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Reviews for Taboo Parallel

By : Strigon2
  • From ANON - Shinko on June 08, 2013
    How about have asuka wear a device that keeps her clit hood back so that her clit is always exposed.
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 22, 2012
    I'm kinda wondering how it would work to have a chapter focus on Rei. Sort of like a bonus chapter to give a different perspective on the story, to fill in some gaps and to add some variety
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 12, 2012
    I like how the quality is consistent chapter to chapter. Shows a lot of discipline not to go crazy at the start and have no where to go but softer at the end. Is Mana going to go through with her earlier threat of piercing Asuka's nipples? That would be permanent physical and psychological damage. I think you've done well to create a villain that is a master of both sexual and mental torment.
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  • From ANON - Johnson on December 11, 2012
    The destruction of Mana is a must. I want revenge for Asuka so badly here. This is insane. That plot bit at the beginning of the chap was interesting.
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  • From ANON - Rez on November 24, 2012
    I really hope that the end of chapter 9 doesn't mean another "Stockholm syndrome"-ending of the story, where Asuka with Musashi lived happily ever after. IMO, even Shinji growing a pair (or a set) of balls to the point of claiming Asuka and Rei for himself would be better than this.
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  • From SomeGuyMonkey on November 20, 2012
    First let me commend you for writing such a long fic, but the same thing every chapter is getting kind of old. It's only been about Asuka getting abused, the original was about Yui and her debauchary. I'd like to see a translation of the original story, it wouldn't take very long to translate the whole story is about the length of 2 or 3 chapters of this version.
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  • From SomeGuyMonkey on March 19, 2012
    You should translate the original Innocent Taboo, Innocent Taboo Touji Kensuke and Innocent Taboo Short Shorts. Reading Asuka having sex in every chapter, even though well written it gets boring. Needs more Yui. I've been hoping someone would translate the originals for a while. I use Google Translate to read it and the stuff that makes sense to me is really hardcore.
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  • From Amitakartok_The_Writer on March 07, 2012
    Oh, God... dear God...

    This story is SO FUCKED UP!!!

    Whoever can actually like what happens to Asuka is an abject sadist who should be locked away in a crazyhouse!

    I'd SO kill Yui and Mana. SO FUCKING MUCH.
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  • From Leeslane on March 03, 2012
    It's kinda hard to work up any kind of sympathy for this OC when he was an unrepentant rapist for the majority of the fic. If he saw nothing wrong with constantly raping and blackmailing girls before this makes it hard to believe that he's really having second thoughts.
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  • From Leeslane on August 15, 2010
    Just some things to mention. The first is that it might work better if you make smaller chapters, also Yui makes less and less sense with Rei's involvement (although that might be your point). Last her rationale for raping Asuka is Asuka's mother, but isn't she making Mana much more like the woman than Asuka ever would be?
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  • From SierraM on August 13, 2010
    Last chapter was freaking amazing. I approve of more Rei x Asuka yuri. Frankly speaking, I like where this is going.
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  • From St. Tabris on November 15, 2009
    Asuka rimming Shinji's mom?
    I am disturbed, and yet AROUSED...
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  • From MrNobody on May 28, 2009
    I would like to see them have Asuka wear a reverse strap on that had a big dildo that goes into her pussy like in "Love Is The Number of Keys."
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  • From koldobika2020 on May 19, 2009
    This is pretty boring. Grammatically, it's well-written, with few errors, but the plot moves slower than a frozen mammoth turd. Tighten it up and move it forward a bit faster. More text is not equal to greater quality. The scenes become boring very quickly, and it has nothing to do with my attention span (which is long, I can read 500,000+ words in one sitting if I'm in the mood and the story is halfway decent). I can't make it past the second chapter. It could do with a more concise editing; whole portions of text could be removed/modified and it would still be both arousing, and entertaining as a story. Obviously your characterizations are in question, but as it is a piece of pornographic fanfiction I don't really hold you to any standards on that. As it stands, the names of any of the characters could be replaced and they would serve equally well. Nothing about the characters or the setting makes it uniquely "Evangelion." You might as well replace the names in this with characters from a series with a larger fanbase, you'd have a lot more fans. Or you can edit in more scenes to make it more of an Eva story, maybe even change it up to set it in the main Eva universe, it wouldn't be difficult. Give it a more involved story arc where there are more issues at stake than Asuka's sexual evolution. You gave yourself so much space for text and then made it 98% Asuka-centric. From a third-person omniscient perspective, that gets very boring.
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  • From MrNobody on April 22, 2009
    I would like to see Asuka and given enemas or sprayed own with a hose or have thier clits tortured(nothing grisly, just like electric shock or clamps or something :P) or something like that in future chapters. :P
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