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By : mayablackwolf

From Linkala on October 03, 2008
O_O ... Ryuk is so evil in this fic! *hides behind couch* It's a nice change from Observer Ryuk though, all Ryuk seems to do in most stories is watch what's going on and occasionally comment/laugh/demand apples, applause on breaking yet another DN fic mold! *claps + hands out Pocky and marshmallows to author*

OMG ... My little boy has a stuffed panda called L. Yes, my own toddler watches Death Note and he loves it (the parts I let him watch) even though he has a hard time understanding it. He asked for an L toy for his birthday this year (Awww) but unfortunately I couldn't get one, I WAS able to find a stuffed panda with a tuft of messy black hair on it's head like L's, and my little JD has yet to lose interest in L the Panda, lol.

I wish JD were old enough to read this story (or read at all) I have a feeling he'd love it even more than me, which is a LOT.

Now once again I must hold out and grit my teeth until a new chapter comes out, all the other stories I read now just aren't as good anymore in comparison *sniffle*
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From lovelle7 on October 03, 2008
Aww, Raitos family was so adorable laying like that :) I was so happy you made that scene. How coud Ryuk be so mean, that was so evil, I almost got pissed of myself, hehe. Wiiee Raito's gonna confess to L, I'm so curious about hiw its gonna turn out X3. About the chapter before this you wrote about your ideas of an m-preg in a sequal. I didn't know what it was (even if you could figure it out by the name...) but I checked it up. I haven't read a fic wiht any of those before but if you write it I'm sure it will be great just as this chapter was :)

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From ANON - gryphonwills on September 30, 2008
I like this story.
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From greeneyes40988 on September 29, 2008
Awwww L's so cuddly with Raito, it's so cute. I love Raito's Shinigami form experience. It's so sweet that he added 25 years to L's life, though he probably does choke on a sweet hehe. But once again you have amazed me I love this story so much. I can't wait for the next chapter hope you put it out soon. keep up the great work..
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From SailorAurora on September 29, 2008
let me guess, it's ryuk?? I doubt he went back to the shigami relam after light gave up his death note. most likely he was just hanging around various humans waiting for light or something. :p

And yes you can use my idea. that's why I suggested it in the first place. I wasn't sure if you were going to use it though...
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From Linkala on September 29, 2008
I can tell it's going to be a lot of fun with Light's shinigami powers thrown in the mix, I'd love the ability to fly or walk through solid obstacles ... although I've always worried about what would happen if I suddenly turned solid halfway through a wall, feel free to use that little 'what if'
Hmm, I'm gonna just randomly guess that the special guest will be... Near? I honestly can't guess, this story is really unpredictable, AND I LOVE IT! *Hugs author*

As for the Mpreg idea: YES! I love mpregs! Especially when it's L that's pregnant, there are WAY too many pregnant Light stories for my liking. It'll be interesting to see how the pregnancy/birth differs from others if the parents are immortal/part demon ... then again I guess a man giving birth is strange enough, lol.

My nails? I've stopped destroying them and switched back to my old favorite of marshmallows skewed on Pocky. *Shares with author and other reviewers*
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From lovelle7 on September 29, 2008
Awww :3 that was so adorable, sooo cute. The fluffier the better, hehe. Oh no in the end of this chapter you made it so thrilling I'm getting nervous even. I wonder when L realised he liked Raito so much :) I'm happy you already started to write on the next chapter since I'm so curious about wath your amazing fantasy takes us :)
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From Linkala on September 28, 2008
Oh my god, poor little L *cries into handmade L plushie* I wasn't expecting that, L accused of being a junkie by the cops. Probably because I'm so used to badly written, angst riddled stories where L was raped by a junkie when he was younger. Take that predictable themes! I must now go and chew my nails anxiously until another chapter of this story becomes available ... *shivers* I'm going into withdrawal already.
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From greeneyes40988 on September 28, 2008
I love it! So much fighting hehe.... Poor young L that was so sad. And the kiss and then the look on L's face so sad. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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From SailorAurora on September 27, 2008
Hehehe, I quite enjoyed that chapter. one thing though... I notice that you tend to spell "through" as "threw". Threw is like the past tense of "throw"... so that kept on appearing as an simple yet glaring error to me.

you know something? If Light didn't want to tell him the truth yet about how he knew L's name, he could try to pass it off as an stupid dream he had if he wanted to go down that weird, lame implausible route. I had that thought for some reason when I was figuring out how Light would try to explain it without telling the truth. I even had this little scenario play itself out in my head...
Light would look apologetic, and explain the reason why he had tried to play dumb too as well. He'd say: "About how I knew your name... to be honest, I don't quite know. At least not able to explain it rationally... Hell, it even sounds crazy when I think about it. You see... I had this strange dream with you in it. I don't exactly remember all of the details, but it was how I learned your name. I honestly thought it was only a dream that meant nothing at the time, and that's why I acted like it was nothing."
It'd be like an half-truth, since how he DID have an dream with Zaki who happened to look like L. And if L pressed for details about the dream, he could always describe Zaki and the rescue he had to do... while of course omitting the rest of the more important details, inducing who zaki is, etc. :P

Of course the question is whenever L would believe it or not. My money's on L basically doubting that little story, but giving Light the befit of doubt by filing it away into one of the possible ways that Light could had gotten his name.

but of course you don't have to listen to me, I'm just being stupid...
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From lovelle7 on September 27, 2008
Tihi *wide smile. I'm actually laughing slightly. There is so many feelnigs in this chapter and I really love it! It was so adorable in the end and Lawliet seemed so human reveiling all that information to Raito. I'm so happy :) I'm not lying when I say that I get all worked up from your story, I'm runnig around in my apartment and don't know what to do cause I like your story so much. And I am checking every day for an update :) I really love this story, it's the best fan-fic I've ever read. I feel sorry for L and Raito they're so beat up, worn out and confused I really wonder what you have in mind for the upcomming chapter. Anyway it will be great! :3 Please update soon! (and I'm sorry if I expressed myself wierdly cause I'm not sure if what I wrote is correct grammar.) :3
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From greeneyes40988 on September 24, 2008
AAHHHH! No a chiffy....But other than that I really love this story. I just love the way your going about the whole thing, so different. But anyways I loved this chapter it was short but thats ok it was more like a filler chapter anyway. So yeah, But I hope you get to filling better.
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From SailorAurora on September 24, 2008
loving this so far. keep up the good work! ^^
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From lovelle7 on September 24, 2008
Hehe, you now it kind of evil to stop when it so exciting so you almost fall of your chair :P I have no idea what possibly could happen next since you're totally unpredictable, and that a good thing. Um I got the feeling that it was some kind of torturechamber or interrogation room they where heading towards. You said it was gonna be a fight so thats for sertain. Anyway I hope Ryuzaki calms down and dont do anything he will regret later :)It would be cute if he also would find some feelings for Raito.
I'm also having a cold...I know how you feel. Please get healty and continiue to write (can't wait) ^w^
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From Linkala on September 20, 2008
See what you did? You actually got me off my lazy rear and made me finally register with the site. You have single handedly restored my belief that there are good fan fiction writers out there. I have to admit I've heard of similar plots before but they just never seem to give the second chance idea any justice (pardon my lame pun) The fight between Raito and Kira was wonderful, I was hoping you'd do some sort of run in between the two. And the idea of Raito having to absorb the defeated Kira was a great touch, I interpret the absorbing as Raito accepting his past plus previous identity and beginning on the road to redemption ... correct? If not you may hit me for stupidity.
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