous on August 17, 2008
    Very good. :3

    I like your writing style.
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  • From ANON - dave on August 17, 2008
    Sorry about not reviewing before. Still better late than never, eh. I absolutely adore this fic. 5 stars
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  • From PokemonPr0nPal3000 on July 25, 2008
    Terrible title, but very intriguing premise, and very well written. Looking forward to more! Onward!
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  • From BlackWodin on July 08, 2008
    Very interesting start here. Can't wait to see what all Giovanni has up his sleeve for Ash and Co.
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