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By : LotornoMiko

From ANON - sabaku_lotus on January 25, 2013
I hope your health is ok now in 2013. Or at least somewhat better.

Man....this monster of a fic is going to take forever to read. 130+ chapters. My God. But its worth it. I always love your stuff. Rape isn't my thing but I read rape before in this pairing so why the hell not. Some of the other L/A stories had H/C so I would be a hypocrite to say that I hated this for some N/C->H/C->C lemons.
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From Niongi on August 23, 2010
I have to say that I have never watched Voltron, and it took me sitting at my computer straight about...wow maybe 4-6 hours to read this fic with me only stopping to Google a character's picture and voices to hear them. I have to say screw those people who did not like this ending. Those who are broken so harshly and entirely rarely are glued together. Moreover, even if they managed to put themselves together you can always see the cracks and endless destruction on the surface of the mirror. This fic had me going on the emotional waves on and off, I couldn't commit to writing even one review until I finished for purely selfish reasons. I didn't want to disappoint myself. I had to see if she would choose the last choice and die. Thank you for writing this, and good luck on future endeavors.
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From Scorpinac on December 31, 2009
Well, I'll admit i was hoping for a more pleasant ending, but all things considered, aside of the aforementioned rewrite of 116 in that he doesn't rape Romelle like an idiot, there really wasn't anywhere else this story could have gone, except that maybe he could have consulted about wedding plans, and then discussed the possibility anew with Allura when she awoke fully after her ordeal, but not set anything in stone simply on the interest of wanting Allura to full recover from said ordeal before firmly deciding anything at all one way or the other, and in the meantime allowing her to see the twins again as long as she was there(back on Doom, I mean). That said, still a wonderful story, beginning to end, and I take the ending for what it's worth, sad and all. Until next chapter of "Divine Misunderstandings", then, I suppose. Laters.

Also, I've been playing with an idea for a Voltron fic myself, which would be kind of a "rewrite" of the original series/crossover, but we can discuss that more later.
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From ANON - Solitude on December 23, 2009
Hello, I'm Solitude - I have been reading this story since about the 3rd chapter was posted. In fact, I never even heard of Voltron until I read your stories. I think your verison of the charaters are way better than the cartoon and I have read your other stories.

With this one - let me start with I'm not mad - I'm not. I'm not mad because this is not the ending to the story you started in chapter 1. I have been noticing it change and hoped you would bring it back, but I see that you didn't. With the way the last few chapters where going it felt like you were going to kill Allura, but you even had her kill herself. Which would never happend. At least not with the Allura you were writing in the begging of the story. You changed both Allura's and Lotor's charater from what they were in the begging.

One of the main problems with the story was her - SUDDEN - Fear and view of Lotor raping her. Now, Yes - Lotor did rape her when they first met - I don't want to say but - BUT it was a brutal rape and she DID enjoy the sex. That is when she was brave and fought him - she always said No and would never call him Master. This is what drew him to her in the first place. She would not yield. But she did enjoy the sex and Yes Lotor knew how to touch her body and make her body reponsed, but she did at some time want him.

Now the 3 big mistakes Lotor did - things that were the unforgivable - were 1 - killing Avoke AND Bantor AND taking over a whole planet that not even his horrilbe vicious father wanted to do. 2 - the only real Rape he did the day after he killed Avoke. 3 - the rape or even sleep with at all of Allura' cousin.

I remember somewhere you talked about if you changed of if or maybe's but there were to many. There aren't to many there is really only 2 places. The first would be when Lotor kills Avoke and the second is the end.

The good part of the fist one is that Lotor would have never made mistake 2 and 3 if he never did 1. One thing I never liked about the story is that Allura never won any footing. I was hoping that he really did let her go to Avoke or his father really made him. That would have made him sacfice something important to him for the first time in his life. Now to bring them back together - Merla attach Avoke's planet and wins. Of course, Doom won't let her have that much power and would attack her. The bonus Lotor is kinda of saving Allura - from death by Merla hands. To show Allura his is trying to change for her - he doesn't conquer the planet he agrees to a treating with Allura's cousin (never having rape her) and exchange Allura goes back to Doom with Lotor.

As for the second option - well, the way a story is good is the fact that there was no other way for things to happen. That is - every thing happen because there was no other option. HERE - There are hundreds. 1 - why exactly didn't the witch see Allur about to kill herself. She so many other things - and don't say she was still recovering because she had months. 2 - Allura could have used her magic - whatever happened with that. 3 - Lotor could have given her the potion Cossakes suggested - that would make her enjoy it or even a love portion. At least, for a little while.

As for the ending - I assume the last chapter will be a future look. Of how bad Lotor became and horrible or lonely his life is without Allura. I did say the second change could be made here. This could be made into a bad dream Lotor has or a vision the witch gives him. So know he would know what Allura would do if he tried to force a marriage and sex. This would snap him out of his subborn ways. Yes - he keeps her on Doom, but dosn't force the marriage or the sex. And in return she gets to see the girls (of course) and works on being more closer or comfortable with Lotor. But he gets to have sex with the harem girls that are willing. That way Allura doesn't feel his sexual fustration and neither does he. Well, at least not as bad and the year he had no sex. (oh, yea that whole part that with Allura asking for sex - COMPLETELY WRONG!!)

