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Reviews for My Own Way

By : DeathNoteFangirl
  • From DeathNoteFangirl on August 26, 2008
    {{{{Nine Lives}}}} I'm glad you liked the sweetness, it has been pretty hardcore until now. The trouble is that I've now left the canon and so I'm bouncing off 'It Matters'. They aren't exactly lovey-dovey in that until the incident partway through. It's implied that things like cuddling and saying 'I love you' have never happened before, which means that they can't really happen in this story. :(

    Mello is such a git to write in this story. He's so far removed from the Mello I'm used to writing by 'The Mario Clause' that it's hard to grasp him (hence meltdowns on DA). But I'm glad that the bits that finally make it here are working.

    I will update soon. I've been working on two one-shots for competitions, plus people keep taking me out because of a tense real life situation. I know where I'm going with this next though. The next chapter will be called 'The Deepest Cut', which might give you clues. :p
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  • From Ninelives on August 24, 2008
    Matt's such a sweet guy!
    Mello can't get much sexier than he's now. I feel a bit bad for Matt, who tried to set his rules and all, but Mello couldn't care less ^^U he does whaever he wants anyway. But damn, he's very very hot. And possesive.
    *dies*
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  • From Ninelives on August 23, 2008
    Oh that little bit you added today was so cute and tender.
    They deserved a taste of sweetness, poor boys.
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  • From Ninelives on August 21, 2008
    Ok, it's a WIP so I don't know if you want reviews on this chapter till is over, but I have to say that I'm very amused at Matt's actions O.o I imagined Mello's face when he said about brushing his hair and couldn't help but laugh at it XD
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  • From DeathNoteFangirl on August 20, 2008
    If you want the absolute truth, I'm undecided. When I've written the later stories, I've had the background from Miyamashi's 'Twisted Religion' in my head, though I've already deviated right off that. I won't do a spoiler here in case anyone reading the comments haven't read 'Twisted Religion'.

    I'm in the chat room at Mattgasm, if you want to cant about this? Tbh chapter 16 is really haunting me. I'm partway through chapter 17, which is supposed to be from Mello's POV, but I'm finding it really disturbing. It might be nice to chat with you.
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  • From Ninelives on August 20, 2008
    O-M-G
    OMG OMG OMFG!
    I've just read 16 and I'm a bit in shock. Somehow, I was expecting them to be closer now (after the cute kiss two chapters back.
    But this is, actually, closer to my view and imho, more In Character. Imean, h ow badly messed must Mello's mind be now? He was a bit insane before, but now... I can see him capable of something like this (in fact, I rp'd a scene pretty similar to this once...)
    It's good that Matt somehow allowed, because a real, 100% rape would make things weird for them (not that this is going to make them easy, but...)

    I guess this was hard to write, but is great!

    And oh. I'm still unsure, Mello was a virgin?? he mocked matt, but......
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  • From DeathNoteFangirl on August 20, 2008
    Thank you. *breathes a sigh of relief* I've been debating both chapters 15 and 16 because of the themes in them. I didn't want to glorify the Mafia nor did I want to make it look like rape is ok, even in a yaoi world, where 'rape' is used in a lesser context. Unfortunately, I'd written later in the series Mello bemoaning to Matt 'the first time I had you, it was practically rape!' Which is all well and good in a domestic, half-cutesy scene, but not when you have to go back and write the bloody thing. It's only when you write scenes like those in this story that it occurs to you that Mello really is a violent bastard and a mass murderer; and that it's less cute when Matt's side of the sex isn't so consentual as it is later on.

    I'm glad that the chapters worked. 8D
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  • From Ninelives on August 20, 2008
    OMG chapter 15 was amazing. So intense and gore-ish


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  • From DeathNoteFangirl on August 20, 2008
    *grin* Yes, it's about they stopped being so defensive and started actually working ON each other.

    Sorry about having to bring them to Britain. I hate it when other writers do that, have them just randomly meeting in Japan or Canada or wherever it is that the author lives. Unfortunately, I've got to work this towards 'It Matters' and they have to be within a short car drive of Winchester for that.
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  • From Ninelives on August 19, 2008
    It was all being so sad :( but last chapter melted my hert and I spazzed a bit with the kiss!
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  • From Ninelives on August 19, 2008
    Ohhh But yours is not a real Mary-Sue. For being, she'd need to be 10x smarter than Matt, pretty and a mistery in herself. Matt would fall totally in love with her and foget about Mello, but Mary-Sue, with her awsome powers, would know that someone was in danger and would save Mello. Obviously, Mello would fall in love with her too and ask her for help to catch Kira. Yeah, that'd be a good Mary Sue -_-

    ^^U sorry for spamming you!
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  • From Ninelives on August 18, 2008
    So sad.....

    You solved the burnt/hair problem very well.
    And Mary-Sue is really a mary-sue? LOL
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  • From Ninelives on August 17, 2008
    Agree. Women are a no-no for Mello ^^U I feel a bit sad for Hal (she's my fav female character) but I prefer it like that XD

    But maybe he was pretending, and had to do it to fool the Mafia guys. was thinking of certain episode of House M.D. where an important man of a mafia group was gay, and he was about to die rather than letting people know.
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  • From DeathNoteFangirl on August 17, 2008
    I don't think Mello would know what to do with a girl. ;) I reckon even in canon, Mello was gay. The whole 'watching Hal in the shower and talking about Near' thing was a bit of a give-away.

    I'm glad you like it!
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  • From Ninelives on August 17, 2008
    You know how to make a fangirl happy, don't you?
    Wow. Mello's dangerous and intense and fricking hot. But I feel sad for him, telling himself he's asexual and all....
    Matt, in the other hand, seems to be quite happy for now. His life didn't seem very interesting back in England anyway.

    Mello's a virgin too? or he'd fucked with girls? O.o


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