I know this is long and I hope it made some sense - if I didn't please ask. I'm typing all this in a rush and I hope I get my idea accross. Just a final note - GREAT WRITING!!
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From Scorpinac on December 21, 2009
Damn... He just couldn't listen, could he? Now I'm really unsure as to the finale, other than a funeral and maybe a mutli-year time jump. Well, until the final chapter, then, I suppose. Laters.
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From Scorpinac on December 13, 2009
Hmm, well at least she's still alive for the moment. Hard to say if she'll survive the fever(105 degrees and the brain boils!!!). Yes, the final three chapters will indeed be interesting.

LosCon is a general sci-fi con, though it did have an anime room(though I didn't recognize any of the scheduled titles except Cowboy Bebop, and none of them sounded particularly interesting), and a game room, where I actually spent most of my time, among other things. Oh, and there was a Voltron panel that I sat in for the first few minutes of, but had to leave to help set up a concert room with my family - my dad is a semi-amateur sound engineer - though I doubt I missed much, there was almost no else there, and only one of the two people who was scheduled to run the panel showed. Probably cause it was early in the morning, I think... Oh, well, ce la vie. It was a fairly enjoyable weekend all around, though. Well, until 129, then. Laters.
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From Scorpinac on December 01, 2009
And the epitaph will read "Here lies Habbadash, the excruciatingly stupid!" Sorry I didn't review earlier, but I spent Thanksgiving weekend at LosCon, and though I got back on Sunday afternoon, it took a little longer than I thought it would to get all caught up on what I "missed". And no, I didn't take a laptop with me, my bad. Anyway... Yeah, Habbadash was extremely arrogant thinking he could control Lotor at all, wasn't he? Not the sharpest knife in the drawer, that one. And next hapter this little sub-arc will finish, and then I get to see what you did for the four chapter finale, to wit, once again, I'm stumped, other than hopefully a reconciliation of some kind. Well, until 127, then. Laters.
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From Scorpinac on November 23, 2009
So, there is one more threat on the horizon! I thought there might be, though part of me is wondering if maybe Adora didn't simply pull that hair when she was taken from Allura's arms for the last time, but then since when is a baby smart enough to hide something like that for extended periods? Well, looks like a possible reunion is in sight. The real question is, will it work out or not? Well, until 123, then. Laters.
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From Scorpinac on November 18, 2009
Of course it's not over, you have ten chapters left!

Sorry if I sounded harsh, but it just really felt like they were just dancing around the subject without making any real attempt at solving the underlying problem. That said, I must admit I never thought you'd actually have her leave! I was totally flabbergasted. But there is arguably hope, in that Lotor's finally starting see his own problem with sex, that of the addict. And at least he finally let go of Romelle, that's something, an arguable step in truly the right direction, and the restoration of that painting was a nice touch. A silly thought, but, would Lotor ever consider giving the twins their own male harem, or is he more interested in preserving their "virtues" for their wedding nights? Adora arguably more so than Allesandra since she is the first born and the immediate heir to the throne. Oh, well, until 122, then. Laters.
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From Scorpinac on November 12, 2009
Okay, now I'm starting to get a bit impatient with all this BS. Presumably in the next chapter she'll change her mind or be convinced to stay somehow, at least for a little longer, and they'll start trying to work out how to actually get her past her effing hang-ups, cause I really can't see how you continued this for another thirteen chapters if that isn't what happens. I'm sorry, I know I'm sounding a little nasty now, but now you're just dragging it out, and it's getting a little bit annoying is all. I await 119. Laters.
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From Scorpinac on November 08, 2009
Okay, I misspoke, THEY BOTH NEED THERAPY!!! Yeesh! I can understand the need to get a decent release, but damn it Lotor, so not the right call! Clearly the next fifteen chapters are gonna rocky as hell if this keeps up. Man! What else could go...something tells me I better not finish that thought... To be honest, when he first grabbed Romelle in the harme room, I thought he was going to ask her for advice on changing Allura's mind, but that hope fizzled pretty quickly. Okay, until 117, I guess. Laters.
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From ANON - BRP on November 07, 2009
Hey Michelle/Lotornomiko:
How kewl that you are on adultfanfiction.net!
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From Scorpinac on November 05, 2009
Seems what she really needs is a therapist, really. And it was going so well at first, too.

Two daughters, heh. There goes my fifty bucks... Oh, well, easy come, easy go...

Okay, I'm gonna guess that from here they are gonna at least try to work through the sexual problem, possibly with a little help from a therapist, as previously mentioned, and/or Haggar? Well, until chapter 116, then. Laters.
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From Scorpinac on October 30, 2009
Wow, what a day for them! And next chapter should see the other one born, and then seventeen chapters more to the story, and I have no idea what's going to happen in them at all! As far as the second twin's birth goes, though, I feel like I'm suddenly watching a sort of replay of my own entrance into the world. Yep, I'm a breach baby, c-section and all. As my mom lovingly tells it, I grabbed onto her ribs with both hands and screamed, "NO! NOT GOING! I'M STAYING!" Yeah, feet and but first, that was me. Wasn't I darling? I am a tad bit worried about Allura, though, given how wiped she is after getting out just one. Princess Adora, huh? Sounds a little like the name of the Princess in Disney's "Sleeping Beauty". Oh, well. Until 114, then. Laters.
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From Scorpinac on October 27, 2009
Aww...very fluffy... But again your commentary kind of lacks a warm fuzzy, and now I worry that her tiredness may prove more problematic than she thinks... At least they're actually progressing now, kind of. Oh, well, until 112, then. Laters.
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